Unit 3 表达 作文巧升格 教材讲解 2021-2022学年 外研版（2019）高中英语必修第一册

关于家庭的回忆

本单元的写作项目是关于家庭的回忆，属于家庭叙事类的记叙文。在写作时可以从人物、时间、过程以及结果或感受等方面，对事件进行叙述。可以采用顺叙、倒叙或者插叙的方式。

[基本框架]

1．开头——交代事件的缘由：引起回忆的事物。

2．主体——具体描述事件的经过：回忆的时间、地点、人物、事件、特点等。

3．结尾——该事物引发的新的思考或愿望。好的结尾不仅仅有完美的结局，还能留下令人深省、回味的东西。

[常用词块]

1．clean up the old clothes清理旧衣服

2．make up for the lost time弥补逝去的时光

3．instead of making an apology to her for my words而没有因我的话向她道歉

4．with time passing by 随着时间的流逝

5．be strict with my brother and me in study在学习上对我和弟弟严格要求

6．be proud of the award I got in the speech contest为我在演讲比赛中获奖而感到自豪

7．communicate with me heart to heart与我推心置腹地交流了一下

8．book the train ticket online in advance提前在网上预订火车票

9．remind me of the happy days spent with my close friends 让我想起和好朋友一起度过的快乐日子

10．teach me how to make dumplings教我如何包水饺

[常用语句]

精彩开头

1．I was doing...when I found an old photo/a card/a diary...

我在做……时，发现一张旧照片/一张卡片/一本日记……

2．The lovely memory came flooding back.

美好的回忆涌上心头。

3．How time flies！时光飞逝！

4．I couldn't wait to share them with you.

我迫不及待地想和你分享。

丰满主体

1．It was a special day...years ago.

那是……年前的一个特别的日子。

2．I decided to surprise...

我决定给……一个惊喜。

3．I was about to throw everything back when my mother came in.

我正准备把所有东西都扔掉，这时妈妈进来了。

4．When I．..，my eyes watered.

当我……的时候，我的眼睛湿润了。

余味结尾

1．Love is indeed a magical ingredient.

爱确实是一种神奇的因素。

2．I hope I will make...for her.

我希望我能为她做……

假如你是李华，你在整理书架时偶然看到妈妈曾经为了帮助你摆脱压力而写给你的一堆卡片。这些卡片让你开始了快乐的学习。请你写封电子邮件，把这段美好回忆分享给你的好友Tom。

注意：词数80左右。

[学生习作]

Dear Tom，

This weekend I was cleaning up my bookshelf.I found a pile of cards.When I saw the words on each card，I cried.They made me think of something.

The pressure was large at the beginning of senior life.I was afraid of failing the tests.Mum was careful.She found my problem.She put a card on my desk every morning to encourage me.Gradually，I became happy again in my studies.Mum told me to work hard little by little and then succeed.

Yours，

Li Hua

名师点评：

1．所使用的句子较简单，复杂句式较少；

2．描述事情仅限于过程的罗列，没能充分表达出回忆的内容。

[升格作文]

Dear Tom，

While I was cleaning up my bookshelf，I found a stack of cards.Reading the words on them my eyes watered.It was these encouraging cards that helped me go through my frustration.

I felt pressured at the beginning of high school and was afraid of falling behind others.Soon Mum found my problem.From then on，I could find a special card on my desk every morning.Gradually，I became less anxious and found pleasure in my studies.Mum makes me understand that pressure can't be avoided.What counts is how to deal with it.

Yours，

Li Hua

假定你是李华，你在整理书架时看到一张全家照，请写封信并寄出这张照片，把自己的家庭成员 给你的新朋友Tom介绍一下。

注意：词数80左右

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[参考范文]　

Dear Tom，

This weeked I was cleaning up m y bookshell，I found a photograph of my family.

There are five people in it.The tallest one is my father.He is forty­eight years old.My mother is standing beside him.She is not tall as my father.She is  three years younger than my father.Sitting in front of them are my grandparents.My grandfather is that fat one with a pair of glasses.My grandmother is as fat as he.This little one is me.I'm sitting betweet them.

All of us love one another.I have a happy family.

Yours，

Li Hua