2023届高考英语复习：读后续写：Sedona hiking trails 课件

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Sedna hiking trails can be fun and relaxing, but smetimes can als be challenging and dangerus. Rgers, 33, an n-duty airman, was in twn frm Clrad Springs fr adventures n Sedna trails. Even he had just taken a sharp turn n his muntain bike in April 2020 when he was stpped shrt by the sight f a wman sitting n the side f the trail. She was cute and had lng blnd hair and big expressive eyes. What he didn’t knw then was that she was als in extreme pain. Sydney Linden, 28, had been jgging dwn Adbe Jack Trail in Sedna, Arizna, fr a picturesque sunset view f the Red Rcks when she hpped ver a rck and her leg ver extended n the landing. The pain was instant. Her right leg cllapsed and she hit the dirt hard. Linden tried t stand but cllapsed. She wasn’t sure if she had trn her ACL (十字韧带), brken her leg, r smething else. All she knew was that the pain was a 15 ut f 10. Althugh it was spring, the Arizna sun beat dwn relentlessly (无情地). Linden dragged herself t the shade, as if an animal preparing t die. She’d called a friend, but after 30 minutes, her friend was lst. That’s when she saw the muntain biker. Rgers was trying t play it cl. He casually rde by at a slwer speed, stealing a glance at the wman. Sensing her suffering, Rgers stpped and asked if he culd help. Linden explained her situatin and that’s when he nticed the swelling under her leggings. She needed a hspital ---- nw. Rgers helped Linden t her feet and they began the steep (陡坡) ver the rcky regin and desert bushes. It was a lng way t g. Leaning n Rgers, Linden tried t hp alng, but the pain was severe. She wuld never make it t the trailhead (登山口) this way. Para. 1 Then Rgers had anther idea. ____________Para. 2 It was after the peratin that Linden fund Rgers gne. _______________
Rgers helped but failed
ne day in Spring (but very ht)
Sedna, Arizna
Linden, 28
rde a muntain bike fr adventures n Sedna trails
jggingfr a picturesque sunset view f the Red Rcks
tried t play it cl casually rde by at a slwer speedstealing a glance at stpped and asked nticed
hpped ver a rck her leg ver extended n the landingright leg cllapsed hit the dirt hard tried t stand but cllapsed trn her ACL brken her leg r smething elesthe pain was a 15 ut f 10 dragged herself t the shade called a friend but the friend was lst
Rgers· helped Linden t her feet
Linden· leaned n Rgers · tried t hp alng
smetimes can als be challenging and dangerus
Linden was in extreme painthe pain was a 15 ut f 10 the pain was severe
wasn’t sure if she had trn her ACL, brken her leg, r smething else
spring, but the sun beat dwn relentlessly
dragged ... shade, as if an animal preparing t die
called a friend, but she / he was lst
varius difficulties / unexpected situatins
交叉的叙事角度，全知视角
beginning: 交代物象及主要人物的人生关系develping & climax :跌宕起伏，少繁琐叙述，突出感人细节ending: 铿锵有力，寓意深刻，照应开头
gratitude?
Sedna hiking trails can be fun and relaxing, but smetimes can als be challenging and dangerus. Rgers, 33, ... What he didn’t knw then was that she was als in extreme pain. Sydney Linden, 28, ... The pain was instant. Her right leg cllapsed and she hit the dirt hard. Linden tried t stand but cllapsed. She wasn’t sure if she had trn her ACL (十字韧带), brken her leg, r smething else. All she knew was that the pain was a 15 ut f 10. Althugh it was spring, the Arizna sun beat dwn relentlessly (无情地). Linden dragged herself t the shade, as if an animal preparing t die. Rgers was trying t play it cl. ... She needed a hspital ---- nw. Rgers helped Linden t her feet and they began the steep (陡坡) ver the rcky regin and desert bushes. It was a lng way t g. Leaning n Rgers, Linden tried t hp alng, but the pain was severe. She wuld never make it t the trailhead (登山口) this way. Para. 1 Then Rgers had anther idea. ____________Para. 2 It was after the peratin that Linden fund Rgers gne. _____
pssible plt 1:
Hw t end the stry? → can be challenging and dangerus, but can als be fun and relaxing.
pssible plt 2:
Hw t add the difficulty? → Linden’s pain / pale face / unbearable pain stimulates her nerves / the waves f pain washed ver her /the extreme pain seized her / ...
pssible plt 3:
Hw t add the difficulty? → sweats swping fiercely ut f his bdy / sweat like beans rippling dwn her face / the sun shne brightly / ...
Para. 1 Then Rgers had anther idea. ____________Para. 2 It was after the peratin that Linden fund Rgers gne. _______________
3S主题续写 自问抓伏笔
Q1 : _____________________ 【与首句衔接】Q2 : _____________________ 【情节推动1、2】Q3 : _____________________ 【与第二段首句衔接】
Q1 : _____________________【与首句衔接】Q2 : _____________________【情节推动1、2】Q3 : _____________________【照应前文首句，哲理性结尾？自然结尾？情景交融式结尾？】
Q1 : What did Rgers d? What’s his anther idea? 【actins, thughts】Q2 : What difficulties r unexpected situtins they wuld meet? 【setting, feelings】Q3 : Did his anther idea wrk? 【actins, feelings】
Q1 : Hw did Linden react? 【actins, thughts, feelings】Q2 : What did Linden d? 【actins, feelings】Q3 : Hw t end the stry and make sure the ending wuld be crrelated with the beginning. 【哲理性结尾？自然结尾？情景交融式结尾？】
3S主题续写 自问抓伏笔 词句构建
Q1 : What did Rgers d? What’s his anther idea? Q2 : What difficulties r unexpected situtins they wuld meet? 【setting, feelings】Q3 : Did his anther idea wrk?
Rgers rushed t fetch the bike and struggled t help Linden sit ... 【与首句衔接】
Linden mustered up her strength t take ver the severe pain ... needles deeply piercing her heart desperate grwn and fully pale pace f Linden 情节推动1 】the sun shne brightly, sweat like beans ... 【情节推动2 】
the images f hspital flickered in the distance Luckily, there was a hspital, which gave Linden an peratin immediately. 【与下一段首句衔接】
Q1 : Hw did Linden react? 【actins, thughts, feelings】Q2 : What did Linden d?Q3 :Hw t end the stry and make sure the ending wuld be crrelated with the beginning. 【哲理性结尾？自然结尾？情景交融式结尾？】
Her eyes darted arund and a letter arrested her attentin ... A feeling mixtured thankfulness and disappintment tk hld f her. 【与首句衔接且交互可成推动情节事件3 】
Bathed in the sun’s gentle light, Linden beamed, frm ear t ear. 【情景交融】Even if the desperate circumstance ccurred in life, the tw suls still gt thrugh it with amazing persistance and devted cmpany. 【哲理性】Lying n the bed, Linden reflected n the unusual day, still afraid f the dangerus suffering, and expressed her sinceregratitude silently in the heart. 【自然式】
she tried Sedna hiking trails again 【推动情节事件 4 】
点评： 行文风格与前文相符合。以交叉的叙述角度，第一段Rgers视角，第二段Linden视角，完成故事。且各段衔接自然到位。 充分利用前文的“疼痛”“天热”伏笔元素。故事结尾the warm scene 与原文开头fun and relaxing基调一致，照应到位。
点评： 行文风格与前文相符合。以交叉的叙述角度，完成故事。且各段衔接自然到位。 第一段开篇的一系列动作描写让人印象深刻，把一个细心周到的男士写得淋漓尽致。突出了感人细节，结尾寓意深刻。叙事结构自然到位。
On a Sunday afternn, Kiana French was having fun fishing with her father and yunger sister, nt knwing the next minute, they wuld struggle nt t sink in the freezing water. Their 12-ft bat was taking in water little by little, and the wind was picking up. Her father, Gary French, hurried t perate the engine,while Kiana,16, was in the middle with Cierrah, her sister, frightened but still able t keep calm. Kiana asked Cierrah t take ff ne f her cwby bts, with which she gt sme f the water ut. Hard as she tried, that little effrt wuld nt help stp the bat sinking. Mments later,the unthinkable happened. The bat was full f water and then it flipped ver. Kiana and her sister were dumped in the water. Their father, wh had had a surgery six mnths ag,managed nt t be thrwn int the water but seemed t have great pain in the chest due t the sudden change. Kiana quickly put n her life jacket and saw Cierrah's and her father's life jackets flating away. She reacted quickly t get them back and held her sister nt the bat. They were s far ut in the middle f the lake that they culd nt see the shre clearly. What's wrse,it was getting harder t stay abve the waves. Their father swam ver and hugged his tw girls, Cierrah crying silently.Kiana heard her belved sister murmured,"I can't feel my feet." Kiana knew the nly thing t d was t get t shre herself and find help. She lked up at her father, exchanging a cncerned glance, turned rund and swam as hard as she culd twards the shre. Fighting against the strng currents and cld wind, she screamed fr help at the tp f her lungs every three minutes r s. A strng wind blew,and she lked back nly t see her sister's and father's heads bbbing（浮动）in the water. She burst int tears, thinking her sister and dad were dead, because she was taking t lng.
下水文： With desperate tears , she suddenly sptted a bat with a figure walking n it.She saw a glimmer f hpe. She waved her hands wildly, yelling with all her remaining strength ,“ Help! Help!” It seemed like a century t wait fr the bat t apprach her. A middle-aged fisherman reached ut his hand, carried her t the bat and asked her what had happened. With trembling vice, she replied, “ My Help!” On hearing this ,the fisherman’s face became serius. He headed the bat twards the directin where she pinted at with full speed, nt knwing what wuld happen if he slwed dwn even a little bit. Meanwhile, he called fr help. After a while, they caught sight f Kiana’s father and sister’s pale face. Having flating n the sea fr a lng time, they were n bard eventually. Once rescued , they were rushed t shre , where a cncerned grup waited fr their arrival. Warm blankets and ht milk were prvided t them, making them feel better in n time. A grup f dctrs and nurses checked their bdies n the spt, and then they were sent t the nearest hspital by the ambulance. A lcal reprter interviewed them in the hspital. When asked what made her swam alne in the cld water t save her families, the brave girl, lking at her sister’s sleeping face, said with a determined lk, “ It’s lve that supprt me t find the hpe.” Thugh she still was cld in her bdy, she felt warmth, just like a warm current rushing thrugh her heart.
Gifts fr Jace I’ll never frget the day that ne f my students shyly raised his hand and said that he had never received a gift. My shcked fifth-graders were discussing a reading stry abut a by wh was nt ging t be getting anything fr his birthday because mney was tight that year. Even thugh this class was very pen during reading discussins, Jace’s hnesty surprised even me. What was even mre eye-pening was the fact that this sweet, fifth-grade by had gne ten years and never experienced the jy and surprise f receiving a present. I searched my mind fr a reasn that he might be saying this. Did he want attentin frm his peers? N, that was definitely nt his style. Was he exaggerating(夸大)? Again, he was nt the type. Then I remembered his stry. His mther was ut f the picture and he lived alne with his dad. His father had a hard time hlding dwn a jb, and cming t think f it, I didn’t see his father at registratin r parent-teacher cnferences. Even thugh n the utside Jace was a bit untidy, he always came t schl with a smile and sincere enthusiasm fr learning. A cuple f weeks after Jace’s cmment, he was absent frm schl due t the fact that he had mved away. This happened t be the day I was sending hme the annual nte abut the classrm Christmas gifts exchange. Traditinally, each by was t bring a gift fr a by in the three-dllar range and the same was true fr each girl. As we were discussing the specifics, a girl raised her hand and sincerely suggested that we d away with ur traditinal plicy, and each buy a gift fr Jace instead. The enthusiasm grew as the students discussed the kinds f things they knew Jace wuld like. We tk a quick vte and cnsistently agreed t g ahead with this wnderful idea.Paragraph 1: Days befre ur Christmas vacatin, the gifts began t pur in. ____________Paragraph 2: As I drve dwn his rad, I saw a light flashing, signaling which hme was his._____________
下水文： Days befre ur Christmas vacatin, the gifts began t pur in. There were s many f them that I had t g back and frth several times t lad my car. My eyes fell n the gifts with ribbns tied in bws. What lvely and kind-hearted students they were! I culdn’t help thinking hw excited Jace wuld be when receiving the gifts. I phned t ask Jace where he lived nw. Frtunately, he answered the phne and tld me his new address and hw t find his hme quickly. As I drve dwn his rad, I saw a light flashing, signaling which hme was his. I kncked n the dr and ut came the thin by wearing a big smile as he always did. I led him t my car, pened the trunk and said: “Surprise！” He was ttally rted t the spt, staring at the gifts and chcking ut in a trembling vice: “Are they all fr me?” “Yes! They are frm yur classmates.” I said firmly. He twisted his head t smile at me. At that time, I culd feel his jy thrugh his eyes shining like diamnds, which I wuld never frget in my life.
1. He had just _______________________ n his muntain bike in April 2020 when he was stpped shrt by the sight f a wman sitting n the side f the trail. 2020年4月，他骑着山地车，一个急转弯的时候，因看到坐在路标的一个女子而短暂停留了一会。2. 外貌描写：她长得可爱，一头长长的金色头发，一双会说话的大眼眸。 She was _______ and had __________________ and big _______________ eyes.3. Linden, had been __________dwn Adbe Jack Trail in Sedna, Arizna, fr a _____________ sunset view f the Red Rcks when she ___________ a rck and her leg ver extended n the landing. The pain was ___________.Linden当时正沿着亚利桑那州塞多纳市的Adbe Jack Trail慢跑，想欣赏红岩如画的日落美景，她跳过一块岩石，脚绊倒了（摔倒在地）。疼痛是瞬间的。
taken an sharp turn
picturesque
4. Her right leg cllapsed and she hit the dirt land. Linden tried t stand but _________. She wasn’t sure if she had trn her ACL, _____________, r smthing else. All she knew was that the pain was a _______________. 她的右腿瘫软在地上。Linden试图站起来，但还是摔倒了。她不确定自己是否撕裂了十字韧带，还是摔断了腿，或者其他什么。她只知道疼痛是十五分（如果疼痛等级是十级的话）。5. Althugh it was spring, the Arizna sun beat dwn ______________. 尽管Arizna正值春天，但阳光依旧无情地炙烤大地。6. Linden ____________ herself t the shade, as if an animal preparing t die. Linden拖着（受伤的脚）奋力走到荫凉处，仿佛一只小动物，正在准备死去。
brken her leg
relentlessly