2023届高考英语复习：读后续写：A letter to father 课件

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文本分析 the understanding f the passage
抓伏笔自我提问建构情节
优秀习作和下水作文欣赏
主题语境：人与社会；话题：父子关系重建
It’s hard t talk t dads smetimes. The rles we ften expect ur fathers t play-prtectr，prvider-can make the m seem impenetrable(不可理解的). That’s hw it was with my dad. He came t Canada at the age f ten and settled in an immigrant cmmunity. He was never much f a talker. He rarely drank, s we didn't get t see him lsen up after a few beers. He didn't tell stries abut himself at the dinner table r when we went fr walks in the park. He was a private persn and seemed t want t stay that way. Bringing up the many questins I had abut life befre I was brn-his early hpes and dreams, lves and heartbreaks--let alne sharing my wn feelings, felt like t much fr us t handle. I didn't want t threaten the integrity （完整）f his hard shell. I had gtten used t it, and it made me feel secure. But when my relatinship and career tk a hit a year ag at the same time, things had t change. I was facing serius questins abut my wn nature, and I wanted t knw that he had faced them t. I needed t knw hw he had fund his way, because I felt like I had lst mine. In a severe mment f desperatin, it ccurred t me that sending an email might be the key. An email can be crafted （精心制作）slwly and carefully. I culd speak at a cmfrtable distance and give him rm t adjust. He'd be up in his ffice-a cmfrtable place filled with bkshelves, dusty CD-ROMs and piles f ld newspapers. I'd be at my desk in an apartment 20 minutes away.S I wrte t him. I tld him abut my regrets and fears, and I asked him t answer, if he felt like it, and t share smething abut himself, smething that wuld give me much-needed perspective n my life, especially n relatinship and career.Para1: Tw weeks later, his respnse shwed up in my email bx.Para2: I clsed the email and started t cry.
Read fr the plt and emtins
(para1-2) Dad rarely shared his stries, feelings t me, and I get used t his privacy and hard shell.
(Para 3) As my relatinship and career tk a hit, I was at a lss, unable t find a way ut. Thus I was desperate fr Father’s advice.
(para4-5)I sent him a careful-written emails where I tld him my regrets and fears, hping he culd share his wn struggles and ffer me sme perspectives n my life.
Falling actin
para 1 Tw weeks later, his respnse shwed up in my email bx ????
Para2 I clsed the email and started t cry ???
sad but secure
lw-spirited&bewildered
excited& mved
Relieved&happy
Read fr the characters
I (the sn r the daughter)
imprtant event:
awful emtins he might have had
awful emtins I had
Imprtant decisin I made t talk t my dad
He came t Canada at the age f ten and settled in immigrant cmmunity
My relatinship and career tk a hit a year ag at the same time
fears, lneliness, self-dubt, desperatin
fears, regret, self-dubt, desperatin
in the midst f struggles(在挣扎中)
self-disciplined ; determined; perseverant, but nt talkative, smewhat private
I wrte an email t my father , hping …
Read fr the cnflict
I was used t my father’s privacy and his hard shell. But as my relatinship and career tk a hit in a rw, I culdn’t handle all by myself, and I was in desperate need fr his help. Hw did I get my father’s help?Wuld he pen up his heart t me?
What’s the prblem I needed t slve if I wanted t interact with father?
学生在立意上，很多主要写道在爸爸的鼓励下，我克服了工作上的困难。原因：没有把握原文的主要线索，即我和父亲之间找到的沟通方式，我工作上的困难只是转折点，促使我和父亲交流。
部分学生在第二段写道，我冲到爸爸房间，长久的拥抱爸爸，热烈的表达着情感。原因：对原文人物性格没有很好把握，我和父亲都是比较内敛的人，都不善于表达情感。
The prblems in students’ cntinuus writing
第一段：关于书信内容，部分学生全部使用“直接引语”；对于父亲信里的内容，学生具体到了父亲的某一件事情，如新到加拿大时，被欺负。未在信中给我提出有关工作和生活的建议； 原因：没有注意原文的语言，原文没有一处使用对话，写作语言风格和形式尽量与原文协同。没有把握原文关键信息。
It’s hard t talk t dads smetimes. The rles we ften expect ur fathers t play-prtectr，prvider-can make them seem impenetrable(不可理解的). That’s hw it was with my dad. He came t Canada at the age f ten and settled in an immigrant cmmunity. He was never much f a talker. He rarely drank, s we didn't get t see him lsen up after a few beers. He didn't tell stries abut himself at the dinner table r when we went fr walks in the park. He was a private persn and seemed t want t stay that way. Bringing up the many questins I had abut life befre I was brn-his early hpes and dreams, lves and heartbreaks--let alne sharing my wn feelings, felt like t much fr us t handle. I didn't want t threaten the integrity （完整）f his hard shell. I had gtten used t it, and it made me feel secure.
Self-Questins: My father was hard t talk t . Can I find a way t talk t my father and break his hard hell? If I talked t him, wuld he pen up his heart? What wuld he share with me? Can I write a last sentence that can ech with the first ne?
Design the pssible plt: If I fund a way t talk t my father, he wuld pen up his heart , sharing his stries, feelings, struggles with me. Pssible ending f my stry:I was delighted that I fund a way t talk t my father and finally brke his hard shell merrily.
But when my relatinship and career tk a hit a year ag at the same time, things had t change. I was facing serius questins abut my wn nature, and I wanted t knw that he had faced them t. I needed t knw hw he had fund his way, because I felt like I had lst mine.In a severe mment f desperatin, it ccurred t me that sending an email might be the key. An email can be crafted （精心制作）slwly and carefully. I culd speak at a cmfrtable distance and give him rm t adjust. He'd be up in his ffice-a cmfrtable place filled with bkshelves, dusty CD-ROMs and piles f ld newspapers. I'd be at my desk in an apartment 20 minutes away.S I wrte t him. I tld him abut my regrets and fears, and I asked him t answer, if he felt like it, and t share smething abut himself, smething that wuld give me much-needed perspective n my life, especially n relatinship and career.
Questins:1. Why did I want t cmmunicate with my father?2.Wuld father write me back? What wuld father write in his email? 3. Wuld email be a gd way fr us t cmmunicate?
I was in the midst f struggles, I needed him t help me find my way.
Yes, he definitely care abut his sn. his wn stry, perspectives n my relatinship and career
Design the pssible plt: I received my father’s respnse. (首句已给)He wrte a lng letter t me. In his letter, he wrte abut his stries and his feelings---wrries, fears, self-dubt . He ffered me sme practical suggestin n hw t cpe with my relatinship and career. We later used emails t exchange feelings and thughts.
Culd I design such kind f plt?After I read my letter, I rushed t his rm and hugged him fr a lng time, whispering in his ears, “ Thank yu, Dad, I lve yu.”
Backgrund infrmatin: 美国人在18岁以后，就搬离父母家，独自在外租房。成年人一般不和父母住在一起。 而且原文有提到apartment，可见作者是没有和父母生活在一起。
Design the plt based n the given sentences
Para1: Tw weeks later, his respnse shwed up in my email bx._____________Para2: I clsed the email and started t cry. _____________________
Q1 ____________________________（与首句衔接）Q2_____________________________(情节推动1)Q3_______________________________(情节推动2)Q4_______________________________(与第二段首句衔接)
Q1 ____________________________（与首句衔接）Q2_____________________________(情节推动1)Q3_______________________________(情节推动2)Q4_______________________________(与原文首句回应)
Hw did I react t his respnse. （与首句衔接）What was his letter like , a shrt ne r a lng ne? （情节推动1）What was in his letter? （情节推动2）Hw did I feel while reading his letter? （与下段首句衔接）
Why did I cry? （与首句衔接）What did I decide t d Did any changes happen after we exchanged ur first emails? What were they? （情节推动2）4. I eventually fund a way t talk t my father and merrily brke his hard shell.（呼应原文首句，点明主旨）
Para1: Tw weeks later, his respnse shwed up in my email bx._____________
Hw did I react t his respnse. 2. What was his letter like , a shrt ne r a lng ne? 3. What was written in his letter? 4. Hw did I feel while reading his letter?/ what was his cmment n his letter?
felt pleasantly surprised/excited quickly click the email heart beating wildly
a lng ne, a three-page letter; carefully written, in a tender tne
his stries and his feelings---wrries, fears, self-dubt . He ffered me sme practical suggestin n hw t cpe with my relatinship and career.
Felt mved. Felt like father talking t me face t face
I gt the sense that….
I was impressed by
I immersed myself in his happiness/ laughter and srrws/tears
Para2: I clsed the email and started t cry. _____________________
Why did I cry?I cried because… I cried als because…. A lng-buried misunderstanding gave way t trust f each ther.2. What did I decide t d ? t write him back, expressing my thanks ; keep interacting with him by sending emails. 3. What changes happened after ur cmmunicatin thrugh emails? mre email exchanges, knw mre abut each ther, life became mre manageable and sweeter4. I eventually fund a way t talk t my father and merrily brke his hard shell.
下水作文和优秀习作欣赏
习作点评：该考生在有限的时间内，抓住了原文伏笔即“ He came t Canada at the age f ten and settled in an immigrant cmmunity.”以及作者要求爸爸写的信的内容，和爸爸的一些性格特征。情节合理，可读性强。该习作语言错误少，而且词汇丰富，句式结构多样。有心理描写，还有烘托心理的环境描写。是一份优秀的考场习作。
Para1: Tw weeks later, his respnse shwed up in my email bx. I clicked the lng-expected emails with my trembling hand. On the screen was his three-page letter, which was nt typical f him t share s much with me（衔接句1）. Apparently, the safe distance nline made it easier fr him t pen up his heart, the ne I had lng expected since I was a small by. Overwhelmed by a mixed feeling f pignancy (酸楚)and happiness, I read his letter carefully, wrd by wrd（情节推动1）. In his letter, he first aplgized fr nt being a gd father as I had anticipated, then shared his inner fears, uncertainty when first cming t Canada, and the happy stries between him and Mther .He als ffered sme advice fr my future career and relatinship（情节推动2）. Reading his letter made me feel like talking t him face t face, and I immersed myself in his srrws and happiness.（衔接句2）
para2: I clsed the email and started t cry. The lng-buried misunderstanding gave way t the trust f each ther（与所给首句衔接）. Dad’s heart always had a place fr me, as he erased my fears and wrries by ffering practical slutins that catered t my situatin. He always knew his bys but was nt gd at cmmunicating with me in persn（情节推动1）. With these thughts in my mind, thrugh my tearful eyes, I wrte him back, expressing my sincere thanks fr his stry-sharing and practical guidance fr my future jb. We kept exchanging ur emails after that, and I culd imagine his grinning face when reading my letters（情节推动2）. I finally fund a way t talk t my dad and merrily brke his hard shell (与原文首句呼应). ----by Catherine
Para1: Tw weeks later, his respnse shwed up in my email bx.情境1 惊喜，原本以为邮件会石沉大海情境2 迫不及待阅读邮件内容情境3 父亲的信件的具体内容 Para2: I clsed the email and started t cry.情境1 我既感动又内疚情境2 来回几次邮件后，我的问题一一被解决情境3 贝壳被打开，父子都脱离至暗时刻
Para1: Tw weeks later, his respnse shwed up in my email bx. It seemed as if mre than tw centuries had passed, and frankly, I had lst my patience（情境1）. S astnished t receive the lng-waited email was I that I culdn’t wait t read it carefully, frm the very beginning t the end withut stpping（情境2）. “ Thank yu fr asking fr my suggestins , my by. I thught I had n value in yur wrld ;I was cnvinced yu had n interest in my stries, I have been accustmed t be left alne. In respnse t yu, my suggestins are as ” ）Overwhelmed by the wrds, tears stinging my eyes , I failed t cntinue reading. （情境3）Para2: I clsed the email and started t cry. Feeling a great sense f gratefulness and guilty welling up in my mind , I burst int lud sbs like a yung by. After settling my emtin, I grasped his key perspective n my life----sharing yurself in the relatinship and career is the best plicy（情境1）. In the fllwing emails, he expressed his lnely feelings f being an immigrant in Canada, telling me stries abut his early hpes, dreams, lves and heartbreaks. (情境2：后续交流，问题解决). Uncnsciusly, bth f us went thrugh the darkest f times. Had it nt been fr his breaking his hard shell, I wuld have hidden myself in my hard shell（情境3：父子/女都打破硬壳，成功敞开心扉）.
Para 1: Tw weeks later, his respnse shwed up in my email bx. It was a scanned three-page dcument. Apparently, my dad had carefully cnsidered my message, reached back int his memry and crafted a respnse. In the letter, he shared his histry f lve, lnging, self-dubt, fears and struggles in life. He als ffered me sme practical suggestins n hw t handle my relatinship and career. While reading, I gt the sense that it must have been really tugh fr my dad t settle dwn in a new cuntry at an early age. I was als impressed by the great perseverance he shwed in the face f difficulty. Para 2: I clsed the email and started t cry. I cried because I wished I had pened up earlier but was grateful it wasn’t t late. I cried because in the midst f my wn struggles, his letter instantly put me at ease. And I cried because in the end, it was s simple: I just had t hit “Send”. We’ve since had many exchanges. My prblems haven’t been magically slved, but getting t knw my dad better – and learning t lve him mre – has made the tugh stuff mre manageable and life sweeter. It’s hard t talk t dads smetimes, but I’m glad that I fund a way t talk t mine. 
考试范文 a pssible students’ versin ：
Tw weeks later, it shwed up in my inbx: a scanned, three-page hand-written dcument. Dad, a 68-year-ld retired technlgist and grandfather f fur, had carefully cnsidered my message, reached back int his memry and crafted a respnse-his histry f lve，lnging, self-dubt, struggle and persistence.After reading，I clsed the email and started t cry. I cried because I wished I had pened up earlier but was grateful it wasn’t t late，and because I thught I knew him and nw realized there was s much I hadn’t discvered. I cried because it felt as if I hadn’t been able t ask him anything f cnsequence abut his life in all this time; instead, I had fcused n nt sharing anything abut myself with him. I cried because at 33，in the midst f my wn struggles, his letter instantly put me at ease. And I cried because in the end, it was s simple: I just had t hit “Send.”We’ve since had many email exchanges. I’ve asked abut his childhd and his relatinship with his wn parents. Sme days I can even ask my dad questins face t face withut getting a lump in my thrat. Better yet，he ccasinally ffers stries withut me asking, like the ne abut the time he and his friend Antni skipped schl t see a mvie but gt caught.And I’m talking mre, t. My prblems haven’t been magically slved, but getting t knw my dad better-and learning t lve him mre-has made the tugh stuff mre manageable and life sweeter. It’s hard t talk t dads smetimes. I’m glad I fund a way t talk t mine.
2021.06 浙江省读后续写：我的第一份薪水
我的第一份薪水：文本呈现
My dad, Gerge, nly had an eighth-grade educatin. A quiet man, he didn't understand my wrld f schl activities. Frm age 14, he wrked. And his dad, Albert, tk the mney my dad earned and used it t pay family expenses.I didn't really understand his wrld either: He was a livestck trucker, and I thught that I wuld surpass(超过) anything he had accmplished by the time I walked acrss the stage at high schl graduatin. Summers in the mid-70s were spent at hme shting baskets, hitting a baseball, r thrwing a ftball, preparing fr my future as a quarterback n a ftball team. In pr weather, I read abut sprts r practiced my trmbne(长号). The summer befre my eighth grade I was ne f a grup f bys that a neighbring farmer hired t wrk in his field. He explained ur basic task, the tractr fired up and we were ff, riding dwn the field lking fr weeds t spray with chemicals. After a shrt way, the farmer stpped and pinted at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened ver and ver, but we sn learned t identify different grasses like cckleburs, lamb's-quarters, fxtails, and the king f weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring wrk, but I lked frward t the pay, even thugh I wasn't sure hw much it wuld amunt t. At hme, my dad said, "A jb's a big step t grwing up. I'm glad yu will be cntributing t the husehld." My dad's wrds made me realize that my earnings might nt be mine t d with as I wished.My labrs lasted abut tw weeks, and the farmer said there might be mre wrk, but I wasn't interested. I decided it was nt fair that I had t cntribute my mney.
考生回忆版23分习作When I brught my pay back/check? hme---it was $119—my dad wanted t talk t me.He tld me t wait in the living rm fr a while. Silence reigned the rm. I sat n the sfa, eyes glued t the mney I earned. I kept digging in my mind fr wrds t argue with my dad if he annunced that the mney wasn’t mine. Just then, the dr pened and in came my dad. The mment he sat dwn besides me, I gripped the paycheck mre firmly, ready t argue. Hwever, he gently placed his right hand n my shulder and said, “ I knw yu have grwn up a lt thrugh yur wrk.” Then there was a lng pause. He withdrew his hand and slwly cntinued, “ Yu deserve the mney and the mney is yurs nw.”I was surprised that my dad allwed me t use the mney as I wished. In the blink f an eye, numerus activities I culd d presented themselves t me. I sprang t my feet and kept jumping(jumped up in excitement) , still wild with jy and astnishment. On that day, calculating my budget, I went t the lcal stre and bught many things I wanted--a new ftball , a basketball bat and a pair f sneakers and s n. Better yet, the idea f ging back t the farmer and wrking mre ppped int my mind.At exactly that mment, I realized why my father let me have the mney. It was his expectatin fr my future ,his encuragement and quiet lve. And that was smething I might never surpass.和前文的衔接，文气贯通，看到了伏笔，内容丰富，结尾点题。
不善言辞的父亲 1. 他从来都不爱说话。He was ____________________________________________.2.他没有在餐桌上或我们去公园散步时讲述自己的故事。他是一个私密的人，似乎想保持这种状态。He didn’t ___________________________at the dinner table r when we went fr walks in the park. He was a ______________and seemed t___________________________3. 提出许多关于我出生前他的生活的问题——他早期的希望、梦想、爱和心碎，已经让我们感到难以处理，更不用说分享我的感受。Bringing up many questins I had abut life befre I was brn-his early hpes and dreams, lves and heartbreaks-- felt like _______________________，_______________________sharing my wn feelings.
语料积累——原文亮眼句子
never t much f a talker.
share his stries
private persn
want t stay that way
t much fr us t handle
决定发邮件交流1.在一个极度绝望的时刻，我突然想到发送电子邮件可能是关键。In a severe mment f desperatin, ______________that sending an email might be the key.我可以在一个舒适的距离说话，给他调整的空间。.I culd speak at _______________and __________________.父亲的邮件：这是父亲第一次向我倾诉._________________________that Dad had pured ut t me. 这是一份三页的扫描文件。显然，我父亲仔细考虑了我的信息，回到了他的记忆中，并做出了回应。It was a scanned three-page dcument. Apparently, my dad had______________, reached back int his memry and____________.
it ccurred t me
a cmfrtable distance
a rm t adjust
It was the first time
cnsidered my message carefully
crafted a respnse
鼓励他人的话：父亲深信，尽管生活中有许多起伏，但它仍将翻开美丽的新篇章。Father was cnvinced that life still wuld turn ver t a new beautiful chapter despites its many ups and dwns. 父亲相信我能消除阻碍我前进的恐惧和障碍，勇敢地拥抱未知。Father was cnvinced that I culd remve the fears and bstacles that get in my way and embrace the unknwn bravely.正如一句名言所说，乌云背后有阳光。As a famus saying ges, every clud has a silver lining.父亲的实用的建议让我在复杂多样化的世界里航行.(本试卷C篇阅读词汇)Father‘s practical suggestins wuld aid me navigating in a diverse and cmplex wrld .
情境 ： 不善言辞的父亲给我写了封长长的信，我读后，哭泣了。
I cried because．．； I cried because．．．. ；And I cried because
I clsed the email and started t cry. I cried because I wished I had pened up earlier but was grateful it wasn’t t late. I cried because in the midst f my wn struggles, his letter instantly put me at ease. And I cried because in the end, it was s simple: I just had t hit “Send”.我哭了，因为我希望自己早点打开心扉，但我很庆幸没有为时已晚。我哭了，因为在我自己的挣扎中，他的信立刻让我放松了。我哭了，因为最后，事情很简单：我只需要点击“发送”。
一次打开心扉的通信后，父女（子）在交流上，情感上的变化。Ever since then, we have had many email exchanges. With mre sharing happening between us, we gt a clse relatinship with each ther. Face-t-face interactin even emerged between us as naturally as it was suppsed t be. Smiles began t appear n ur faces and in ur hearts. 从那时起，我们有很多电子邮件交流。随着我们之间更多的分享，我们彼此的关系越来越亲密。我们之间的面对面交流甚至像预期的那样自然而然地出现了。微笑开始出现在我们的脸上和心里。We’ve since had many exchanges. My prblems haven’t been magically slved, but getting t knw my dad better – and learning t lve him mre – has made the tugh stuff mre manageable and life sweeter.此后我们进行了多次交流。我的问题并没有神奇地解决，但更好地了解我的父亲——并学会更多地爱他——让艰难的事情变得更容易处理，生活变得更甜蜜。