专题2.08 续写中人物对话的刻画技巧-2024年新高考英语读后续写提分技能

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背景回顾
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对话是故事角色在故事中相互之间的谈话或自言自语的内心独白。对话描写是故事叙述中的一种重要手段， 在读后续写中运用适当的对话描写，能揭示人物的性格和个性，打破单调，能够铺垫出合理的续写情节，从而推动情节向前发展 。
对话提示词，如 said Winstn、he said、he added 等 (注意，主语是名词时通常放在动词后；主语是代词时，放在 动词前)。提示词的位置可以放在引用的对话前、中、后三个位置， 它与对话内容部分构成一个整体，不需要大写 。如：“When yu were a yung man we were all living in the tree- tps,” said the barman, with a glance at the ther custmers.”
为了避免单调，除了常见的say, ask, answer, yell, call, cry外，对话提示词中还可用其他动词：think（想）；declare（表明，宣称）；admit（承认）；detail（详细解释道）；emphasize（强调）；remember（回想起，记得）；recall（回想起，记起）；cmfrt （安慰）；begin（开始讲话）； add （补充说，继续说）；hesitate（犹豫）；cntinue（继续）；repeat（重说）；scream（尖叫，大声叫）；exclaim（惊叫，呼喊）；scld（责备）；laugh（发笑）；chuckle（低声 轻笑）；sneer（嘲笑，讥讽）；shut（大声说，怒骂）；reply（回答）；sb（啜泣）；demand（要求）；cmmand（命令）；suggest（建议）；persist（坚持）；remark（说起，评论）； agree（同意）；beg（恳求， 哀求）；annunce（宣布）；explain（解释）；sigh（叹息）；crrect（纠正）；whisper（耳语；小声说）；grunt（咕哝）；mumble（口齿不清地说）；stammer（结结巴巴地说）；stutter（结结巴巴地说）；gran（发牢骚）；grumble（嘟哝；发牢骚）；mutter（嘀咕；发牢骚）；cmplain（抱怨）；murmur（喃喃细语）； man（呻吟，抱怨）； gabble（急促而含混不清地说）；gasp（气喘吁吁地说）；snarl（不耐烦地说）；snap（厉声说，怒气冲冲地说）；bellw （怒吼）；grwl（怒吼）等。
对话中的逗号要放在引号里面。对话提示词与引用的话语构成一个完整的句子，引号的结尾常用逗号。如：“ And nw I must g,” she said as sn as he had mastered his instructins.
如果对话提示词在一个完整对话中间，其后需用逗号，且后半句话的开头首字母用小写。如：“Dn’t be late fr supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep t the track s that yu dn’t get lst!”
此外，引号内可使用感叹号或问号 。如：
“ Whatever is he saying？” said a vice, very near, distinct and shrill thrugh the warbling f the Super-Wurlitzer.
“These wmen!” he said, as the machine rse int the air.
方法策略
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对话一般由引用部分、标点符号、对话提示语和其他成分构成。对话提示语后如适当增加其他成分， 能够生动传神地展示对话 。在读后续写中我们可以利用如下方法来刻画人物对话：
（一）增加副词
在对话提示词后增加副词， 加强描绘说话人的语气情感，使对话更形象化 。
[例1] “Yu must have seen great changes since yu were a yung man,” said Winstn tentatively.
[例2] “ In the place where there is n darkness？” he said hesitantly.
（二）并列动词
在对话中增加动作描写，能渲染故事气氛，增添画面感 。
[例3] “ Seven minutes behind time,” he added, and shk his head.
[例4] “Perhaps we had better g n,” said Miss Keate, and mved twards the dr.
（三）增加介词短语
在对话提示词后增加介词短语， 能够更详细地表现出说话者的神态、语调、声音等具体情况 。
[例5]“Yu all remember,” said the Cntrller, in his strng deep vice ...
[例6] “ The Ministry f Plenty’s certainly dne a gd jb this year,” he said with a knwing shake f his head.
（四）增加分词短语
在对话中增加分词或分词短语表示伴随状况，不仅能够增添画面感，而且能够使句子结构更加复杂，表达更加丰富 。
[例7]“What are yu giving them？” asked Mr. Fster, making his tne very prfessinal. (分词短语)
[例 8] “Yes,” said Mustapha Mnd, ndding his head, “yu may well shudder. ” (分词短语)
（五）增加状语从句
在对话中增加从句，使得续写的语法结构更加复杂，同时，更细节化地表达说话人说话时的具体情况 。
[例 9]“At last,” she thught exultantly as she stepped ut f the cab. (从句)
[例 10] “In the place where there is n darkness,” he said, as thugh he had recgnized the allusin. (从句)
学会在续写的对话中正确使用标点符号，在对话提示词中灵活运用不同的动词，掌握展示对话的5种方法，从而达到提高自身语言表达的准确性和生动性。在读后续写中展示对话，能够丰富续写的内容和语言，增强语篇的连贯性，有利于推动合理的续
实践强化
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基础演练
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阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One pleasant New Year mrning, Edward rse and washed and dressed himself very quickly. He wanted t be the first t wish everyne a happy New Year. He lked in every rm, and shuted the wrds f welcme. He ran int the street t repeat them t thse he might meet. When he came back, his father gave him tw bright new silver dllars. His face lighted up as he tk them. He had wished fr a lng time t buy sme pretty bks that he had seen at the bkstre.
He left the huse with a light heart, intending t buy the bks. As he ran dwn the street, he saw a pr German family, the father, the mther, and three children shivering（发抖）with cld.
“I wish yu a happy New Year,” said Edward, as he was happily passing by. The man shk his head. “Yu d nt belng t this cuntry?” said Edward. The man again shk his head, fr he culd nt understand r speak the English language. But he pinted t his muth, and t the children, as if t say, “These little nes have had nthing t eat fr a lng time.” Edward quickly understd that these pr peple were in a very difficult situatin and required sme help. He tk ut his dllars, and gave ne t the man, and the ther t his wife.
Hw their eyes sparkled（闪耀）with gratitude! They said smething in their language, which dubtless meant, “We thank yu a thusand times, and will remember yu in ur prayers.”
When Edward came hme, his father asked what bk he had bught. He hung his head a mment, but quickly lked up. “I have bught n bks,” said he, I gave my mney t sme pr peple, wh seemed t be very hungry.”
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150词左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；
Paragraph 1:
“I think I can wait fr my bks till next New Year,” cntinued he
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Paragraph 2:
The next day, Edward was stepped by his father.
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读后续写人物对话方式刻画导引
【参考范文】
“I think I can wait fr my bks till next New Year,” cntinued he. His father lked at him with a blank lk. He explained: “It is a German family that is badly in need f help. They even dn't have enugh clthes t wear.” Edward's explanatin made his father understand what had happened and he expressed that he culdn't agree mre with him. In rder t reward what he had dne, his father bught the bks, saying, “Wherever we saw smene in pain, never can we turn a blind eye t thse in need. What yu have dne will make them a happy New Year.”
The next day, Edward was stepped by his father. When seeing what was held in his father’s hand, Edward felt a great sense f amazement welling up. He felt the sweetness f helping thers. A few days later, Edward met the family again, and they smiled at him, saying “We really appreciate yur help!”, thanking him a thusand times. It seemed the city was bathed in brilliant sunshine because f Edward's feelings. It was nly at the mment that he finally realized that whether rich r pr, he shuld d smething t thers. Thus, he can learn that giving is the surce f happiness.
【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了一个小男孩Edward在新年来临之际，他的父亲给了两美元作为新年礼物。Edward拿着美元在去购买自己心爱的礼物——书的路上，遇到了一家贫穷人。看到眼前的穷人，他把钱捐给了贫穷的家庭。为此父亲得知他的所作所为之后，又买了Edward一直想要的书作为新年礼物，再此过程中也让Edward明白到帮助他人的乐趣和意义。
段落续写：
第一段首句内容“我想我可以等待我的书直到明年。”可知，第一段可描写Edward展开了与父亲的对话，并且将自己所做的事情解释给父亲听，告诉父亲自己的钱没有买书，而是用来帮助了别人。
由第二段首句内容“第二天，Edward和他的父亲一同走。”可知，第二段要描写的是父亲带着他一起去看他所帮助的那一家穷人。在此过程中，得到了帮助对象的多次感谢，从而Edward明白帮助他人的意义和乐趣。
续写线索：得到钱——打算花钱——帮助——失望——解释——得到礼物——感悟
词汇激活
行为类
1.看：lk at/stare at/gaze at
2.感谢：thank/appreciate/gratitude
3.回家：g back hme/return hme
情绪类
1.失落:feel great disappintment/feel cnfused
2.感谢:shw their appreciatin/shw their gratitude/be grateful
【典型句式】
[句式1]. Wherever we saw smene in pain, never can we turn a blind eye t thse in need.（never放句首引导的倒装句。）
[句式2]. It was nly at the mment that he finally realized that whether rich r pr, he shuld d smething t thers.（it was…that引导的强调句）
综合演练
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1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Eve stared at the quietly ticking clck and sighed, “Oh dear, anther day spent watching televisin.” She picked up the phne and called Lucy’s number. N answer. “N dubt she’ll be busy studying,” she thught.
Eve had t admit that since her daughter had left hme and started a new life at Cambridge University, she was feeling a little bit lst. All her gd intentins f decrating the huse did nt seem quite s appealing any mre, even thugh she had bught the paint and made an extremely attractive md bard. Bright clurs t brighten her life was the intentin.
“It culd all lk s amazing. If nly I culd stp watching ld films!” she mused (沉思着说). The phne rang.“Hi Mum, I’m just in the middle f an equatin, what are yu up t?” Eve did nt dare admit the truth t her daughter. “Oh, I’m just getting started with the decrating, there’s paint everywhere!” she lied.
T be truthful, Eve wasn’t that interested in hme decrating. Her husband had been the ne interested in interir (内部的) design. That was until he became mre interested in the interir designer. But that was all in the past, and Eve had slwly been getting accustmed t her single life. She had never lived alne befre and smetimes the huse seemed s big and empty. She had lnged fr a rm f her wn, but nt necessarily a huse! She didn’t even feel like making her cakes with n ne t try them. And she had neglected her reading and missed the last meeting f her bk grup.
Eve’s thughts were stpped in their tracks by the cheery vice f her daughter ver the phne. “Why nt cme visit me tmrrw? I have n lectures -I just need t return a bk t the library.” In fact, Lucy had already sensed her mther’ lneliness and bredm. Eve’s md lifted instantly. A shrt trip t Cambridge was just what she needed. S the next day she tk the train t Cambridge University.
注意：1．续写词数应为150左右
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Lucy was waiting fr her in frnt f the library.
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Back hme, Eve picked up a cpy f Jane Eyre.
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【参考范文】
Lucy was waiting fr her in frnt f the library. Seeing her mm cming, Lucy stepped frward and gave her a big hug. Eve was excited t see her daughter, but she wndered why she met her utside the library. “Mm, wuld yu like t g int the library with me t return my bk?” came Lucy’s vice. She hesitated fr a mment, then agreed. Lking arund at the beautiful buildings and sensing a strng learning atmsphere, Eve suddenly felt much yunger, a desire t read flding ver her. Lucy returned the verdue bk and brrwed sme nvels fr her. (90wrds)
Back hme, Eve picked up a cpy f Jane Eyre. It was a bk she had always been planning t read, a bk that wuld change her. She turned the pages f the first chapter. The stry captured her imaginatin and she was s absrbed that she almst missed her lunch. With Lucy’s helpful push she attended the bk grup meeting again. She regained the jy f life. Reading reminded her f her wn capabilities and she felt she culd achieve anything. Thinking f this and remving her bkmark, she cntinued reading. She had a gd feeling abut the next chapter! (90wrds)
【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Eve的女儿去上大学后，她感到很孤独，一天她给女儿打电话，女儿感觉到了她的孤单，所以邀请她来学校看自己，Eve很高兴地答应了，第二天便坐火车去剑桥大学看女儿。
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Lucy在图书馆门口等她。”可知，第一段可描写Eve和女儿一起去图书馆还书的过程。
②由第二段首句内容“回到家，Eve拿了一本《简爱》。”可知，第二段可描写Eve开始读《简爱》，并重拾生活的乐趣。
2.续写线索：Lucy等待——和女儿见面——一起去图书馆还书——感觉自己变年轻——借书——回家后，读《简爱》——参加读书会——重拾对生活的乐趣
3.词汇激活
行为类
1.拥抱某人：give sb. a hug/hug sb./embrace sb.
2.进入：g int/enter/get int
3.参加：attend/participate in
情绪类
1.高兴：jy /pleasure/enjyment
2.激动的：excited/thrilled
【典型句式】
[句式1] It was a bk she had always been planning t read, a bk that wuld change her.(运用了省略that引导的定语从句和用that引导的定语从句)
[句式2] The stry captured her imaginatin and she was s absrbed that she almst missed her lunch.(运用了s…that…引导的结果状语从句)
2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。注意：续写的词数应为150词左右。
M was waiting utside her class. She was feeling sick. She had tw exams that day. Physics was first and she hated physics, it was her wrst subject. Terry lked back at her frm the frnt f the line, then lked away quickly. M thught she lked guilty. She didn’t have a prblem with physics. She didn’t have a prblem with anything!
“Hi, M, it’s yur favurite exam tday!” said Nima as she arrived. Terry lked back again. “What’s wrng with her?” said Nima. “I thught yu were friends.” “Yes, s did I,” said M. “But she lks absent-minded and acts strangely these days. She prmised t help me revise fr the physics exam, but then she ignred all my calls and texts!” said M angrily while ging int the exam rm.
M culdn’t answer questin number five. She lked up and saw Terry sitting in the next rw. M was surprised. Terry was hlding her phne under the table and she was reading frm it. Is that hw Terry always gt gd grades? She felt really angry at Terry and thught abut telling the teacher, but what wuld everyne else think f her? It wasn’t fair! M never cheated and she failed lts f exams. Terry had already put her phne away when M lked up again. She lked back at M and smiled sadly. “Stp writing and put yur pens dwn” said Mr Reed as he started t cllect the exam papers. Oh n, M hadn’t answered tw f the questins. She was ging t fail again!
The next exam was histry. That was M’s favurite subject but she didn’t feel gd. “It wasn’t fair!” she thught. “Terry was getting gd grades by cheating all that time. And I thught we were friends!” Just then, Mr Reed walked past her table. “Mr Reed...”
M was sitting behind Terry again in the histry exam, but Terry didn’t take her phne ut. M was feeling bad again. Why did she tell Mr Reed? But it was t late nw. He wanted her t lk at him and nd if she saw that Terry had her phne in the exam. She was n the last questin when she saw that Terry had her phne under the table. Withut thinking, M lked up and ndded t Mr Reed.
注意: ​
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Terry was lking at her phne and didn’t hear him as he walked silently up t her table.
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M was leaving schl when she heard ftsteps behind her. It was Terry.
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【参考范文】
Terry was lking at her phne and didn’t hear him as he walked silently up t her table. Thugh feeling uneasy and restless, she lked at Mr.Reed and ndded.With her eyes glued t the phne, it wasn’t until the teacher patted n her back that Terry nticed Mr. Reed. Immediately, Terry was asked t leave.Terry rushed ut f the class, crying all the way. Instead f feeling relaxed, M had ants in her pants.She felt guilty fr telling Mr.Reed abut it, which had resulted in Terry’s nt finishing her exam.
M was leaving schl when she heard ftsteps behind her. It was Terry. It was Terry wh had just cme ut f the teacher’s ffice. Feeling embarrassed, M wanted t run away. Nevertheless, Terry stpped her and said, “M, I’m srry I haven’t kept my prmise t help yu review, but my father has been badly ill fr tw weeks.Tday he had a significant peratin.I was s wrried abut him that I kept n reading the texts n the phne sent by my mther t get the latest news abut him, s Mr. Reed frgave me. Can yu frgive me?” “Of curse! Let’s g t the hspital t see yur father.” M culdn’t wait t reply.
【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了莫不擅长物理，希望特里可以帮自己复习，但是特里没有帮忙，在考试中，莫误以为特里看手机是在作弊，所以在下一场的历史考试中，通过向老师点头的方式举报了特里。
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“特里正在看她的手机，当里德先生默默地走向她的桌子时，特里没有听到他的声音。”可知，第一段可描写里德先生发现特里作弊，要求特里离开考场，莫感到内疚。
②由第二段首句内容“莫正要学校，这时听到身后有脚步声。是特里”可知，第二段可描写特里向莫解释没有帮助莫复习功课和看手机的原因，莫决定陪特里一起去看望他的父亲。
2.续写线索：被里德先生发现——特里离开考场——莫内疚——特里追来——特里解释——原谅
3.词汇激活
行为类
①导致：result in/lead t/cause
②完成考试：finish her exam/cmplete her test
③逃跑：run away/flee/escape
情绪类
①感觉不安：feel uneasy/feel upset/get upset
②尴尬的：embarrassed/awkward
【典型句式】
【句式1】She felt guilty fr telling Mr. Reed abut it, which had resulted in Terry’s nt finishing her exam.（由关系代词which引导非限制性定语从句）
【句式2】I was s wrried abut him that I kept n reading the texts n the phne sent by my mther t get the latest news abut him, s Mr. Reed frgave me.（由引导结果状语从句）
策略
表达举例
使用目的
用动词凸显
He explained: “It is a German family that is badly in need f help. ..”
解释原因
增加分词短语
his father bught the bks, saying,...
补充说明要点
用“分词短语+感叹号+作状语的名词”
smiled at him, saying “We really appreciate yur help!”, thanking him a thusand times
强化感激之意
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