Unit 1 表达 作文巧升格 教材讲解 2021-2022学年 外研版（2019）高中英语必修第一册

写一篇日记

日记是一种记事文体，就是把自己在当天生活中所经历的有意义的事情或者所见、所闻、所想记录下来。

格式

一般是在左上角写上当天的日期、星期，右上角写上当天的天气情况。

常用素材

日记是以记叙一天生活中所见、所闻、所做或所思为内容的一种文体。

[基本框架]

1．书端——用于记载写日记的日期、星期和天气情况。它位于正文上面的第一行，顶格写起。日期和星期写在第一行的左上角，天气情况写在第一行的右上角。

(1)日期和星期写在左上角。

①若年、月、日都写时，通常以月、日、年或日、月、年为顺序。月份可以缩写，年份前用逗号隔开。例如：Sept.8，2019 或者8 September，2019。年份也可以省略不写。

②如果要写星期，星期要紧挨日期，它既可以放在日期前面，也可以放在日期后面，也可以省略不写。例如：Sunday，Sept.8，2019或Sept.8，2019，Sunday。

(2)天气情况必不可少。描写各种天气的词汇：sunny，nice，cloudy，rainy，snowy，windy，foggy，hot，warm，cool，cold等。天气通常位于日记的右上角。

2．主体——交代故事涉及的人物、时间和地点，具体描述事件发生的原因、经过和结果。

(1)时态

日记中所记述的事情通常发生在过去，常用一般过去时；但当记述天气、描写景色或展望未来时，可以用一般现在时或一般将来时。

(2)人称

日记多采用第一人称I或we来叙述当天所发生的事情。但在写作过程中，免不了要描述他人，就要依实际而定使用不同人称。

3．结尾——对事件的分析和感受

[常用词块]

1．vary from season to season 因季节不同而不同

2．remind me of my happy childhood

让我想起了幸福的童年时光

3．realise my dream实现我的梦想

4．enjoy the sights欣赏景观

5．taste the local food品尝当地饭菜

6．be impressed by the royal construction

对皇家建筑印象深刻

7．leave a deep impression in my mind

在我脑海里留下了深刻印象

8．meet one of my former classmates by chance

偶遇了一个以前的同学

9．talk about the good memories of junior high

聊起了初中的美好回忆

10．a sunny morning with cool wind blowing

一个阳光明媚的早晨，凉风吹拂

[常用语句]

精彩开头

1．In the morning，it was very fine！I decided to climb the mountain with my family.

早上，天气很好！我决定和家人一起去爬山。

2．The air on the mountain is very fresh.The flowers，plants and trees on the mountains all seem extremely beautiful.

山上的空气很新鲜。山上的花草树木都显得格外美丽。

3．You can imagine how charming it used to be：sweet/fresh air，clean water，green grass，swimming fish，flying birds，and the golden sunshine.

你可以想象它过去是多么迷人：新鲜的空气、清澈的水、嫩绿的草、畅游的鱼、飞翔的鸟和金色的阳光。

丰满主体

1．I'm very happy today because it's the first time that I have come to visit...

今天我很高兴，因为这是我第一次来参观……

2．Hardly had I stepped out when it began to pour.

我一出门，天就下起了倾盆大雨。

3．Our hometown has changed so greatly that I could hardly recognise it.

我们的家乡变化很大，我几乎认不出来了。

4．On the way home at noon，I caught sight of several students going home happily.

在回家的路上，我看见几个学生高兴地回家。

余味结尾

1．We really had a pleasant time today.

我们今天真的过得很愉快。

2．What a significant day I had today!

今天是我意义非凡的一天！

3．What happened today has left a deep impression in my mind.

今天发生的事给我留下了深刻的印象。

根据下列内容，以第一人称形式用英语写一篇日记。

星期一，10月6日下午，风和日丽，我与李红一起走在回家的路上。突然听到呼救声，我们发现一个小女孩在河水中挣扎。李红连衣服都没来得及脱就跳入水中，她艰难地把落水的女孩拖上河岸。平时，李红学习努力，尊敬老师，与同学们相处得不错，总是乐于助人。她为我们树立了好榜样，我们应该向她学习。

[学生习作]

October 6，Monday                                  Sunny and warm

This afternoon，we went home after school.Suddenly we hear a cry for help.We find a little girl.She was struggling in the river.My classmate Li Hong jumps into the water without taking off her clothes.She took great trouble to pull the girl to the bank.With her help，we saved the girl.

Li Hong is a good student at school.She studies hard.She respects the teachers and she gets on well with us.She is always ready to help others.She is loved by us.She has set a good example to us.We should learn from her.

名师点评：

1．简单句用的太多，应该恰当使用复杂句式为文章增色；

2．时态前后不一致，不符合日记的格式；

3．同一主语多次使用，应改为并列句或复合句。

[升格作文]

October 6，Monday                                  Sunny and warm

This afternoon，after school we were on our way home when we suddenly heard a cry for help.We found a little girl struggling in the river.My classmate Li Hong jumped into the water without taking off her clothes.She took great trouble to pull the girl to the bank.With her help，the girl was saved.

Li Hong is a good student at school.She studies hard，respects the teachers and gets on well with us.Always ready to help others，she is loved by us.We should learn from her because she has set a good example to us.

根据下列内容，以第一人称形式用英语写一篇日记。

星期五，5月4日放学后，我回到家发现妈妈生病了。我决定照顾妈妈，并且自己动手做饭，最后艰难的做完了饭还把自己烧伤了。本以为妈妈会不喜欢自己做的饭，没想到妈妈夸我做的饭好吃，她很高兴。我知道妈妈是在鼓励我自己做事情。

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[参考范文]

May 4，Friday                                             cloudy

When I got home after school，I found my mother lying in bed.She was ill.

Since mother was ill，I must take good care of her，so I decided to try cooking by myself.I did the cooking with great difficulty and it got burnt at last.

I had thought mother would never like it，but mother praised me for the meal I had cooked.She said，“It tastes delicious，I'm very pleased with it.”

I know that mother is encouraging me to do more by myself.