专题03 读后续写速成：“故事山”分析法123

这是一份专题03 读后续写速成：“故事山”分析法123，共16页。试卷主要包含了“故事山”的核心， 如何写好读后续写的结尾13， 行为描写等内容，欢迎下载使用。

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\l "_Tc6011" Part1.“故事山”的核心：故事高潮 PAGEREF _Tc6011 1
\l "_Tc14656" Part2. 如何用“冲突”营造故事的高潮？ PAGEREF _Tc14656 3
\l "_Tc30675" 方法1.增加外部冲突 PAGEREF _Tc30675 3
\l "_Tc11297" 1）角色之间的冲突 (人物观点差异, 竞争需要等) PAGEREF _Tc11297 3
\l "_Tc27669" 2) 角色与环境之间的冲突 PAGEREF _Tc27669 3
\l "_Tc20180" 3) 时间依赖的发展 ：决策变得紧急 PAGEREF _Tc20180 3
\l "_Tc21304" 4) 增加的障碍：人物角色必须克服 挑战, 以达到他们的目标 PAGEREF _Tc21304 4
\l "_Tc17113" 方法2. 放大内心冲突 PAGEREF _Tc17113 4
\l "_Tc13693" 方法3. 使用环境描写增加不确定性 PAGEREF _Tc13693 5
\l "_Tc12583" Part3. 如何通过场景营造心情 PAGEREF _Tc12583 5
\l "_Tc15060" 方法 1: 拟人 PAGEREF _Tc15060 5
\l "_Tc382" 方法2: 明喻 PAGEREF _Tc382 6
\l "_Tc13665" 方法3: 暗喻 PAGEREF _Tc13665 6
\l "_Tc10566" 方法4: 生动的形容词 PAGEREF _Tc10566 6
\l "_Tc26967" 方法5: 否定描述 PAGEREF _Tc26967 6
\l "_Tc13972" 方法6: 摄影-全景+放大 PAGEREF _Tc13972 7
\l "_Tc17538" 方法7: 细节名词 PAGEREF _Tc17538 7
\l "_Tc8188" 方法8: 感官 PAGEREF _Tc8188 7
\l "_Tc2862" Part4. 如何写好读后续写的开头 PAGEREF _Tc2862 9
\l "_Tc2862" Part5. 如何写好读后续写的结尾13
13 \l "_Tc382" 方法2: 升华主题15
Part1.“故事山”的核心：故事高潮
文学故事中的高潮（climax）----故事的主要场景（key scene）也通常是故事的转折点（turning pint），是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中的 "危机" 点。有时候, 它只是达到关键时刻或者转折点, 发生了一些事情, 或者主角必须做出决定, 从而导致一个结果或其他。我们在分析叙事类故事或者小说故事的时候常常用下面的图表来表示故事情节。
常见故事高潮示例：
1. A little girl has been searching fr her lst dg. All f a sudden, she hears a bark cming frm arund the crner, and she lks arund t see . . .一个小女孩一直在寻找她丢失的狗。 突然，她听到拐角处传来一声吠声，她环顾四周看
2. Kevin has wrked very hard t try ut fr the sccer team at schl. The cach has psted a list f this year's team members n his ffice dr. Kevin walks frward t lk at the list . . . .一个小女孩一直在寻找她丢失的狗。 突然，她听到拐角处传来一声吠声，她环顾四周看
3. Mary's parents have been discussing whether r nt t mve t anther state. They call Mary and her sister dwn t talk with them abut their decisin . . .玛丽的父母一直在讨论是否搬到另一个州。 他们打电话给玛丽和她妹妹，和他们谈谈他们的决定
4. Lis has perfrmed in the state gymnastics finals. She waits anxiusly t hear the names f the winners. The annuncer says, "And first place ges t . . ."露易丝参加了州体操决赛。 她焦急地等待着听到获奖者的名字。 播音员说：“首先是”
Part2. 如何用“冲突”营造故事的高潮？
方法1.增加外部冲突
增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。冲突带来紧迫感, 将故事推向必要的解决或崩溃。
1）角色之间的冲突 (人物观点差异, 竞争需要等)
【例1】2017年11月浙江英语高考：On the furth r fifth night, we had truble finding a htel with a vacancy. After driving in vain fr sme time, Mm suddenly gt a great idea: Why didn't we find a huse with a likely-lking backyard and ask if we culd set up tent there? David and I became nervus. 开车找旅馆---徒劳无功---母亲建议搭帐篷在他人后院---David和我倍感紧张，心有不悦（母子的观点不一）
2) 角色与环境之间的冲突
【例2】2017年6月浙江英语高考： Then Mac heard quick and lud breathing behind him. ……he saw instantly that it wasn't a dg at all, but a wlf: quickly catching up with him. Mac's heart jumped. ……, he fired the spray at the wlf. A bright red clud envelped the animal, and t Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, ……. Then it ……, tearing pen his tent bag. He fired at the wlf a secnd time, and again, it fell back ……
Mac骑车独自行，路遇饿狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。（人（角色）----狼（环境）大战）
【翻译】然后麦克听到身后急促而响亮的呼吸声。 他立刻看到那根本不是一只狗，而是一只狼：赶快追上他。 麦克心跳。 他向狼开枪。 一朵鲜红的云笼罩着这只动物，令麦克松了一口气，它倒了回去，摇了摇头。 但一分钟后，...。 然后...，撕开他的帐篷包。 他第二次朝那只狼开枪，它又一次掉了下来...
3) 时间依赖的发展 ：决策变得紧急
【例3】 2017年6月浙江英语高考：The car abruptly stpped in frnt f him. "Get int the car." Paul shuted at Mac. Mac jumped ff the bike and slid int the car withut delay as the wlf was just tw steps away and was abut t tear Mac int pieces. What a narrw escape! 骑车突停面前---急喊上车---Max上车避险---饿狼近在咫尺（此情此景，刻不容缓）
【翻译】汽车突然停在他面前。 “上车。” 保罗对麦克喊道。 麦克从自行车上跳下来，毫不拖延地滑进了车里，因为狼就在两步外，正要把麦克撕成碎片。 多么狭窄的逃生通道啊！
4) 增加的障碍：人物角色必须克服 挑战, 以达到他们的目标
【例4】2018年6月高考But befre we jumped ff the hrses, we fund that we had been ff the beaten track and gt lst. We had n idea where we were and it gt dark. Exhausted and hungry, I wndered if we culd find ur way back. 小兔突现---马儿受惊---草原迷路（障碍1）----天色渐黑（障碍2）----又累又饿（障碍3）----心理恐慌（障碍4）
【翻译】但在我们跳下马之前，我们发现我们已经离开了被打败的轨道，迷路了。 我们不知道我们在哪天天黑了。 我又累又饿，想知道我们能不能找到回去的路。
方法2. 放大内心冲突
放大内心冲突（你的角色的内心斗争）也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。
现在我们在来看高考读后续写中的内心冲突是如何体现的：
【例5】2016年10月浙江高考： Immediately, an abslute darkness ruled the frest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay dwn near a stne, missing her family at a distance. All the fantastic memry crwded in and she culdn't help crying, "Hadn't I quarrelled with Tm, walked away and climbed t the high place, I wuldn't be trapped in this awful place, cnfrnted with the danger f dying.” She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
夫妇争吵---独自行走---荒野走散---夜色渐黑---独处森林---阴森恐怖---后悔莫及（内心冲突的刻画）内心独白（往昔对比+虚拟语气使用+旁边描写是常见技巧之一）
【翻译】立刻，一片绝对的黑暗统治着森林。 简精疲力竭，又害怕，躺在一块石头附近，远远地想念她的家人。 所有奇妙的记忆都涌了进来，她忍不住哭了起来，“要不是我和汤姆吵架，走开，爬到高处，我就不会被困在这个可怕的地方，面对死亡的危险。”她带着无尽的焦虑后悔了，然后在她眼里闪着泪花睡着了。
方法3. 使用环境描写增加不确定性
充分利用环境描写可以起到烘托故事高潮的作用，具体方法可以看上期读后续写微技能。当故事角色在碰到困难时候，我们往往要加大笔墨来描写故事环境的黑暗，恐怖和不祥。强化环境描写增强了高潮元素。我们感受到了紧张的倍增。
【例6】Immediately, an abslute darkness ruled the frest(黑暗). Even wrse, the temperature suddenly drpped dramatically. (寒冷）
【翻译】立刻，一片绝对的黑暗统治着森林（黑暗）。 更糟糕的是，气温突然急剧下降。
【例7】It didn’t take lng fr the frest t be envelped in darkness（黑暗）. Her rasping breath steamed（寒冷） in the mnlight and her thrat was parched frm thirst.
【翻译】没过多久森林就被笼罩在黑暗中（黑暗）。 她在月光下呼吸急促（寒冷），喉咙因口渴而干渴。
Part3. 如何通过场景营造心情
方法 1: 拟人
给一个物体一个生物的特征，把它带到生活中。
【例8】
The flwers ndded. 花点了点头。
Snwflakes danced. 雪花在跳舞。
Thunder grumbled. 雷霆抱怨道。
Fg crept in. 雾悄悄地进来了。
The wind hwled. 风呼啸着。
The haunted huse seemed t stare at me, beckning me twards the dr.
鬼屋似乎盯着我，示意我朝门口走去。
方法2: 明喻
明喻是把一些东西比作其他东西，给出了更详细的描述。
【例9】The night sky was as dark as the deepest cean.夜空像最深的海洋一样黑暗。
The stars sparkled like diamnds. 星星像钻石一样闪闪发光。
The snake mved like a ripple n a pnd. 那条蛇像池塘上的涟漪一样移动。
方法3: 暗喻
暗喻说把某物比作别的东西，给描写更多的力量。
【例10】A wave f terrr washed ver him.一阵恐怖的浪潮冲过他。
方法4: 生动的形容词
通过使用更富有想象力的描述，使故事更加有趣和生动。
【例11】：
Gleaming, glistening, whispery flakes f snw闪闪发光的雪片
方法5: 否定描述
通过使用这种更富有想象力的描述，使故事更加有趣和生动。
【例12】：
There was n cushin, n carpet, n warmth, n light and n cmfrt.没有垫子，没有地毯，没有温暖，没有光，没有舒适。
方法6: 摄影-全景+放大
使用电影导演工作手法，你可以给出一个更广泛的观点，然后集中在一个细节上
【例13】Frm the withering trees he lked past the littered farmyard, acrss t the decrepit hvel. Its drs hung sadly awry, the handle brken.
【翻译】从枯萎的树木中，他望过散落的农家庭院，穿过破旧的小屋。 它的门挂得很难看，把手断了。
方法7: 细节名词
场景中充满了我们看到的东西，因此使用了大量的名词，甚至是名词列表来表达那里的东西。
【例14】
The rms were crwded with lanterns fastened n ak paneled walls, tables laid with silver candlesticks and gblets.
房间里挤满了挂在橡木镶板墙上的灯笼，桌子上摆着银烛台和高脚杯。
方法8: 感官
通过所有的感官描写，营造场景，让读者了解你的性格、心情，推动情节发展。
【例15】Wafts f salt-laden air were in her nstrils as the skittery sand n her feet led her t the edge f the waves.她的鼻孔里弥漫着一股咸咸的空气，脚上的滑沙把她带到了海浪的边缘。
场景佳句：
1. The huse smelled musty and damp, and a little sweet, as if it were haunted by the ghsts f lng-dead ckies.
屋子里散发着霉味和潮湿的气息，还有点甜，仿佛是被久违的饼干鬼鬼祟祟的。
2. The sun kept dipping dwn int the cean and the lights came n at the harbr, casting sudden shadws n the grund, illuminating the faces that were just a secnd ag silhuettes. The sky was glden and purple, the cean a darker shade f vilet.
太阳不停地向海洋倾斜，港口的灯光亮了起来，在地面上投下突然的阴影，照亮了刚刚一秒钟前的轮廓。 天空是金色和紫色的，海洋是更深的紫罗兰色。
3. The sun had set, but a faint pastel haze lingered in the mid-summer sky.太阳已经落山了，但一层淡淡的淡雾在仲夏的天空中挥之不去。
4. They rlled up the path, tree branches raking the windshield like angry wardens.他们卷起小路，树枝像愤怒的狱警一样敲打着挡风玻璃。
5. Outside, the air filled with cricket nise, as the sun reddened in its descent.外面，空气中充满了蟋蟀的声音，太阳在下降时变红了。
6. A restaurant verlking a starlit night sprang t my imaginatin like smething ut f an illuminated manuscript frm the late Middle Ages.一个俯瞰星光灿烂的夜晚的餐馆，就像中世纪晚期一份被照亮的手稿中的某种东西一样，跃然于我的脑海。
7. The mn went slwly dwn in lveliness; she departed int the depth f the hrizn, and lng veil-like shadws crept up the sky thrugh which the stars appeared. 月亮慢慢地美丽地落下来，她走进了地平线的深处，长长的面纱般的阴影爬上了星星出现的天空。
8. All brightness was gne, leaving nthing. We stepped ut f the tent nt nthing. Sledge and tent were there, Estraven std beside me, but neither he nr I cast any shadw. There was dull light all arund, everywhere. When we walked n the crisp snw n shadw shwed the ftprint. We left n track. Sledge, tent, himself, myself: nthing else at all. N sun, n sky, n hrizn, n wrld.所有的亮度都消失了，什么也没有留下。 我们从帐篷里出来什么都没有。 在那里有雪橇和帐篷，以斯特拉文站在我旁边，但他和我都没有投下任何阴影。 到处都是暗光。 当我们在清脆的雪地上行走时，没有影子显示出脚印。 我们没有留下痕迹。 雪橇，帐篷，自己，我自己：没有别的了。 没有太阳，没有天空，没有地平线，没有世界。
9. Night had fallen fast upn the land. N mre than an hur ag the sky was painted with hues f red, range and pink, but all clur had faded leaving nly a matt black canvas with n stars t be lked upn. 夜幕已降临大地上。 不到一个小时前，天空被涂上了红色、橙色和粉红色的颜色，但所有的颜色都褪色了，只留下了一无光泽的黑色帆布，没有星星可看。
10．It wuld be a cld mnless night. The sky was dark and lw, the air s chilled it hurt t breathe. Already the grund was laid white with frst and any water that had been liquid under the winter sun had becme ice.那将是一个寒冷的无月夜。 天空又黑又低，空气如此冷，呼吸起来很痛。 地面已经被霜冻覆盖，在冬天的阳光下，任何液态的水都变成了冰。
Part 4. 如何写好读后续写的开头
一个好的故事开头就好比是一个带着香味十足的诱饵，诱使读者上钩并且饶有趣味地看完。而一个拙劣的故事开头，定会让读者大倒胃口，恹恹欲睡。“well begun is half dne！”可见，写好一个好故事的好开头是多么的重要。那么到底在时间紧迫的考场上如何写出靓丽的开头呢？
副词
Carefully, he stepped ver all the brken glass.
Jyfully he skipped up the street.
Para 1： (201610浙江高考读后续写范文摘录)Para1：But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an abslute darkness ruled the frest. （时间副词衔接+环境描写）但是没有直升机来了，天又黑了。 立刻，一片绝对的黑暗统治着森林。
2. 形容词
Curius t knw what was inside, he tipted int the dark cave.
Unable t say a wrd, he was rted t the spt.
(201610浙江高考读后续写范文摘录)Para 1: But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. Desperate and hpeless, Jane knelt dwn, tears streaming dwn her face. （并列情绪形容词）
但是没有直升机来了，天又黑了。 绝望和绝望，简跪下来，眼泪从她的脸上流下来。
(201610浙江高考读后续写范文摘录)Para 2: It was daybreak when Jane wke up. Weak as she was, she struggled t her feet, cntinuing searching fr assistance. （状态形容词+as/thugh 引导的倒装句）
简醒来的时候天已经亮了。 虽然她很虚弱，但她挣扎着站起来，继续寻找帮助。
(201806浙江高考读后续写范文摘录)Para 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse. Afraid that I might hurt the lvely small creature, I autmatically let ut a cry t stp my hrse. (情绪形容词+从句)
突然，一只小兔子在我的马前面跳了出来。 我害怕我会伤害这个可爱的小生物，我自动发出一声喊叫来阻止我的马。
(201806浙江高考读后续写范文摘录)Para 2: We had n idea where we were and it gt dark. Exhausted and hungry, I wndered if we culd find ur way back. 我们不知道我们在哪天天黑了。 我又累又饿，想知道我们能不能找到回去的路。
3. 非谓语
Lking arund him cautiusly, he slipped int the rm and sftly clsed the dr.
Exhausted, he was glad the race was finally ver.
(201610浙江高考读后续写范文摘录) Para1: But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. Feeling disappinted, Jane had t stay alne fr anther night. （现在分词+情绪形容词）
(201610浙江高考读后续写范文摘录) Para 2: It was daybreak when Jane wke up. Feeling refreshed, she cntinued t walk alng the stream t find the way ut.（现在分词+状态形容词）
4. 从句
As he walked, he whistled 他边走边吹口哨
Althugh he was afraid, he jumped right in. 虽然他很害怕，但他还是跳了进去。
5. 介词短语
At the end f the lane he suddenly stpped. 在车道的尽头，他突然停了下来。
At the sight f the snake, the little girl screamed at the tp f her vice.
一看到蛇，小姑娘尖声尖叫起来。
6. 对话或独白
“Let’s see wh gets there first!” Rachel shuted, as she pedaled fast and zmed past Jenny.
一看到蛇，小姑娘尖声尖叫起来。
“Hld n tight!” My father yelled. We just finished bucking in as the caster jerked int mtin. This was my first rller caster ride.“抓紧！”我父亲喊道。 我们刚坐完，过山车突然开动了。 这是我第一次坐过山车。
(201706浙江高考读后续写范文摘录)Para 1: The car abruptly stpped in frnt f him. "Get int the car." Paul shuted at Mac. 汽车突然停在他面前。 “上车。” 保罗对麦克喊道。
7. 人物描写
Mark is a studius by wh lves reading. His classmates ften tease him fr being t hardwrking and they call him Mr. Smart. One afternn, while studying at hme…
马克是个好学的男孩，他喜欢读书。 他的同学经常取笑他太努力了，他们叫他斯马特先生。 一天下午，在家里学习的时候...
8. 情感描写
The mment she saw hw she did fr her Science test, tears started welling up in Tina’s eyes and falling dwn her cheeks.
当她看到她在科学测试中的表现时，蒂娜的眼泪开始涌出，从她的脸颊滑落下来
9. 背景描写
I clsed my eyes t enjy the gentle breeze and the sunds f the clashing waves. Gently pening my eyes, I saw my parents taking a relaxing strll alng the beach.
我闭上眼睛欣赏微风和海浪的声音。 轻轻地睁开眼睛，我看到我的父母在海滩上悠闲地散步。
The cave was dark and everything was silent. I culdn’t even see my hand in frnt f my face. I knew this adventure was ging t be smething that I wuld never frget.
山洞一片漆黑，一切都寂静无声。 我甚至看不到我的手在我的面前。 我知道这次冒险是我永远不会忘记的。
(201711浙江高考读后续写范文摘录)Para 2: We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. I lked ut f the car windw, winding rivers, lfty muntains, sunny beaches and deep valleys hlding me entirely in their fascinatin. （视觉+环境描写+拟人）
我们开车经过几个州，沿途看到了许多伟大的景色。 我望着车窗外，蜿蜒的河流，高耸的山脉，阳光明媚的海滩和深邃的山谷，完全吸引了我的注意力。
10. 行为描写
Furry started wagging his tail and running arund in circles when he saw his master taking a leash ut frm the drawer. Furry was all ready fr his evening walk.
当他看到他的主人从抽屉里拿出一条皮带时，Furry开始摇，绕着圈跑。 Furry准备好了晚上的散步。
(201711浙江高考读后续写范文摘录)Para 1: The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us. Dad exchanged a glance with me. Why nt camp t satisfy Mm? （动作描写+问句衔接）
第二天，我们想起了我们带来的崭新的帐篷。 爸爸和我交换了一眼。 为什么不露营来满足妈妈？’
11. 音效
BOOM, CRASH! The wind was hwling utside f my huse. We were having a terrible thunder strm. I was very scared.
砰，撞车！ 风在我家外面呼啸。 我们遇到了可怕的雷雨。 我很害怕。
12. 问题
Have yu ever been n a self-driving trip? Let me tell yu an exciting trip my family tk this summer.你去过自驾游吗？ 让我告诉你一个令人兴奋的旅行，我的家人今年夏天。
Why des truble always fllw me arund? D I have a "kick me" sign n my back r smething?
为什么麻烦总是跟着我？ 我背上有“踢我”的牌子吗？
神态动作描写:
David excitedly narrated ur experience, eyes blazing with enthusiasm. Wrries came t his frehead when he explained the truble. A smile lifted the crner f his muth when it came t camping.大卫兴奋地讲述了我们的经历，眼睛里充满了热情。 当他解释这个麻烦时，他的额头上出现了忧虑。 来到露营时，他的嘴角扬起了一个微笑。
Part 5. 两种结尾模式
方法1： 首尾呼应
【举例1】2017年浙江高考题
开头：I had an interesting childhd. It was filled with suprises and amusements, all because f my mther--lving, sweet, yet absent-minded and frgetful. One strange faimly trip we tk when I was eleven tells a lt abut her.我有一个有趣的童年。 它充满了惊喜和娱乐，这一切都是因为我的母亲-爱，甜蜜，但心不在焉和健忘。 在我十一岁的时候，我们进行了一次奇怪的滑稽旅行，告诉了我很多关于她的事情。
结尾：Despite mm's being absent-minded and frgetful, she was still a kind and nice mm. 尽管妈妈总是心不在焉，健忘，但她仍然是一个和蔼可亲的妈妈。
【举例2】 2018年浙江高考题
开头：It was summer and my dad wanted t treat me t a vacatin like never befre. He decided t take me n a trip t the Wild West. 那是夏天，我爸爸想像以前一样请我去度假。 他决定带我去西部荒野之旅。
结尾：Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerus vacatin befre. The special trip t the Wild West was deeply engraved in my mind. 我从来没有过这么刺激又危险的假期。那次去西部的特别旅行，深深地印在我的脑海里。
【举例3】2016年浙江高考题
开头：A funny thing happened t Arthur when he was n the way t wrk ne day.一天，亚瑟在上班的路上发生了一件有趣的事情。
结尾：What a funny day. Arthur culdn't stp laughing whenever he lked back n this hilarius experience. 多么有趣的一天啊，每当亚瑟回想起这次欢乐的经历，他就忍不住笑个不停。
【举例4】2020年浙江高考卷
原文结尾：A few minutes later, the helicpter arrived. As we were lifted int the air, we saw the stubbrn bear was already heading back t ur camp. When Elli and I gt hme and develped ur pictures, we nticed this bear had brken an imprtant tth. Like humans, plar bears feel pain, have emtins, and can be afraid. Elli and I learned ur lessn: beware f a bear with a tthache. 几分钟后，直升机到达了。 当我们被抬到空中时，我们看到那只固执的熊已经回到了我们的营地。 当艾利和我回到家，开发我们的照片时，我们注意到这只熊折断了一颗重要的牙齿。 和人类一样，北极熊会感到痛苦，有情绪，也会害怕。 艾利和我学到了我们的教训：当心有牙痛的熊。
方法2：升华主题
【举例1】Everyne has ne persn they lk up t as a rle mdel. T me there is nne ther than my mm. She has beauty, brains, and ne f the best hearts I knw. Withut her in my life, I wuld have n idea whether I can be a famus dancer. Smeday, when I am lder and have children f my wn, I hpe I can be just as great a parent as my mm.（母爱的深远影响）
每个人都有一个榜样。对我来说，不是别人，正是我妈妈。她很漂亮，很聪明，而且是我认识的最用心的人之一。如果没有她，我不知道我能不能成为一个著名的舞者。有一天，当我长大了，有了自己的孩子，我希望我能成为像我妈妈一样伟大的父（母）亲。
【举例2】I am extremely unhappy abut it. I think mney desn’t equal happiness. And free life style als desn’t equal happiness. The real happiness is that everyne lves each ther, and des everything useful fr ur sciety. Mst f my classmates supprt me. But sme f them think mney is everything. In my pinin, mney can’t take the place f everything, such as yur life, yur time and yur happiness. (表达自己的价值观）我对此非常不高兴。我觉得金钱不等于幸福。自由的生活方式也不等于幸福。真正的幸福是每个人都彼此相爱，为我们的社会做一切有益的事情。大多数同学都支持我。但有些人认为钱就是一切。在我看来，金钱不能代替一切，比如你的生活，你的时间和你的幸福。
【举例3】
“Tw reasns accunt fr that yu wn，” the teacher answered. “First, yu’ve almst mastered ne f the mst difficult thrws in all f jud. Secnd, the nly knwn defense fr that mve is fr yur ppnent t grab yur left arm. It is yur biggest weakness that makes yu win the match. As a prverb says, ‘Every cin has tw sides.’ Making full use f yur strength is yur achievement. Please remember that in n case will yu give up especially in truble. Gd is fair t everyne.” (借用名言警句来升华主题）“有两个原因可以解释为什么你赢了，”老师回答。“首先，你几乎掌握了柔道中最难的一个动作。其次，这个动作唯一已知的防御方法，就是让你的对手抓住你的左臂。这是你最大的弱点，让你赢得比赛。正如谚语所说，‘每枚硬币都有两面。’充分利用你的力量就是你的成就。请记住，在任何情况下，你都不要放弃，尤其是遇到麻烦的时候。上帝对每个人都是公平的。”