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这是一份技巧12 如何设计动作-高一英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练，共17页。试卷主要包含了描写精准化，动作过程化，语言修辞化等内容，欢迎下载使用。

高一英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练

技巧12 如何设计动作

动作描写技巧略谈

读后续写试题都是要求我们续写人物经历，补充故事情节。在答题中存在的典型问题为情节构思与前文不连接、续写内容欠丰满、语言表达欠生动等。其重要原因就是不会根据文章主题和故事发展的需要生动、细致地描写主要人物的动作，导致续写文章情节失真、内容平淡、人物苍白、语言空洞。以下就是动作描写的三个技巧：

一、描写精准化

怎样使用精准化动作类词汇对动作进行细致描写呢？其实很简单，用一系列小动作而不用大动作，或者用含义比较明确的动词，而不用抽象或虚化的动词来描述，可以使描写更加具体生动。试比较下面两句:

①The little boy said sorry to his mother.

小男孩对他妈妈说对不起。

②The little boy hung his head and mumbled an apology to his mother.

小男孩垂着头，咕哝着向他母亲道歉。

分析：第一句中“said sorry to”不带任何感情色彩,而第二句中使用了具体化的表示“说”的动词mumbled（咕哝），从而使一个不愿意道歉又不得不道歉的小男孩的形象栩栩如生地复现在读者脑海中。除了精准选用表示动作的词语，而且要给动词加上适当的修饰成分。适当的修饰语能细致地表达出动作的时间、幅度、速度、力度等，使人物形象更具活力，能更好地表现人物的鲜明个性与思想境界。动作描写中最常见的修饰成分就是状语，如副词、介词短语等。

例如，在体现动作的迅速和短暂时，我们可以添加以下修饰语：suddenly、immediately、without pausing、without delay等。比如下面两句：

①The wolf also noticed them and turned its head back, shouting at Paul and Becky.

狼也注意到他们，回头朝保罗和贝基大喊大叫。

②At the same time, the wolf also noticed them and fiercely turned its head back, shouting loudly at Paul and Becky.与此同时，狼也注意到了他们，恶狠狠地转过头，对保罗和贝基大声大叫。

分析：第二句中加上了at the same time与此同时/ fiercely激烈地/ loudly大声地这三个副词，把这两个人遇到狼这个危险情况生动表达了出来。

至于有哪些重要的副词，可以丰富我们的句子表达呢？在后面的课程中，我们会有专题讲解，请大家耐心等哦。

二、动作过程化

记叙文中有不少动作描写是一连串动作过程的展示。尤其在展示人物个性的动作时,如果我们蜻蜓点水、一笔带过,就很难突出人物形象,也很难给人以深刻的印象,而通过细节描写展现出动作的过程,表现力便会大增。我们来看下面两句:

①She went to catch the butterfly.她去捉蝴蝶。

②She crept along the path,bent over swiftly and cupped her hands around the butterfly gently.她蹑手蹑脚地走着小路，迅速弯下腰，轻轻地绕着蝴蝶。

分析：第①句在描写主人公捕捉蝴蝶的动作时,没有细节的动作描写,因此显得很平淡。而②句运用了creep爬,bend弯腰, cup（使成杯型）三个连贯的动词生动具体地描述了主人公小心翼翼捕捉蝴蝶的微妙过程,具有极强的画面感。因此,在续写过程中,在必要的地方恰当使用一连串的动词来表示过程,能为文章增添不少色彩。

三、语言修辞化

除了在动词上做调整,还可以利用恰当的修辞手法来帮助描写动作。比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞手法都能让动作描写变得更有表现力。

(1）第一组

①The old man’s face wrinkled.

老人的脸皱了起来。

②The old man’s face was like a withered apple.

老人的脸像一个枯萎的苹果。

分析：第②句使用了比喻，不说“皱起来”，而说“像一个枯萎的苹果”，使得脸上动作描述，更加生动形象，更加吸引眼球。

(2)第二组：

①My stomach was aching for not eating on time.

我的胃因不按时吃饭而疼痛。

②My stomach was punishing me for not eating on time.

我的胃在惩罚我没有按时吃东西。

分析：第②句使用了拟人，不说“疼痛”，而说“惩罚了我”，更加生动有趣。

(3)第三组

①When she heard the bad news, she cried.

当她听到这个坏消息时，她哭了。

②When she heard the bad news, a river of tears poured out.

当她听到这个坏消息时，我泪流如何。

分析：第②句使用了夸张，不说“哭”，而说“泪流如河”，让我们的脑海中，悲伤之情油然而生。

动作描写素材积累

与肢体语言相关的动作描写素材

(1)head

①She turned and headed for the door.

她转身朝门走去。

②He buried/put/held his head in hands, greatly annoyed.

他双手抱头，非常生气。

③Many people in the audience nodded in agreement.

许多观众点头表示赞同。

④I fell asleep as soon as my head hit the pillow.

头一碰枕头我就睡着了。

⑤He hung/dropped/lowered/bent/bowed his head in shame.

他羞愧地低下了头。

(2)face

①Her face paled with fright.

她吓得脸都白了。

②A bright smile appeared on/spread across/crossed his face.

他的脸上露出了灿烂的笑容。

③Her face lit up/brightened/glowed when I gave her the present.

我给她礼物时，她的脸上焕发出了光彩。

(3)cheek

①Color rushed/flooded/rose to her cheeks when she realized she was being watched.

意识到有人在看她，她顿时涨红了脸。

②He felt his cheeks burning with shame.

他因为羞愧而感到脸颊发烧。

③Her cheeks were wet with tears.

她泪流满面。

(4)eye

①He turned his eyes to the door when he heard the handle turning.

听到门把转动的声音，他向门那边看去。

②Tina squeezed her eyes shut and bit her lip.

蒂娜闭上双眼，咬了咬嘴唇。

③She looked at her father straight in the eye and answered his question truthfully.

她直视父亲的眼睛，诚实地回答了他的问题。

④She tried to sit up, her eyes fixed on Joan's face.

她试图坐起来，双眼紧盯着琼的脸。

⑤I felt tears well up in my eyes.

我感到泪水在眼里涌出来。

(5)mouth

①Our mouths dropped open in surprise.

我们惊奇地张大了嘴。

②My mouth started watering when I smelled the food.

闻到食物的香味，我开始流口水了。

③My heart was in my mouth when I walked into her office.

我走进她的办公室时，紧张得心都提到嗓子眼了。

(6)hand

①She took the child's hand and helped him climb the steps.

她拉住孩子的手牵着他爬上台阶。

②He reached for her hand and held it tightly.

他伸手抓住她的手并紧紧握住。

③She shrugged and spread her hands. “That's all I can tell you.”

她耸耸肩，摊开双手说：“我只能告诉你这么多了。”

④She shivered, rubbing her hands together fiercely.

她一边颤抖，一边使劲搓着双手。

⑤Her hands shook/trembled as she lifted the glass to her lips.

她的手颤抖着把杯子送到唇边。

(7)arm

①He was running forward, waving his arms.

他挥舞着胳膊向前跑着。

②He stood there with crossed arms, looking angry.

他交叉着双臂站在那里，看上去怒气冲冲。

③She folded her arms and stared at him.

她交叉着双臂注视着他。

1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

It was pouring heavily. Mabel was all wet by the time she arrived at the sheltered (遮蔽) walkway. From far away she watched the public bus leave the bus stop without her. She shook her head and said to herself, “I should have brought my umbrella.”

Mabel stood at the shelter and watched people get on the buses. The only way she could reach school would be to have someone shelter her to the bus stop and wait for the next bus. The school was just one bus stop away.

However, she was not confident of anyone helping her at all. Everyone looked too busy to notice her. Mabel asked a few people for help. But nobody stopped to lend or share an umbrella. Mabel began to feel disappointed. She was shocked that no one had agreed to help her. She had no choice but to stay where she was. She decided to wait for the rain to stop.

注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Suddenly, someone touched Mabel on her shoulder.

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Mabel finally arrived at her school.

2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语段续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文，续写的词数应为150词左右。

Jackson’s family hired a driver. The driver’s family came to stay with them in a small house in their backyard. That’s how Jackson met the driver’s eight-year-old son Tom. From the day he met Jackson, Tom became his fan. For Tom, 11-year-old Jackson seemed to be a big boy. He would always follow Jackson around.

Tom didn’t go to school. He was admitted to a local government school, but he refused to go. He told Jackson shyly that the teachers only made them copy words from the blackboard. Since he hadn’t learned how to read, he could not understand anything that was written on the blackboard. Jackson felt sorry for him. On Sunday, Jackson saw Tom sitting under a tree holding an alphabet (字母表) book in his hands. Jackson walked quietly towards him and discovered that Tom was holding the book upside down.

Jackson took the book out of Tom’s hands and turned the right side up. “This is how you should read,” he told Tom. Two big tears rolled down Tom’s cheeks. Tom told Jackson, “I want to be like you, but I can’t do anything.” That evening, Jackson told his parents they had to help Tom get into a better school. It was not easy to make Tom admitted to a new school, because the time for admission was over.

Luckily, one principal (校长) looked at Tom kindly and admitted him to her school. The next day Tom went to his new school wearing a new shirt. But when Tom returned from school, he was a bit sad. The other children in his class had laughed at him. He told Jackson, “They all said I am much older than them but in a smaller class. I don’t want to go to school.”

注意:

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式作答。

Paragraph l:

Jackson said, “Don’t worry, Tom, I will teach you to read."

Paragraph 2:

Two months later, Tom returned from school with a bright smile.

3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Money were tight, so I was excited when a friend mentioned an online company that was trying to hire writers. On checking the requirements for the post, I knew this was the job for me.

Part of the application process involved writing a test article. I thought over the topic, spent several hours doing research, and produced my best possible effort.

One of the requirements involved the use of software that was new to me. The new software saved automatically as I worked, so that seemed perfect. That saved me from needing to hit “save” even now and then.

After completing the article, I checked it several dozen times. It had to be as near perfection as possible. When I could no longer improve it any more, I told the company that the post was ready for them to read and sent them a link.

A few days passed before the company contacted me. They had refused me. I couldn’t understand why. It must have been my article as, until that point, they seemed happy with everything else. They invited me to try again in ninety days, but there seemed little point in doing that. I had no idea what they didn’t like about my article.

Disappointed, I thanked them politely and wondered what else I could do to improve my income.

Next day, I received another e-mail from the company. They wanted me to post my article again. That seemed strange. What was the point of posting an article they’d already refused? Following the advice of my friend, I opened my post once more to see if there were any overlooked problems.

I immediately noticed that an editor for the company had edited the article. She seemed to love the piece until she came to the last paragraph. It had too many typing errors.

Near the end, the text turned into three lines of “n”. Here and there, another letter appeared, and then the “n” continued. Over three lines. The word was hidden among dozens of “n”.

I was shocked. How could that have happened? Something must have landed on the keyboard. But how had I not noticed it?

注意：

1．续写词数应为150左右;

2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

At that point, our very cute, extremely curious parrot, flew into the room and landed on my shoulder.

I edited my piece carefully again.

4．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

A little kindness goes a long way. It is incredible how one simple act can completely turn a person’s day around. These simple, precious moments are what makes life so special.

Julie Bick is a single mother of two lovely children, aged 8 and 10, and she thinks her family is her world. She absolutely adored her mom and dad growing up, and she kept a good relationship with them as an adult—although the stresses of life sometimes got in the way of them spending time together.

Unfortunately, Julie’s mom passed away unexpectedly. She wasn’t able to make the memories she would have hoped to, and it bothered her deeply. She was determined not to make the same mistake twice.

Then in 2017, just one year after her mom died, Julie’s dad was diagnosed with Alzheimer’s disease (老年痴呆). The worried daughter was totally overwhelmed (不堪重负的), but she remembered the promise she had made to herself after losing her mother. This news served as a reason for spending more quality time with her dad.

Julie decided that the best thing to do was stick together. She and her children, Carlee and Brantlee, moved in with her dad. They wanted to give him the best life, so they became his caretakers. This seemed to cheer her dad up, which was all too essential at such a critical point in his life.

This new living situation was not without difficulties, but it was worth it to Julie to be there for her father. Still, the woman was struggling a lot: She was a mother, a caretaker, a breadwinner, and an individual. It could be hard to balance it all.

Sometimes Julie felt overwhelmed by the situation life had thrown at her, but she always tried to manage it. She never wanted to show her worries to her dad, because she didn’t want to cause him stress. When she cried, she would wipe away her tears before he could see them. But Julie and her dad were close, and he knew that something was troubling her.

注意：

1. 续写词数应为150左右；

2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Fortunately, Harold, a garbage man, comforted the dad and daughter with his kindness.

It meant so much to Julie that this man would take time out of his day to help her.

5．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

One day, Dad took Tim and Lily to the supermarket. “Now where has Tim gone? ” asked Dad. Lily shrugged. Keeping track of Tim was not on her agenda today. She’d been trying to decide on the perfect gift for Dad’s upcoming birthday. This year, she was determined to prepare a present that couldn’t be bought at a store or ordered online.

“Daddy!” Tim appeared out of nowhere, disturbing Lily’s thoughts. He yelled, holding a cereal (麦片) box in the air, “Let’s get it! It’s nutritious and delicious! And it has a dragon inside! ” Tim remembered Dad saying that when he was a kid, almost every box of cereal came with a toy. Ever since, Tim was certain that he, too, would find a toy in the next box.

When they got home, Dad and Lily began putting away the groceries. Tim couldn’t wait to take the box of cereal upstairs to his room. By the time they finished, Lily could hear Tim shouting. “No! No!” Tim’s voice kept getting louder and louder. Lily imagined each word as the sound of a hammer striking metal. Then she raced towards her brother’s room. The moment she stepped inside, she felt a crunch (嘎吱声) beneath her feet. It was obvious that Tim dumped all that cereal looking for a toy dragon. “They lied! No dragon. Just a picture on the box.” Tim sounded close to tears. Annoyed as Lily was, she said quietly, “Let’s see what the box says.” “I don’t know how to read.” her brother said in a low voice.

It reminded Lily that last school year, Tim’s teacher who sent home easy-to-read books and worksheets insisted that he was ready to learn to read and just needed some extra help, but Tim complained about books “for babies” and “boring” homework assignments. It was really a headache for Dad to teach Tim to read! At the thought of these, it seemed that Tim’s dragon issue had swept away her concern for a present for Dad.

注意:

1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；

2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph 1：

Lily decided to cooperate with Tim, making up a dragon story and having Tim read for Dad.

Paragraph 2：

After what seemed to be a century, Dad’s birthday finally came.

参考答案

1．Suddenly, someone touched Mabel on her shoulder, Mabel turned back and surprisingly spotted a tall and beautiful lady wearing a shining smile on her face, with a colorful umbrella in her hand. A gentle voice came, “Do you want to go with me?” She explained that she had recognized Mabel’s school uniform and decided to shelter her to the school. Mabel was pleased beyond description, smiled and agreed immediately.

Mabel finally arrived at her school. When she sat down in class, she took off her wet coat and socks and felt overwhelmingly moved. There was no doubt that it was her day because the teacher praised her in class and she felt grateful that she was not late for class. Although drenched completely, Mabel was still happy that the lady had helped her on the way to school. She couldn’t help thinking of that beautiful woman. While the lady’s physical beauty was astounding, it was her invisible beauty that she shall always remember.

【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Mabel在上学的路上遇到倾盆大雨，她找到一个庇护所避雨，但这庇护所离车站有一段距离，她希望有人能分享伞让她去车站，但几次求助无果后，她别无选择只能站在那里等待雨停。

1.段落续写：

①由首句内容“突然，有人碰了碰Mabel的肩膀。”可知，这段可重点写Mabel遇到一位好人愿意送她去学校。

②由第二段首句内容“Mabel终于到了她的学校。”可知，第二段可描写Mabel准时到达学校，心中对帮助她的人充满感激。

2.续写线索：女士提供帮助——Mabel接受帮助——Mabel准时到达学校——Mabel充满感激之情

3.词汇激活

行为类

①.看见：notice/spot/see

②.解释：explain/interpret/spot

③.记住：remember/keep in mind

情绪类

①.惊讶地：surprisingly /astonishingly/astoundingly

②.满意的： pleased/satisfied/content

③.感激的： grateful/thankful/appreciative

【典型句式】

[高分句型1]. She explained that she had recognized Mabel’s school uniform and decided to shelter her to the school. （运用了由that引导的宾语从句）

[高分句型2].While the lady’s physical beauty was astounding, it was her invisible beauty that she shall always remember.（运用了由it was ...that引导的强调句）

2．Jackson said, “Don’t worry, Tom, I will teach you to read.” “Can I be the same as you?” Tom asked with hope. “Sure, if you want to.” answered Jackson. Then the two made a reading plan together. On the day both of them went to school, while on the night they spent at least two hours reading the alphabet book. With Jackson’s help, Tom began to understand the thing that was wrotten on the blackboard slowly.

Two months later, Tom returned from school with a bright smile. He rushed into the house and can’t wait to tell Jackson a good news that he was praised by the teacher, who said he made such a great progress in a short time. And all the class were astonished at his improvements. “Thank you,you do make a difference to me.”said to Jackson.“No, it is you who you should say thanks. Always remember, anyone can make a difference, just don’t give up!”

【写作分析】本文以第三人称视角讲述汤姆在进入一个更好学校之后因为不识字而被同学嘲笑，从而产生了厌学的想法，在好朋友杰克逊的帮助下，他学习取得了进步，并且赢得了同学们的尊重，对学习和校园生活重拾了信心的故事。

1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“杰克逊对汤姆说：‘别担心，我会教你读书的。’”可知，第一段可写杰克逊是如何帮助汤姆进行阅读识字的。

②由第二段首句内容“两个月之后，汤姆带着灿烂的笑容从学校回来了”可知，第二段可描写汤姆在学校所发生的事情，以及阅读取得的成效和对杰克逊的感谢。

2.续写线索：帮助阅读识字——被表扬——感谢——感悟

3.词汇激活

行为类

①回复：answer/reply

②回家：rush into house/go back home

③放弃：give up/back down

情绪类

①开心：with a happy smile/very delighted

②惊讶：feel astonished/surprised

【典型句式】

【高分句型1】He rushed into the house and can’t wait to tell Jackson a good news that he was praised by the teacher, who said he made such a great progress in a short time.（运用了that引导的同位语从句和who引导的非限制性定语从句）

【高分句型2】No, it is you who you should say thanks.（运用了it is...who引导的强调句型）

3．One possible version:

At that point, our very cute, extremely curious parrot, flew into the room and landed on my shoulder. He usually flew into my room and stood by me while I was working on my computer. Sometimes he would land on the keyboard. He soon learned that if he ran on the keys, little figures appeared on the screen. At some point while my important article was still open on my screen, I must have left the room. While I was away, he came out to play! He must have done a happy tap dance on the letter “n” and then flown away before I returned.

I edited my piece carefully again. This time I made sure it was perfect before closing the window. I wrote a cover e-mail containing a heartfelt apology and explained what I thought had happened. After I sent the letter, I wondered about my wisdom. It really did sound like the age—old excuse teachers hear: “The dog ate my homework!” However, it seemed to do the trick. A few days later, I signed my letter of acceptance to work with the company.

【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述作者非常想要寻找一份工作解决经济紧张问题，朋友提到一份网上公司的工作时，作者核查了要求感觉特别适合自己，于是精心编辑了一篇文章应聘，自我感觉文章近乎完美，但是结果公司却拒绝了作者，作者很困惑，后来公司请作者再次上传一次他的文章，作者打开同一篇文章准备再仔细检查一下，结果发现文章中有许多无效的字母，作者很震惊，最终弄清楚是自己的鹦鹉落在键盘上弄出了这些无效字母的故事。

1.段落续写：

由第一段首句内容“就在那时，我们那只非常可爱、非常好奇的鹦鹉飞进了房间，落在了我的肩上。”可知，第一段可描写作者想到很可能是鹦鹉落在键盘上弄出了这些无效字母n。

由第二段首句内容“我又一次仔细地编辑了我的文章。”可知，第二段可描写作者再次精心编辑了文章，发给了公司，虽然感觉理由有点令人不能相信，作者还是解释了原因，最终被公司录取的经过。

2.续写线索：想到鹦鹉平时的动作——怀疑鹦鹉——再次编辑文章——解释原因——被录取

3.词汇激活

行为类

①.落在键盘上：land on the keyboard/fall on the keyboard

②.返回：return/go back

③.解释：explain/interpret

情绪类

①.困惑：wonder/fell confused/feel puzzled

【典型句式】

[高分句型1]. He usually flew into my room and stood by me while I was working on my computer.（运用了while引导时间状语从句）

[高分句型2]. I wrote a cover e-mail containing a heartfelt apology and explained what I thought had happened.（运用了现在分词作定语，what引导宾语从句）

4．

Fortunately, Harold, a garbage man, comforted the dad and daughter with his kindness. Harold was an extremely nice man who had good relationships with everyone in the neighborhood. He was known all around the block for his friendliness. Every Monday he would visit with the garbage truck. One Monday, when Julie just spent a rough night and swept her tears, her father approached her and said, “Don’t worry, Julie. Harold is my friend. He would like a day with me tomorrow so that you can free yourself for a moment.”

It meant so much to Julie that this man would take time out of his day to help her. His kind heart left her with a restored faith in humanity. She knew no matter what disease her father had, it would never take away his love for her. Although Harold had picked up their garbage for many years, he truly didn’t know well about her. But when he knew that the father had Alzheimer’s disease, he would take time to look after them. There was so much good in this world, and it started with simple acts of kindness.

【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开。Julie是位有两个孩子的单亲妈妈，尽管生活压力很大，她还是与父母经常保持联系。然而不幸的是，母亲意外过世，父亲也在一年后患了老年痴呆。Julie为了照顾父亲，带孩子一起搬去跟父亲同住。Julie身兼数职，既要工作，又要照顾孩子和老人，不堪重负；虽然从未在父亲面前落泪，但父亲却也隐隐知道她有难处。幸运的是，捡垃圾的Harold用他的善意安慰了这对父女。Harold在得知Julie父亲的病症后，愿意抽出时间来照顾他们，这一简单的善举让人们感受到了世界的美好。

1. 段落续写：

① 由第一段首句内容“幸运的是，捡垃圾的Harold用他的善意安慰了这对父女。”可知，第一段可描写Harold是如何帮助了他们。

② 由第二段首句内容“这对Julie来说意义重大，这个男人会抽出时间来帮助她。”可知，第二段可描写Harold的帮助对Julie一家人产生的影响和意义，从而点明主题。

2.续写线索：善良的Harold出现——如何帮助——接受帮助——意义重大——感悟

3.词汇激活

行为类

① 恢复、康复：restore/recover

② 得知：know/learn

③ 照顾：look after/take care of

④ 开始：start/begin

情绪类

① 美好的：nice/good

② 善良：kindness/goodness

【典型句式】

[高分句型1] Harold was an extremely nice man who had good relationships with everyone in the neighborhood.（运用了以关系代词who引导的限制性定语从句）

[高分句型2] She knew no matter what disease her father had, it would never take away his love for her. （运用了省略了连接词that的宾语从句和no matter what引导的让步状语从句）

5．One possible version:

Lily decided to cooperate with Tim, making up a dragon story and having Tim read for Dad. “What a good idea it is! Dad must be satisfied with such a special present!” Lily thought to herself, feeling a surge of excitement. She couldn’t wait to share it with Tim. Unexpectedly, he shook his head in disapproval. Aware that Tim was not confident with himself, Lily cast an encouraging look at him, saying, “I’ll help you, and I’m sure you’ll make it.” Tim nodded. In the following days, Lily taught him to read with great patience. Then, a new dragon story was born. Meanwhile, Tim also learned to read the story they made up.

After what seemed to be a century, Dad’s birthday finally came. They told Dad to sit in the middle of the couch. Lily stood in front of Dad while Tim stood behind her. “This is a present from both of us! A dragon story written by us!” Lily announced and she could feel Dad was in surprise. When it was Tim’s turn to read the story, he turned to the first page, reading slowly. Having finished, he caught sight of Dad wiping tears off his eyes. “This is the best birthday present I have ever received!” he said, holding both children in his arms. It was at that time that Tim seemed to have grown up.

【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Lily想着爸爸的生日礼物，Tim却忙着在零食里面找玩具龙，没有找到玩具龙的Tim生气，Lily 助他阅读,在Lily帮助下，Tim学会阅读,并在爸爸生日的时候给爸爸读了故事作为礼物。