读写续写：互动描写能擅长，回应主旨须有意 讲义--高考英语写作专项
展开高考英语学习提升课堂：互动描写能擅长，回应主旨须有意
人物之间的“互动”描写在读后续写中大概率地被使用。同学们要善于描写互动。“善于”的体现就在于：能够从“情思言动”等角度进行写作。再具体一点：下面这些内容需要大家非常熟稔：
描写“情绪与感觉”的常用星耀句型（如a mixture of X and Y seized/ surged up inside sb等）；
描写思想的星耀句型（A tiny voice whispered in my ears, “X.”）;
描写语言的小技巧（在句架：“X,”she said, Y中“Y”这个小尾巴在“内容”与“形式”上可以很丰富）；描写动作的常用类别（如“笑哭头脸”的表达能擅长）。
与此同时，还要注意续写能够：“回应主旨”。为什么这么说呢？因为文章主旨固然需要自己创造，但这种创造不是胡编乱造，而是基于原文的线索。这里的“回应主旨”，意即：要照应这些线索。
这些线索有哪几类？我觉得可以有以下几类。
（一）标题。标题一般暗含了文本的主旨。例如这次要聚焦的续写本文的标题An A for Mrs.Bartlett 其实可以对主旨有提示。这里该标题是不是暗示：我们是不是决定做什么，从而对Mrs.Bartlett做最好的回报呢？
（二）文章头尾。如八省八校《拒绝邀请做自己》文本首句：Be yourself and always follow your heart. 开篇就亮明主旨了，那么我们后面的续写一定要遵循或照应这个主旨。这个续写很多同学都没有注意到这一点，写得偏离了这个主旨。
（三）文章的细节描写处。如人物的情感、思绪、语言、动作等。这些地方都可以是“推断主旨”的有利线索。换句话说，我们的续写也要回应这些地方。
基于“互动”与“主旨”两个话题，我来阐述以下读后续写，这是我们“周考二”的一次续写。
这个文章其实理解起来不难，也很容易依据给定两段首句，确定思路如下。 这里的“互动”是很自然的思考结果，它们也是必要的。但是本文的“主旨回应”，则有点困难。因为这需要我们注意且思考“标题”，然后进行巧妙回扣。
续段一 | 我与Mrs.Bartlett 的互动 | 我的“情思言动”有哪些？ Mrs.Barlett的回应。(她的回应一定要“说服”我愿意与“不合群的三位同学”进行合作。 |
下一周（week）我开始与“不合群的他们”进行合作 | 这一句很关键，因为这一句要与二段首句进行照应。记住：这一句是阅卷老师重点关注的一句。 | |
续段二 | 顺其自然要说“我为什么享受与他们的合作” |
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要回应文章的标题： An A for Mrs. Bartlett。 （这种照应对思维有一定要求。） | 我们决定“友谊要长存”，这应该是对老师的最佳回应（A等）。这正如老师对我们的表现结果回馈的A等一样。 |
下水作：
Paragraph 1: I fought back tears as I walked up to Mrs. Bartlett.
(1) But ________ could I contain the tears when I stood in front of her. （我的“动”）
(2) “Mrs. Bartlett, I want to keep company _____ Missy. We are similar. ” I said immediately, _______(convey) that I was treated unfairly. （我的“言”）
(3) At this, the teacher stroked my head and said, “ Karina, I decided your group ____ purpose, ________ you are so excellent, and they need your help.”
（Mrs.Bartlett 的“动”与“言”）
(4) Hearing this, I felt a little _________(relieve). （我的“情感”）
(5) And ________ her further explanation, I decided to give _____ a try. （我的“思”）
(6) ____ the next week witnessed that I made efforts to fit in ______ them.
（我的“动”—— 这句非常重要，照应续断二的首句）
Paragraph 2: Halfway through the week, I felt myself enjoying the company of these three misfits.
(1) Despite the fact ______ they are a little strange, they were sincere and funny
(2) Mauro, who was a new immigrant and had difficulty ________(speak) English, was pretty warm-hearted.
(3) And Juliette and Rachel, who dressed themselves _____ a different way just for their own customs, liked sharing stories.
(4) All of them believed in me, and saw me ______ a group leader.
(5) We cooperated actively and ___________, no wonder that we got an “A” for our project.
(6) While my teammates — three “misfits”— enjoyed our victory, a tiny voice whispered in my ears, “You should be friends forever, and this is an ‘A’ for Mrs. Bartlett’s fabulous ____________(arrange).”
官方版本：
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I fought back tears as I walked up to Mrs. Bartlett. Before I opened my mouth, she gently placed a hand on my shoulder, saying with a knowing smile, “I know what you want, but your group needs you.” So stunned was I that I couldn’t utter a single world for a moment. She had seen something in me I hadn’t seen. Suddenly, a mixture of guilt as well as pride seized me. The power of being trusted made me stand straighter. “I’ll help them.” I replied in a firm voice. I couldn’t believe it came out of my mouth, but it did.
Paragraph 2
Halfway through the week, I felt myself enjoying the company of these three misfits. The project was going smoothly with our joint efforts. Besides, I found out Mauro was struggling with English, Juliette wore long skirts because of her religion and Rachel dreamed to be a fashion designer. They weren’t misfits, just people that no one cared enough about to try to understand — except Mrs. Bartlett. I was lucky to be given a chance to see other people in a new light （用新的眼光）. Mrs. Bartlett gave us an A on that assignment, which should be handed back, for she was the one who truly deserved it.
