上海高考英语作文专项训练：开放性作文

开放性作文

一．Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.

目前，根据规定，上海高中生必须在三年内完成一项课题研究(Project Research)才能拿到高中毕业文凭。对此，大家意见不一。请谈谈你对此规定的看法，并陈述你理由。

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二．Directions : Write an English composition in 120—.150 -words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.

近年来,，广场舞(square dancing)作为一种中老年人强身健体的方式越来越流行，但是其扰 民问题也引发了热议。假如你是上海市某高中的学生李华，你班最近就“你对广场舞的态度与 看法”为话题展开讨论，请用英语写一篇短文，发表在校英文报上。

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三．Directions : Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.

Jenny 是一个多才多艺的女孩。但最近她因为忙于参加各种才艺表演(talent shows)而多次缺课,成绩也明显退步。假如你是她的好朋友 Sandy,请给她写封信,谈谈你的想法或建议。

(注意:信中不能谈及你的学校、姓名等真实个人信息。)

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四．Directions: Write an English composition in 120 ~ 150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.

每一个人都会被自己阅读过的一本书、一个故事或看过的一部电影而感动并难以忘怀。

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五．Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.

在新冠病毒疫情期间，各校都在通过网络进行线上教学。中华中学在学校网站的贴吧里，就如何提高线上学习的有效性开展了大讨论。假设你是该校学生王平，有意在贴吧中发表你的观点，你所写的内容应包括：

学生该怎么做及其理由；

你期望老师怎么做及其理由。

注：文中不得提及你的真实姓名或学校。

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六．Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.

假设你叫王林，你的美国好友John来信说他最近每天晚上玩手机到深夜，导致白天没有精神且食欲不振。他对此很担心，但又管不住自己，因此写信向你求助。请你用英语给John写一封回信，谈谈你的想法并给他一些建议。

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范文及解析

一、At present, according to a regulation, senior high school students in Shanghai must complete a research project within three years to get their senior high school graduation diploma, which has aroused a heated discussion. Different people have different opinions on the regulation. The supporters think that it does good to cultivating students' interests and specialties, making them find the majors they are interested in, and the opponents think that the learning tasks of senior high school students are heavy enough, and it will undoubtedly increase their burden.

From my point of view, the advantages of linking a project research and diploma are greater than disadvantages, because although students will spend a lot of time on project research in the tense study time, in this process, they will improve their ability to solve problems independently, and more importantly, they will find their own interests, which will lay a foundation for them to choose the major in the university. In view of the reasons above, I support the regulation.

解析：

第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求就一项规定发表自己的看法：目前，根据规定，上海高中生必须在三年内完成一项课题研究才能拿到高中毕业文凭。对此，大家意见不一。请谈谈你对此规定的看法，并陈述你理由。时态应为一般现在时。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如； Project Research（课题研究），regulation（规定），graduation diploma（毕业文凭），arouse（引起）， heated discussion（热议），complete （完成），independently（独立地），cultivate（培养），specialty（特长），burden （负担），major（专业）及interest（兴趣）等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。

范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有according to（按照），do good to（有利于），be interested in (对……感兴趣)，in view of（鉴于）以及lay a foundation for sb to do（为某人做……打下基础），而且还使用了非限定性定语从句“according to a regulation, senior high school students in Shanghai must complete a research project within three years to get their senior high school graduation diploma, which has aroused a heated discussion.”及“they will find their own interests, which will lay a foundation for them to choose the major in the university.”，宾语从句“the opponents think that the learning tasks of senior high school students are heavy enough, and it will undoubtedly increase their burden”，非谓语动词“The supporters think that it does good to cultivating students' interests and specialties, making them find the majors they are interested in”，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。

二、In the evening, when you take a walk around the neighborhood, it is very likely that you will see one after another group of middle-aged or retired women dancing to a variety of music, often in high spirits. This kind of group dancing spreads so quickly that it has already got itself a name, “square dancing” or “plaza dancing”.

Undoubtedly, the so-called “square dancing” is gaining popularity for good reasons. First of all, it helps enhance people’s physical and mental well-being by daily exercising and social reaction. More importantly, due to its low cost and ease of participation, anyone willing to step into the group can be fully engaged. Actually, it is quite a view with all the cheerfulness in the air.

However, when square dancers are absorbed in moves and rhythms, complaints arise. Boys are complaining about dancers’ occupying their basketball courts. Students doing homework hate the constant distraction and interruption caused by the noisy music. Some even urge the government to take measures to ban square dancing.

As far as I am concerned, communication and understanding of both parties are required. The department concerned could advise square dancers to keep the volume to such a low volume as not to disturb the residents nearby. They may also leave the Public facilities to other people at a proper time. Young people nearby may as well be considerate because it is quite possible that group dancing is your grandmother and her friends’ only form of recreation. Only through mutual understanding and raised awareness, can people of different generations live in a perfect harmony.

解析：

第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求对一个现象发表自己的看法：近年来,广场舞作为一种中老年人强身健体的方式越来越流行,但是其扰民问题也引发了热议。假如你是上海市某高中的学生李华，你班最近就“你对广场舞的态度与看法”为话题展开讨论，请用英语写一篇短文，发表在校英文报上。时态应为一般现在时。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如；square dancing（广场舞），neighborhood（附近），retired（退休的），undoubtedly（毫无疑问）， cheerfulness（愉快），rhythm（节奏），well-being（幸福），disturb(打扰)及considerate（考虑周到的）等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。

本文内容完整，层次分明，结构紧凑，表达准确。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。

范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有a variety of（各种各样的），due to（由于），step into (进入)，complain about（抱怨……），in high spirits（兴高采烈），as far as I am concerned（就我个人而言），be absorbed in(专心于)以及urge sb to do（敦促/强烈要求某人做某事），而且还使用了主语从句“it is very likely that you will see one after another group of middle-aged or retired women dancing to a variety of music, often in high spirits.”，状语从句“This kind of group dancing spreads so quickly that it has already got itself a name, “square dancing” or “plaza dancing”.”及“Young people nearby may as well be considerate because it is quite possible that group dancing is your grandmother and her friends’ only form of recreation.”，倒装句“Only through mutual understanding and raised awareness, can people of different generations live in a perfect harmony.”，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。

三、    It is a long time since I last wrote to you. Considering the fact that you have missed many classes because of being occupied with a variety of talent shows, I suppose it necessary to offer you some proposals to help you realize the importance of balancing your study and hobby.

As we all know, study is of the greatest importance to us all now. Nothing is more important than obtaining sufficient knowledge and cultivating good study habits so as to face the changing circumstances and the competitive society. Therefore, you’d better come back to class immediately and make up for what you have missed these days with the help of the teachers and classmates.

However, I don’t mean you have to give up your hobby. Since you are particularly gifted with music and dance, it is wise of you to spend some of your spare time on talent shows to yourself and broaden your horizons. Maybe it is perfect for you to attend an art-specialized university with your great efforts.

I really hope you can take into consideration my suggestion that you set aside your talent shows for the time being and devote more time to study now.

解析：

第一步：应用文表达，注意格式规范，根据提示，整篇文章应使用一般时态。

第二步：根据要求表明写信目的；说明你的想法和建议；内容包含全面，关键词选用合理，如be occupied with，so as to，give up，broaden your horizons，take into consideration， Considering the fact that you have missed many classes等等。

第三步：连词成文，结构衔接得体。

第一段，开门见山，表达写作目的，清晰明确，简单明了。

第二段，说明自己的想法并提出建议，结构清晰，Therefore ，However…连接结构的短语和词运用得体恰当。

第三段，符合应用文结尾格式，结构严谨。

文章内容完整，提纲要点全面，格式规范，语篇连贯，使用复合句，显示考生有很高的英语驾驭能力，如非谓语动词Nothing is more important than obtaining sufficient knowledge and cultivating good study habits so as to face the changing circumstances and the competitive society. 宾语从句Therefore, you’d better come back to class immediately and make up for what you have missed these days with the help of the teachers and classmates.

四、A Most Influential Film

The film Brave Heart, set in the 13th-14th century Britain, tells a story about William Wallace, a hero who unites the Scottish to fight against England for the freedom of Scotland. What impressed me most are the two main characters in the film-Wallace and Bruce.

No doubt Wallace is a hero that deserves our respect and admiration. He is a free fighter with a brave heart, fighting for nothing but freedom. Nothing could buy him off, wealth or title. Robert Bruce is also a man of integrity, who wants to fight like Wallace. However, he hesitates because he still values the title he has got and the crown he will get. This is his limitation, which makes him an ordinary man rather than a hero.

Wallace dies in the film but in my eyes, he is still alive. Heroes never die.

解析：

第1步：根据提示可知，每一个人都会被自己阅读过的一本书、一个故事或看过的一部电影而感动并难以忘怀。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组）：fight against (对抗)；no doubt (无疑地)；as well as (也)；admiration (钦佩)；nothing but (只有)；rather than(而不是)等。       

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。此处文章主要应用一般现在时。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如What impressed me most are the two main characters in the film-Wallace and Bruce.运用了主语从句；No doubt Wallace is a hero that deserves our respect and admiration.运用了定语从句。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。

五、Due to the outbreak of COVID-19, all schools have been conducting online teaching through the network. To achieve the good results of online teaching, it requires the joint efforts of teachers and students. First of all, students must have a high level of self-awareness and set strict demands on themselves as teachers cannot supervise students face-to-face. They should attend online classes on time every day as usual, during which they must turn off irrelevant webpages. Secondly, in order to make the online class more lively and interesting, teachers should strengthen the interaction with the students as much as possible during the teaching process, and they can improve the participation and concentration of students by answering questions online, commenting and answering, etc. Most importantly, teachers should help students deal with the tension. Only in this way can online teaching play a maximum role.

解析：

第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求就线上教学发表自己的观点：在新冠病毒疫情期间，各校都在通过网络进行线上教学。中华中学在学校网站的贴吧里，就如何提高线上学习的有效性开展了大讨论。假设你是该校学生王平，有意在贴吧中发表你的观点，你所写的内容应包括：学生该怎么做及其理由；你期望老师怎么做及其理由。时态应为一般现在时。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如； COVID-19（新冠病毒），outbreak （爆发），online teaching（线上教学），supervise（监管），self-awareness（自觉），strengthen（强化）， irrelevant（不相关的），lively（生动的），participation（参与），concentration（专注），face-to-face（面对面）及joint efforts（共同努力）等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。

范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有due to（由于），in order to （为了），set strict demands on oneself（严格要求某人自己），turn off (关闭)，on time (按时)，deal with（处理）以及play a maximum role（发挥最大作用），而且还使用了非限定性定语从句“They should attend online classes on time every day as usual, during which they must turn off irrelevant webpages.”，状语从句“First of all, students must have a high level of self-awareness and set strict demands on themselves as teachers cannot supervise students face-to-face.”，倒装句“Only in this way can online teaching play a maximum role.”，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。

六、Dear John,

I am pleased to receive your letter seeking after my proposals on how to overcome the awful habit of staying up late. Therefore, I am writing to give you a helping hand. From my point of view, there are two accounts for this. For one thing, a habit is easy to form but hard to get rid of. According to the statistics, it may take a person 21 days to cultivate a habit but 90 days to get over it. For another, since mobile phones have become an indispensable part in our daily life, it is absolutely difficult to resist the tempt of it, especially for us adolescents.

Here are some humble suggestions for your consideration. First and foremost, you are supposed to switch off your phone and keep your phone away from you before going to bed so that it will not attract you attention. Additionally, if I were you, I would work out properly before going to bed to relax yourself both physically and mentally. Last but not least, it is high time you enhanced your awareness of early sleep. As a classic prover goes that early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise.

Whichever suggestion you will take, please persevere in it. Hopefully, your problem would be solved soon.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Wang Lin

解析：

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态多为一般现在时。

要求：

1. 给美国好友回信；

2. 表示对于好朋友担心，并提供可行性方案帮助他解决这一问题。

第二步：列提纲（重点词组）

overcome the awful habit of…；give you a helping hand；became an indispensable part；for your consideration；both physically and mentally…

第三步：连词成句

1. How to overcome the awful habit of staying up late

2. I am writing to give you a helping hand.

3. Here are some humble suggestions for your consideration.

4. You are supposed to switch off your phone and keep your phone away from you before going to bed so that it will not attract you attention.

5. It is high time you enhanced your awareness of early sleep.

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词使用）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步：润色修改，注意主谓一致、单复数、冠词等语法正确使用。

范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如I am pleased to receive your letter seeking after my proposals on how to overcome the awful habit of staying up late.运用了非谓语及宾语从句复杂句式if I were you, I would work out properly before going to bed to relax yourself both physically and mentally.。运用了虚拟条件句，使说辞更具礼貌性。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。