14 读后续写高分开头和结尾

14   读后续写高分开头和结尾

目录

第一部分       精彩开头 （一 ----- 六 ）

第二部分       精彩结尾 （三 ----- 九 ）

第三部分       模拟练习

一  ...............   非谓语开头

二  ...............   副词开头

三  ...............   形容词短语开头

四  ...............   对话或独白开头

五  ...............   背景描写

六  ...............   行为描写

七  ...............   主题升华

八  ...............   首尾呼应

九  ...............   寄情于景

十  ...............   读后续写模拟练习

第一部分     精彩开头

一   非谓语开头

1. Looking around him cautiously, he slipped into the room and softly closed the door.

他小心翼翼地环顾四周,溜进了房间,轻轻地关上门。这里的非谓语动词短语“Looking around him cautiously”意思是:小心翼翼地环顾四周。

2. 故事梗概：母亲节即将到来之际，双胞胎想为母亲准备早餐,他们悄悄在厨房精心准备早餐但煎面包出了岔子。在孩子们束手无策的时候爸爸出现了,所以这顿饭应该在爸爸的帮助下做完。

第二段开头:The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.这对双胞胎把早餐端到楼上，把母亲叫醒了。

Meeting their smiling eyes, Mother felt confused until they presented the breakfast and said“Happy Mother's Day”见到他们微笑的眼睛，母亲感到困惑，直到他们端上早餐,说“母亲节快乐”。本句中的开头，用了doing的形式，Meeting their smiling eyes即:见到他们微笑的眼睛。

3. 提示句It was daybreak when Jane woke up. 简醒来的时候天已经亮了。

Feeling refreshed, she continued to walk along the stream to find the way out.

她感到神清气爽，继续沿着小溪散步,寻找出去的路。这里用feeling refreshed的形式，很好地体现了后一个动作“walk”的伴随状态。

二  副词开头

1.Carefully, he stepped over all the broken glass.他小心翼翼地踩过了所有的碎玻璃。

2.Joyfully,he skipped up the street.他很高兴地跳过了街道。

这里的carefully和joyfully把后面的两个动作“step踩”和“skip跳”描写的更加细致和生动。

3.故事梗概：讲了在万圣节时候主人公为了和弟弟比谁搬的南瓜重而一念之下把头塞进了南瓜里,导致头被卡住的这一糗事更有趣的是母亲把这个过程拍了下来并且分享到了网上，引发了更大的影响。

第二段开头的提示句是:The video was posted th Monday before Halloween.

万圣节前的周一，视步被发布到了网上。

Surprisingly, it became a hit that the video start racking up hundreds of thousands of views.

令人惊讶的是,这段视频获得了数十万次的浏览这里就用了:Surprisingly,表达了浏览量惊人。

三  形容词短语开头

1. Curious to know what was inside, he tiptoed into the dark cave.

他好奇地想知道里面是什么,踮着脚尖走进了黑暗的洞穴。这里的“Curious to know what was inside们(很想知道里面有什么东西)"就是形容词短语，表明他进洞穴的原因。相当于:He was curious to know what was inside, and he tiptoed into the dark cave. Unable to say a word, he was rooted to the spot.一句话也说不出来,他就愣在了原地。这里的“unable to say a word”也是一个形容词短语,表现了“愣在原地”这个动作伴随动作:说不出一个字。

2.故事梗概：爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩而迷路的故事。

第一段开头给的提示句是:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.

突然,一只小兔子跳到了我的马前。

Afraid that I might hurt the lovely small creature,I automatically let out a cry to stop my horse.

我害怕我会伤害这个可爱的小生物，我自动发出一声喊叫来阻止我的马。这里用“情绪形容词+从句”的形式，很好地体现了后一个动作“cry喊叫”的原因。

第二段开头:We had no idea where we were and it got dark.我们不知道自己在哪里，天变黑了。

Exhausted and hungry, I wondered if we could find our way back.

我又累又饿，想知道我们能不能找到回去的路。这里用“情绪形容词+从句”的形式，很好地体现了后一个动作伴随的情况:又累又饿!

四   对话或独白开头

1. “Let's see who gets there first!” Rachel shouted, as she pedaled fast and zoomed past Jenny.

“让我们看看谁先到那里!”瑞秋一边叫着，一边飞快地蹬着车从珍妮身边冲过去。

2. 故事梗概：作者和朋友一起骑车游玩,途中遇狼的故事。

第一段开头文章给的提示句是:The car abruptly stopped in front of him. 汽车突然停在他面前。

“Get into the car.” Paul shouted at Mac.

“上车!”保罗对麦克喊道。

五   背景描写

1. The world was loaded with a sea of darkness.I was seized with the roaring power of nature. A sense of horror creeping up on me.

世界承载着一片海洋般的黑暗,我被自然咆哮的力量所征服。一种恐惧感向我袭来。通过“写景+感受”，这样就进一步强调了自己的情感。

2. 故事梗概：作者与健忘的妈妈一块去旅游的故事。

第二段开头的提示语是这样的:We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.(我们开车穿过了几个州,沿途看到了很多好风景。)

I looked out of the car window, winding rivers, lofty mountains, sunny beaches and deep valleys, holding me entirely in their fascination.

我望着车窗外，蜿蜒的河流、高耸的山脉、阳光明媚的海滩和深邃的山谷,完全吸引了我的注意力。这里用“视觉十环境描写+拟人”的写作手法,也成功地抓住了读者的注意力。

六   行为描写

1. Furry started wagging his tail and running a round in circles when he saw his master taking a leash out from the drawer. Furry was all ready for his evening walk.

当他看到他的主人从抽屉里拿出一条皮带时，Furry开始摇尾巴,绕着圈跑。Furry准备好了晚上去散步。一连串有关Furry的动作链，像放电影一样,印刻在读者的大脑中。为后面情节发展做好了铺垫。

2. 故事梗概：作者与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。

文章的第一段的提示句是:The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.(第二天，我们想起了我们带来的那个全新的帐篷。)

Dad exchanged a glance with me. Why not camp to satisfy Mom?

爸爸和我相互看了一眼。为什么不露营来满足妈妈?这里就用到了“动作描写十问句衔接”。很好地勾起了读者的兴趣。

第二部分   精彩结尾

好的开端和结尾是一篇文章获取高分的关键，可以帮助考生快速抓住阅卷老师的眼球。

七   主题升华   总结经验教训

句式1  直到那时，某人才意识到…

Only then did sb.realize...倒装句

Only than/did the children realize that/their help really matters. 直到那时，孩了们才意识到他们的帮助真的很重要。

Not until then did sb.realize...倒装句

句式2  如果没有这次经历，某人就不会有机会学到这样一课。

Had it not been for this experience,sb.would not have got the chance to learn the lesson that...虚拟语气

Had it not been for this experience,the children would inot have got the chance to learn the lesson that they can really make a difference.

如果没有这次经历，孩子们就没有机会学到!这一课:他们真的能有所作为。

句式3  正是这次经历让某人意识到/学到了…

It was this experience that made sb.realize/learn that...注意强调结构

It was this experience that/made the children realize that difficulty is nothing compared with unity.

正是这段经历使“孩子们认识到，困难与团结相比是微不足道的。

八   首尾呼应  细节呼应

首尾呼应的写法在语文写作中也经常使用,不仅能强调主题,引起共鸣,也能使文章结构更加紧密、严谨和自然。

1.开头:I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my motherlov ing, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her

结尾:Despite mom's being absent-minded and forget ful,she was still a kind and nice mom

2.开头:It was summer and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.

结尾:Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous vacation before. The special trip to the Wild West was deeply engraved in my mind.

3.开头:A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day

结尾:What a funny day. Arthur couldn’t stop laughing whenever he looked back on this hilarious(搞笑的) experience.

九   寄情于景

1. 看到某物，某人感觉好像它在…，并且说：

Seeing sth.，sb.felt as if it had been ...saying“…”

2.一两滴眼泪从某人的眼角滑落，滑过他/她的脸颊，滴落在某物上，魔法般地把它变成了…

A tear or two slipped from sb.'s eyes, rolled down sb.'s cheeks and dripped onto+sth，which，as if by magic,had turned into+比喻.

3.这段故事/画面/场景/话语自此一直萦绕在某人的脑海中。即使是现在，某人也不断地想起那段经历，从中某人学到了…

The story/picture/scene/words kept lingering/echoing in sb.'s mind ever since.Evennow,sb.be constantly reminded of the experience,where sb.got the lesson that...

十   读后续写模拟练习

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Once upon a time, in a small village in Turkey, there lived a mother and her son.The son was known by all as Bald Boy because even though he was still quite young he had no hair on his head at all.Bald Boy and his mother were very poor indeed and so each day Bald Boy would take up his basket and went out into the woods in search of food.One day, as he was searching the forest floor for mushrooms, Bald Boy was sure that he could hear a young girl crying.When he looked up he noticed a little squirrel(松鼠）sitting on the branch of the tree above his head.The squirrel was crying inconsolably(无法安慰的）and so Bald Boy took the little creature in his arms.He comforted her and told her that everything was going to be okay.When at last the squirrel stopped crying,the two friends got to talking and the Bald Boy explained how he lived with his mother and how they were very poor."I need to come into this forest each day in search of food because we have no money,"he told the squirrel.It was then that the little squirrel said,"You have been very kind to me today so I am going to help you in return."Then the little squirrel jumped out of Bald Boy's hands and said,"Follow me." The young boy followed the squirrel through the forest for many hours until they reached a cliff edge(悬崖边） that could see the green valley below."You must climb down this cliff,"said the squirrel."When you reach the bottom you will find the Forest Queen.She will ask you three questions and you must answer them all correctly to receive the prize."

注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

Paragraph 1: The squirrel climbed up onto Bald Boy's shoulder and whispered...______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Paragraph 2: "If you do not answer correctly,"she said in her cold voice,"then...______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

【范文欣赏】

Paragraph 1:The squirrel climbed up onto Bald Boy's shoulder and whispered the answers to the three questions in his ear. Then she jumped down and ran back into the forest.Bald Boy made himself a rope,then climbed down the cliff edge and made his way to where the squirrel had told him the Forest Queen lived.When she saw him approaching, the Queen stopped Bald Boy and demanded that he answer three questions.

Paragraph 2:"If you do not answer correctly,"she said in her cold voice,"then you will lose your head.""How many cherries are growing on this tree?""Where is the middle of the earth?""Which is the heavier of these two apples?" Confidently,Bald Boy spoke out the answers the squirrel had already told him.The Forest Queen could not deny that all three answers were correct and so she unwillingly handed Bald Boy a large bag of gold that was his prize. He thanked the squirrel in his heart and happily returned home to his mother with the gold.

【解析】本篇书面表达是读后续写。文章主要讲述生活在一个小村庄里的秃头男孩和他的母亲相依为命，并且很贫穷。一天，这个秃头男孩遇到一个哭的伤心的小松鼠并安慰它，小松鼠受到感动决定帮助男孩的故事。

【详解】续写第一段开头为：松鼠爬上秃头男孩的肩膀，小声说……后面应该写小松鼠怎么帮助秃头男孩去获取奖励，男孩怎样到达悬崖底部见到森林女王的过程。续写第二段开头为：“如果你答错了，”她用冰冷的声音说，“那么……后面应该写秃头男孩回答上森林女王的问题，最终获得奖励，回到家中和他妈妈分享喜悦。

【点睛】文章主题部分选用的是一般过去时，续写部分也用一般过去时，通篇时态把握准确；词语运用恰当并且高级，显示出较高的英语能力；文章中还使用大量的复合句，为文章增加色彩和高级感，如Bald Boy made himself a rope, then climbed down the cliff edge and made his way to where the squirrel had told him the Forest Queen lived. The Forest Queen could not deny that all three answers were correct and so she unwillingly handed Bald Boy a large bag of gold that was his prize. 这里的宾语从句和定语从句相结合使用，显示高级的英语水平，精准掌握了从句使用的要领；续写部分构思巧妙，衔接自然，思路清晰自然，表达完整，为一篇优秀的作品。