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专题19 读后续写备考指导3：高考五年真题集锦（浙江卷与山东卷 2016年-2021年1月） 教案
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这是一份专题19 读后续写备考指导3：高考五年真题集锦（浙江卷与山东卷 2016年-2021年1月） 教案，共27页。教案主要包含了词汇拓展，词句拓展等内容，欢迎下载使用。
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2016年10月浙江卷
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tm, had driven three hurs t camp vernight by a lake in the frest. Unfrtunately, n the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started t quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was s angry that she said t Tm. “I'm ging t find a better spt fr us t camp" and walked away.
With n path t fllw,Jane just walked n fr quite a lng time. After she had climbed t a high place. she turned arund, hping t see the lake. T her surprise, she saw nthing but frest and, far beynd, a snwcapped muntain tp. She suddenly realized that she was lst.
“Tm! "she cried. "Help!"
N reply. If nly she had nt left her mbile phne in that bag with Tm. Jane kept mving, but the farther she walked, the mre cnfused she became. As night was beginning t fall, Jane was s tired that she had t stp fr the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much t be with Tm and her family. She wanted t hld him and tell him hw much she lved him.
Jane rse at the break f day, hungry and thirsty. She culd hear water trickling (滴落)smewhere at a distance. Quickly she fllwed the sund t a stream. T her great jy,she als saw sme berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling strnger nw. Jane began t walk alng the stream and hpe it wuld lead her t the lake.
As she picked her way carefully alng the stream, Jane heard a helicpter. Is that fr me? Unfrtunately, the trees made it impssible fr peple t see her frm abve. A few minutes later, anther helicpter flew verhead. Jane tk ff her yellw bluse, thinking that she shuld g t an pen area and flag them if they came back again.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文文中标有下划线的关键词语：
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again.
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It was daybreak when Jane wke up.
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But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an abslute darkness ruled the frest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay dwn near a stne, missing her family at a distance. All the fantastic memry crwded in and she culdn't help crying, "Hadn't I quarreled with Tm, walked away and climbed t the high place, I wuldn't be trapped in this awful place, cnfrnted with the danger f dying." She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
It was daybreak when Jane wke up. Weak as she was, she struggled t her feet, cntinuing searching fr assistance. T her great jy, a helicpter was flying verhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her yellw bluse and spared n effrt t yell s as t attract thers'attentin. Frtunately, she was eventually nticed and brught int the helicpter. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expressin f relief. As tightly as pssible, she hugged him and was t thrilled t say anything. Besides, they agreed never t quarrel again, determining t live the life t the fullest.
【解析】
首先，在逻辑上，要做到了合理合情：起初，主人公身陷森林，内心充满了悔恨，在面对困难时焦虑、畏惧；之后，主人公努力求生，最终获救，并且领悟到了一定的人生道理。纵观整个故事，情节发展不仅符合两段给出的开头所限定的情景要求，而且还设置了一定的悬念，增强了故事的可读性。
文章第一句 "an abslute darkness ruled the frest" 中， "rule" 一词就使用了拟人的修辞手法，让森林阴森黑暗的一面展露无遗，同时描绘出主人公身处绝境的紧迫性。在 "Eager and excited, she flagged her yellw bluse…" 一句中，直接将情绪形容词放在句首，使用了非谓语动词的语法，表达精练。
此外， "There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expressin f relief." 一句中，使用了几个短句，却包含了两处非谓语动词语法，同时活用了 "wear" 一词，把两个人相见时的场景生动地描绘了出来。
【词汇拓展】
1) 表示并列关系的过渡词：and, as well as, r ，Nt nly … but als
2) 表示转折关系的过渡词：but, yet, hwever , althugh , thugh …
3) 表示时间关系的过渡词：first, secnd, third, and then, finally, after, befre, after a few days, at last, at that time, later, in the past, immediately, in the meanwhile, when, while, then, after that …
2017年11月浙江卷
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A vacatin with my mther
I had an interesting childhd: It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because f my mther-lving, sweet, and yet absent-minded and frgetful. One strange family trip we tk when I was eleven tells a lt abut her.
My tw sets f grandparents lived in Clrad and Nrth Dakta, and my parents decided t spend a few weeks driving t thse states and seeing all the sights alng the way. As the first day f ur trip apprached, David, my eight-year-ld brther, and I unwillingly said gd-bye t all f ur friends. Wh knew if we’d ever see them again? Finally, the mment f ur departure arrived, and we laded suitcases, bks, games, camping equipment, and a tent int the car and bravely drve ff. We bravely drve ff again tw hurs later after we’d returned hme t get the purse and traveler’s checks Mm had frgtten.
David and I were always a little nervus when using gas statin bathrms if Mm was driving while Dadslept:” Yu stand utside the dr and play lkut while I g, and I’ll stand utside the dr and play lkut while yu g.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Hney, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gsh… I thught they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t abut t take any chances.
On the furth r fifth night, we had truble finding a htel with a vacancy. After driving in vain fr sme time, Mm suddenly gt a great idea: Why didn’t we find a huse with a likely-lking backyard and ask if we culd set up tent there? David and I became nervus. T ur great relief, Dad turned dwn the idea. Mm never culd understand ur bjectins.If a strange family shwed up n her frnt drsteps, Mm wuld have been delighted. She thinks everyne in the wrld as as nice as she is. We finally fund a vacancy in the next twn.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us.
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We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way.
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us.But then we were half an hur away frm the htel, where the tentwas left behind. Dad recmmended buying a new ne, while Mm insisted n ur ging back t fetch it, saying "Frgetful peple like me may lse things repeatedly, s it's unwise t give up the tent." Finally, we gt back the tent and hit the rad again. If Mm hadn't been that absent-minded, it wuld have saved us the truble f ging back again and again.
We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. One day, twards evening, we fund a great campingsite at the ft f a high muntain. Davidand I helped Dad put up the tent, and Mm was busy preparing supper. When the setting sun cast an range light ver the muntains, the tent was set up and the meal was ready. Sitting arund the camp fire, we talked and laughed. Every time we mentined the funny incidents f the jurney a pleasant smile wuld spread ver Mm's face.
解析
文章中文大意：我的母亲很健忘(absent-minded and frgetful)，一家四口去祖父母在的省自驾旅游，途中发生了有趣的事情，比如爸爸叫我盯住妈妈，以防她开车的时候睡着：
第一段开头句：我们拿出来新买的帐篷
第二段开头句：我们愉快地欣赏路边的景色
关键词： mm dad David (弟弟), tent, camping, nice, truble, frgetful, absent-minded
实战解析
首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事(尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个frgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的趣事)(也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一个点)；
其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景： 此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只有景色描述； 例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色(同时回忆往事)，最终把故事的落脚点放在 "家人的感情" "亲情" "生活的乐趣" "与妈妈一起的趣事" 等等角度都可以的；当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题；总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多；
再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰程度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度；高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型结构一定程度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断；说到语法丰富性方面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免句型单一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生对句型掌握的不够充分。应该在文章写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。例如：They said it was such a beautiful day that they wuld remember it frever.(such… that结构)。 由于阅卷老师在评卷时的时间十分有限，在作文中放入显耀的连接词可以帮助老师快速抓住文章结构，促使老师更好地理解文章主旨，同时清晰的连接词可以显示作者写作时严谨的逻辑。例如：upn ne's arrival, then, hwever, besides, while等。
2017年6月浙江卷
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
On a bright, warm July afternn, Mac Hllan, a primary schl teacher, was cycling frm his hme t Alaska with his friends. One f his friends had stpped t make a bicycle repair, but they had encuraged Mac t carry n, and they wuld catch up with him sn. As Mac pedaled (骑行) alng alne, he thught fndly f his wife and tw yung daughters at hme. He hped t shw them this beautiful place smeday.
Then Mac heard quick and lud breathing behind him. “Man, that's a big dg!” he thught. But when he lked t the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dg at all, but a wlf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac’s heart jumped. He fund ut his can f hear spray. With ne hand n the bars, he fired the spray at the wlf. A bright red clud envelped the animal, and t Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back f Mac's bike, tearing pen his tent bag. He fired at the wlf a secnd time, and again, it fell back nly t quickly restart the chase(追赶)。
Mac was pedaling hard nw. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful nt t shw dwn. He saw a steep uphill climb befre him. He knew that nce he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wlf’s teeth wuld be tearing int his flesh.
At this mment, Paul and Beeky were driving their car n their way t Alaska. They didn’t think much f it when they saw tw cyclists repairing their bike n the side f the rad. A bit later, they sptted what they, t, assumed was a dg running alngside a man n a bike. As they gt clser, they realized that the dg was a wlf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in frnt f it as the wlf was catching up fast, just a dzen yards away nw.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文文中标有下划线的关键词语：
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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The car abrubtly stpped in frnt f him.
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A few minutes later,the ther tw cyclists arrived.
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The car abruptly stpped in frnt f him. Paul and Becky gt ut f the carimmediately t give help. But with the bare hands, they didn't dare t fight with the wlf. Hwever, they still apprached t the wlf bravely. At the same time, the wlf als nticed them and turned its head back, shuting ludly at Paul and Becky. Mac then jumped ff the bicycle and was ready t fight against the wlf. That reached deadlck.
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A few minutes later, the ther tw cyclists arrived. They fund the dangerus situatin, where three men circled the wlf. Mac's friends als jumped ff their bicycles and jined the fight with the wlf. Mre and mre cars stpped. Sme drivers tk ut the sticks frm the cars, and sme tk ut the knives, even the guns twards the wlf. Just at that time, the wlf might feel the threats frm the peple, starting t withdraw. Sn, it ran away ff the rad and disappeared in the distance.
2018年6月浙江卷
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was summer, and my dad wanted t treat me t a vacatin like never befre. He decided t take me n a trip t the Wild West.
We tk a plane t Albuquerque, a big city in the state f New Mexic. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternn. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up frm the airprt and drve us up t his farm in Pecs.
His wife Tina cked us a delicius dinner and we gt t knw his sns Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestrm f the farm huse listening t the frgs and water rlling dwn the river nearby. Very early in the mrning, Uncle Paul wke us up t have breakfast. "The day starts at dawn n my farm," he said. After breakfast, I went t help Aunt Tina feed the chickens. while my dad went with Uncle Paul t take the sheep ut t graze(吃草). I was impressed t see my dad and Uncle Paul riding hrses. They lked really cl.
In the afternn, I asked Uncle Paul if I culd take a hse ride, and he said yes, as lng as my dad went with me. I wasn’t ging t take a hrse ride by myself anyway. S, my dad and I put n ur new cwby hats, gt n ur hrses, and headed slwly twards the muntains. "Dn’t be late fr supper," Uncle Paul cried, "and keep t the track s that yu dn’t get lst!" "OK! " my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his fam huse were ut f sight. It was s peaceful and quiet and the clrs f the brwn rcks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternn sun mixed t create a magic scene. It lked like a beautiful wven(编织的)blanket spread ut upn the grund just fr us.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为l50左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语：
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse.
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We had n idea where we were and it gt dark.
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But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. Jane had t stay alne in the frest fr anther cld night. At that mment (时间), she felt a little sad, but she wasn’t s frightened (情感). She reminded herself cnstantly, (心理) “ Tm must have called fr thse helicpters. Maybe (情感) he was in ne f them and will return sn(动作)! I have t guide him tmrrw.” She felt asleep (动作) and dreamed f seeing Tm (动作).
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It was daybreak when Jane wke up. She ate sme berries and then(时间) walked alng the stream, hping (心理) t find a suitable place t guide the helicpter. She walked and walked,exhausted but full f hpe. Suddenly (时间), she sptted (动作) a huge flat rck. She managed (动作) t climb nt it and waited with patience. The mment (时间) the helicpter appeared (动作) again. The nearer it gt (动作), the mre she waved (动作) the yellw bluse. T her great jy, (情感) the helicpter didn’t miss Jane this time and it landed near the big rck slwly. Tm jumped ff the helicpter and rushed (动作) twards Jane. They hugged each ther tightly (情感) and burst int tears (情感).
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The car abrubtly stpped in frnt f him.Mac jumped ff his bicycle and dashed fr the back dr f the car. It was lcked. He then ran arund t the passenger dr, but it was lcked, as well, s he began t climb thrugh the pen windw.When sptting this ,Paul quickly unlcked the dr, and the frightened man dived in,slamming the dr behind him.Paul lked ut the back windw and saw the wlf standing ver Mac’s bike as if it were a kill. Shrtly after, the animal ran ff.
A few minutes later,the ther tw cyclists arrived .Mac emerged frm the car and hugged his friends. “I thught I was ging t die,” Mac cried t them.Mac retrieved(取回) his bicycle, and the three men resumed(继续) their rad trip, agreeing t keep in ne anther’s sight line. A few miles dwn the rad, Mac pulled ver and burst int tears.“The rest f the trip was amazing, but I had t let the frmer emtin ut.”
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us. Mm insisted that we must make full use f it since we had brught it. David and I lked at Dad, hping he culd stp her crazy idea. T ur great disappintment, he agreed. We spent a whle afternn seeking a nicecamping place and set up ur tent befre the night fell. It was the first time that I had thught mm culd be wise as I admiring ur stunning tent. “Oh, I frgt the pillws!” what a miscnceptin. Despite the ache f my neck, we had sme great nights.
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We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. The bright blue sky, the limitless green grass, the grup f sheep, the setting sun and the cuntless stars in the curtain f nights kept me spellbund. Nt nly did we see the picturesque scenery, we als managed t cnsider mm’s scandals as a kind f fun.I reaaly lve my Mum.
T ur relief, we arrived at grandparents’ place and went back t ur hme with all f fur peple. It was s frtunate t see my friends again.
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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse. Instinctively, I yelled ut lud, pulling back the reins hard in rder t stp the hrse frm hurting the little creature. Badly startled by the sudden incident, the hrse sped ff thetrack int anther directin. Dad fllwed clsely behind, calling ut t tell me hw t sthe the terrified hrse and I did as tld. Finally, the hrse calmed dwn, but we seemed t get lst, unable t g back t the muntain rad.
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We had n idea where we were and it was getting dark. Wandering arund, we were still stuck in the dilemma. Much t ur delight, the sund f water in the distance caught ur attentin and drve us t the riverbank. Dad prpsed that we shuld walk alng the river which may lead us t the farm huse and nthing seemed better than that. Time appeared t be merrier and shrter when I stayed tgether with Dad and befre lng, the farm huse came int sight. What a thrilling but memrable experience it was!
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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse. I immediately grew fnd f the furry rabbit and called ut excitedly, “Dad! Lk!” Alarmed, the rabbit ran away in a flash. I fllwed it eagerly, hping t catch it as my trphy fr the trip. My dad just fllwed me, knwing it was impssible t stp me. We tracked the rabbit fr abut ten minutes until it gt cmpletely ut f sight. Depressed and tired, I suggested ging back. But apparently, we had diverged frm the track Uncle Paul warned us t keep. (86 wrds)
We had n idea where we were and it was getting dark. The thught that we might have gt lst in such darkness sent shivers dwn my spine. Tears f fear and regret filled my eyes. Frtunately, Dad was nt s panicked as I was. He kept silent and listened very carefully as he tk my hrse rein and led the way. We had wandered fr what seemed like ages when suddenly a river came int sight. Hpefully, we culd find ur way back t the farm huse if we fllwed the river. Finally, we arrived hme safely just in time fr supper, but what an experience! It turns ut there’s always a way ut f any plight(困境) as lng as we stay calm. (114 wrds)
2020年1月浙江卷
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
"I'm ging t miss yu s much, Pppy, " said the tall, thin teenager. He bent dwn t hug his ld friend gdbye. He std up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying nt t let his emtins(情绪)get the better f him.
His parents were nt quite able t keep theirs under cntrl. They had driven their sn several hurs ut f twn t the university where he wuld sn be living and studying. It was time t say gdbye fr nw at least. The family hugged and smiled thrugh misty eyes and then laughed.
The by lifted the last bag nt his shulder, and flashed a bright smile. "I guess this is it, " he said. "I'll see yu back hme in a mnth, kay? " His parents ndded, and they watched as he walked ut f sight int the crwds f hundreds f students and parents. The by's mther turned t the dg, "Okay, Pppy, time t g back hme."
The huse seemed quiet as a tmb withut the by living there. All that week, Pppy didn't seem interested in her dinner, her favrite ty, r even in her daily walk. Her wners were sad t, but they knew their sn wuld be back t visit. Pppy didn't.
They ffered the dg sme f her favrite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit n the sfa, but the ld girl just wasn't her usual cheerful self. Her wners started t get wrried. "What shuld we d t cheer Pppy up? " asked Dad. "We've tried everything."
"I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy." smiled Mm. "Withut anybdy left in the huse but us, this place culd use a bit f fun. Let's get a little dg fr Pppy."
It didn't take lng befre they walked thrugh the frnt dr carrying a big bx. Pppy welcmed them hme as usual, but when she saw the bx. She stpped. She put her nse n it. Her tail began wagging(摆动)ever s slwly, then faster as she caught the smell.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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Dad pened the bx and a sweet little dg appeared.
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A few weeks later, the by arrived hme frm the university.
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Dad put the bx n the grund and pened the tp. A shiny little wet nse ppped up. Then tw fluffy paws. Next the bx tipped ver sideways, and ut tumbled a mass f wiggly glden silliness. Pppy was amazed. She wagged furiusly. She barked with jy. She smiled, her tngue llling ut as she investigated the surprise. The little pup was nt shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping arund the lder dg. "That didn't take lng, "remarked Mm, as bth dgs went raring arund the huse in an imprmptu game f chase. Dad laughed.
A few weeks later, the by arrived hme frm university. He had missed Pppy and was lking frward t seeing her. When he bent dwn t give her a big hug, he fell ver in surprise as a small glden clud came racing up t lick his face t. "Oh my gsh, wh is this? " he exclaimed. His parents laughed at the lk f shck n his face. "That's Pee-wee, "said Dad. "I can't believe yu gt yurselves a puppy!" "We didn't, " replied Mm. "This puppy is fr Pppy!"
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男主人公离开家上大学，他家的狗Pppy自主人公走后一直郁郁寡欢，母亲想了个主意，打算再找一只小狗陪伴Pppy。他们将小狗装在盒子里放在门前，Pppy闻到气味后尾巴摇得快了起来，情绪开始发生变化。
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Pppy看到小狗后的行为表现，以及对小狗的描写，侧重动作描写，写出Pppy由郁郁寡欢变为喜悦欢快，男主人公回家，首先表达出他对Pppy的想念和牵挂，其次描写他和新来的小狗的有怎样的遇见和 "火花" ，侧重动作和人物对话。
高分句型：
1.情感的表述：She smiled, her tngue llling ut as she investigated the surprise. The little pup was nt shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping arund the lder dg.
2.When he bent dwn t give her a big hug, he fell ver in surprise as a small glden clud came racing up t lick his face t.
3.人物对话
"Oh my gsh, wh is this? " he exclaimed. His parents laughed at the lk f shck n his face. "That's Pee-wee, " said Dad. "I can't believe yu gt yurselves a puppy!" "We didn't, " replied Mm. "This puppy is fr Pppy!"
"That didn't take lng, " remarked Mm, as bth dgs went raring arund the huse in an imprmptu game f chase. Dad laughed.
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The Meredith family lived in a small cmmunity. As the ecnmy was in decline, sme peple in the twn had lst their jbs. Many f their families were struggling t make ends meet. Peple were trying t help each ther meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a mst kind and thughtful wman. She spent a great deal f time visiting the pr. She knew they had prblems, and they needed all kinds f help. When she had time, she wuld bring fd and medicine t them.
One mrning she tld her children abut a family she had visited the day befre. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, wh tk care f him and culd nt g ut t wrk, and their little by. The little by - his name was Bernard - had interested her very much.
“I wish yu culd see him,” she said t her wn children, Jhn, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help t his mther. He wants very much t earn sme mney, but I dn't see what he can d.”
After their mther left the rm, the children sat thinking abut Bernard. “I wish we culd help him t earn mney,” said Clara. “His family is suffering s much.”
“S d I,” said Harry. “We really shuld d smething t assist them.”
Fr sme mments, Jhn said nthing, but, suddenly, he sprang t his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a slutin that we can all help accmplish (完成).”
The ther children als jumped up all attentin. When Jhn had an idea, it was sure t be a gd ne. I’ll tell yu what we can d,” said Jhn. “Yu knw that big bx f cm Uncle Jhn sent us? Well, we can make ppcrn (爆米花), and put it int paper bags, and Bernard can take it arund t the huses and sell it.”
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When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn's idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t. Very sn the children were busy ppping the crn, while their mther went ut t buy paper bags. When she came back, she brught Bernard with her.
With everything ready, Bernard started ut n his new business. Unexpectedly, he returned quickly with an empty basket and ten nickels in his mittens. After he ran hme t take the mney t his mther, Jhn asked Mrs. Meredith if they culd cntinue t help Bernard. Mrs. Meredith said "Yes" and asked Jhn t take charge f the wrk. Fr many weeks, Jhn saw that the crn was all ppped, the paper bags filled and arranged in the basket when Bernard arrived. Every week Bernard had at least fifty cents t take hme, and ften mre. And all this was because f Jhn's bright idea, and the way he carried it ut.
解析(1)写作思路
本篇书面表达为读后续写，给定的阅读材料主要讲述了Meredith夫人鼓励她的孩子们去帮助一个穷人家的孩子Bernard去赚钱，然后她的儿子约翰想通过爆米花来帮助Bernard。续写的第一段可以围绕Meredith夫人的孩子们所做的准备工作来展开，比如准备爆米花、纸袋等；续写的第二段可以围绕Meredith夫人的孩子们(尤其是约翰)在成功帮助Bernard赚取第一桶金后如何继续助力。由于描述的是发生过的事情，因此续写的两段的时态都应以一般过去时为主，人称以第三人称为主。
(2)重点词汇/句型
a. be busy ding sth. 忙于做某事
b. ask sb. t d sth. 让某人做某事
c. take charge f sth. 负责某事
d. at least 至少
e. carry ut 实施，执行
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One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single gal: t phtgraph plar bears. We were staying at a research camp utside "the plar bear capital f the wrld"—the twn f Churchill in Manitba, Canada.
Taking pictures f plar bears is amazing but als dangerus. Plar bears—like all wild animals—shuld be phtgraphed frm a safe distance. When I'm face t face with a plar bear, I like it t be thrugh a camera with a telepht lens. But smetimes, that is easier said than dne. This was ne f thse times.
As Elli and I cked dinner, a yung male plar bear wh was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled ur garlic bread.
The hungry bear fllwed his nse t ur camp, which was surrunded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He std n his back legs and pushed at the wden fence psts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actins we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pts hard, and fired blank shtgun shells int the air. Smetimes lud nises like these will scare bears ff. Nt this plar bear thugh—he just kept trying t tear dwn the fence with his massive paws(爪子).
I radied the camp manager fr help. He tld me a helicpter was n its way, but it wuld be 30 minutes befre it arrived. Making the best f this clse encunter(相遇), I tk sme pictures f the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wuldn't last thrugh 30 mre minutes f the bear's punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears' eyes, but desn't hurt them. S I apprached ur uninvited guest slwly and, thrugh the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry rar(吼叫), the bear ran t the lake t wash his eyes.
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A few minutes later, the bear headed back t ur camp. Munting anger mingled with hunger verwhelming him, he smashed his paws frantically against the wire fence, thrusting his sharp claws at us. Panicked as we were, Elli and I squealed at the tp f ur lungs, wave ur fists at him and stamped heavily n the grund in an attempt t intimidate and scare him away. T ur dismay, all these effrts were in vain. This sturdy bear relentlessly banged and shved the wden psts which were evidently n the verge f cllapsing! This bulky and furius beast within a stne's thrw, I flinched back and huddled with Elli tightly. Chilly winds whipping ur faces, I culd hear nthing but the sund f ur hearts thrbbing vilently in ur chests.
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At that very mment, the helicpter arrived. The gusting wind frm the hvering vehicles wept away ur chking fear immediately. Out f the helicpter descended a rpe t haul us up. Thrilled yet relieved, we clutched the rpe and eventually landed n the helicpter safe and sund. While verlking the chunky bear frm high abve, I was amazed t spt this stubbrn guy had crushed the fence and headed tward ur camp fr the inviting garlic bread. At this nce-in-a-lifetime mment, I reached int my backpack and pulled ut the camera, phtgraphing that impressive scene. Gazing at his brad back in the melting ice field, I wndered if it was the warmer planet that had frced the bear t hunt fr fd frm the human regins.
解析
【分析故事内容和所给段落开头】
主要讲述了作者和妻子前往被称为 "北极熊之都" 的加拿大丘吉尔镇拍摄北极熊。夫妻二人做饭之时，一头饥饿的雄性幼熊循着面包的蒜香味，靠近了营地，猛烈撞击营地边上的铁丝围栏，试图击溃它。作者和妻子使出浑身解数，想吓退这头熊，不料他 "不破篱笆誓不归" 。无奈之下，作者求助营地管理员，被告知救援直升机要30分钟后才能赶到，只得先尝试用胡椒喷雾喷洒北极熊的眼睛，希望他知难而退。果然，眼睛被辣椒水刺激后，他愤怒跑开，到河边去清洗眼睛。
第一段：几分钟之后，这头北极熊又回到了营地边……由故事发展可推知，该段重点描写夫妻二人如何再次对付熊及两人在过程中的紧张害怕。
第二段：在这千钧一发之际，直升机赶到了……该段出现直升机，可知二人获救。重点描述获救后的心情。
【词句拓展】
关键词组：
rugh treatment 粗暴对待
apprach sth 接近某物
thrust at 戳
give a gasp f relief 如释重负
高级句型：
非谓语作状语、宾语从句、定语从句：Gazing at his brad back in the melting ice field, I wndered if it was the warmer planet that had frced the bear t hunt fr fd frm the human regins. 凝视着融化的冰原上它宽阔的脊背，我想知道是不是地球变暖迫使它从人类地区寻找食物。
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Pumpkin (南瓜)carving at Hallween is a family traditin. We visit a lcal farm every Octber. In the pumpkin field, I cmpete with my three brthers and sister t seek ut the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have t carry ur pumpkins back hme, and as the eldest child I have an advantage — I carried an 85-punder back last year.
This year, it was hard t tell whether my prize r the ne chsen by my 14-year-ld brther, Jasn, was the winner. Unfrtunately we frgt t weigh them befre taking ut their insides, but I was determined t prve my pint. All f us were hard at wrk at the kitchen table, with my mm filming the annual event. I’m unsure nw why I thught frcing my head inside the pumpkin wuld settle the matter, but it seemed t make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting n the table, hle uppermst, I bent ver and pressed my head against the pening. At first I gt jammed just abve my eyes and then, as I went n with my task, unwilling t quit, my nse briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed t put my whle head int it, like a crk (软木塞) frced int a bttle. I was able t straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting n my shulders.
My excitement was shrt-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m ging t set it dwn, nw,” I said, and with Jasn helping t supprt its weight, I bent back ver the table t give it smewhere t rest. It was nly when I tried t remve my head that I realized getting ut was ging t be less straightfrward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nse gt in the way. I gt int a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and mved my head arund trying t find the right angle, but it was n use. “I can’t get it ut!” I shuted, my vice sunding unnaturally lud in the enclsed space.
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It was five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger. The air inside the hllw vegetable was full f my anxius breath. I culd hear my sister’s laughter and Jasn’s muffled vice talking abut cutting the giant thing pen. “N! Nt my precius pumpkin!” I prtested. Eventually, Dad helped me adjust my bdy t a mre relaxed psitin, and pulled the pumpkin gently ff my head. Hair in knts, nse and chain cvered in pumpkin flesh, I let ut a sigh f relief. That’s when I realized the camera had been rlling the whle time!
The vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween.I lked just like a pumpkin head in it. Embarrassed and a little annyed, I fled t my rm, but Mm stpped me. “Yu haven’t read the cmments yet.” I scrlled dwn the screen and marveled at the stries the viewers shared abut Hallween. One girl recalled celebrating it with her brthers and sisters, and thanked us fr “bringing her hme”. The wrds brught warmth t my heart and tears t my eyes. I felt lucky t be a part f this mischievus yet lving family. (171 wrds)
出彩表达积累(出自原文及范文)
1.hllw adj. 中空的；空心的
2.muffled adj.沉闷的；模糊不清的
3.sigh n.叹气；叹息
4.marvel v.感到惊奇；大为赞叹
5.mischievus adj.顽皮的；捣蛋的
6.scrll dwn 向下滚动
7.Eventually, Dad helped me adjust my bdy t a mre relaxed psitin, and pulled the pumpkin gently ff my head.
最后，爸爸帮我把身体调整到一个比较放松的姿势，轻轻地把南瓜从我头上扯下来。(对动作的生动描写)
8.The wrds brught warmth t my heart and tears t my eyes.
这些话温暖了我的心，使我热泪盈眶。(对神态的生动描写)
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It was five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger.Jasn suggested using a knife t cut the pumpkin pen. I waved my hands wildly in prtest at the plan. “Then yu need t find a way f pulling yurself ut.” My dad said in a calm, cl vice. His vice settled my nerves. I was cnscius that my nse was acting as an impediment t my escape. With stretching ut my face and biting int the pumpkin, I surmunted the large bstacle and managed t pull my head ut. A ripple f excitement ran thrugh us but the first thing I saw was the camera.
The vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween. In the space f a week, it had been viewed ver a millin times. It filled Mm with greater astnishment. Rarely had a pumpkin’s vide had s many hits as this ne. Dangerus as it is, sme viewers’ curisity was t strng t resist. They left messages describing the feelings they had while watching it. Sme laughed at me, while thers praised my parents, wh remained calm thrughut. Lking thrugh these reviews, the sunlight peeking thrugh ur , Dad’s calm smile reflected his mtt “All’s well with us, never fear”. (186 wrds)
出彩表达积累(出自原文及范文)
1. nerve n.神经质；神经紧张
2. cnscius adj.意识到；注意到
3. impediment n.妨碍；阻碍；障碍
4. surmunt v.克服；解决
5. bstacle n.障碍；阻碍；绊脚石
6. ripple n.波纹；细浪；涟漪
7. His vice settled my nerves. 他的声音使我安定下来。(无灵主语)
8. It filled Mm with greater astnishment.这使母亲尤为惊讶。(对情绪的生动描写)
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I was stuck fr five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger. Sweating and nearly tearing, I culd imagine hw silly and strange I was at that mment based n the cntinuing laughter frm my parents and Jasn. With every angle tried in vain fr my nse's preventin, I was verwhelmed by a feeling f extreme regret and annyance. At last, Dad determined t break the pumpkin with the help f the sharp knife. "It's dne!" the vice frm my dad seemed t be the mst beautiful meldy, and a breath f fresh air eventually entered. With my head getting ut f the pumpkin and my bdy straightening, what I had seen was clse-up- camera. My dear mm was engaged in filming my embarrassing and awkward situatin when her daughter was in suffering!
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That vide was psted the day befre Hallween.T ur surprise, the vide managed t catch much attentin frm peple nline, racking up hundreds f thusands f views. Neighbrs and friend recgnized the pulling head persn was me and regarded me as a celebrity. It was when sme reprters and TV statins called fr interview that I truly realized hw ht and ppular this vide became. During Hallween, which was a festival f trick and treat, I tricked myself instead. Thugh I was dissatisfied with my ugly gesture and stupid image, I was satisfied with the happiness and fun that I brught t thers. Undubtedly, it became the mst unfrgettable Hallween even if I still had n idea f whse pumpkin was heavier yet.
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Paragraph 1：I was stuck fr five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger. Althugh I was panicking, my family fund my flish display mre cmical than dangerus. T my dismay, instead f trying t help, Jasn reached fr his phne. While mm anddad wrked hard t help calm me dwn in between fits f laughter, Jasn recrded the whle rdeal. He was determined t keep a vide recrd f the events in its full entirety, surely t tease me with it fr a lng time t cme. Pull as I might, my head culdn’t budge. Finally, after sme live il t help ease the frictin and a final pull with all my might, I stumbled back t the grund - my head free and the pumpkin firmly grasped by mm and dad.
Paragraph 2：That vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween. If I didn’t feel humiliated enugh at hme, nw I get t live with my flishness in schl as well. It was nt lng befre I was given the nickname “Pumpkin Head”, and it stuck. The nickname culd nt cme at a better time; my friends begged me t seriusly cnsider putting my head back in the pumpkin fr ur annual trick-r-treating adventures tmrrw night. At this pint, I culd nt d anything but smile and chuckle alng with the rest f my friends. Acts f flishness can happen t anybdy. After all, I wuld have dne the same t Jasn r my friends if they were the nes stuck in the pumpkin. Cme Hallween night, I figured might as well be a gd sprt and play alng with the jke. I went arund my cmmunity with my friends, trick-r-treating with my head in anther pumpkin that mm and dad had fund fr me. This time, I made sure t cut a big enugh hle.
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I was stuck fr five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger. The hard pumpkin weighed stubbrnly upn my shulder, nt wanting t budge at all. Thrugh the thick wall f the pumpkin’s meaty shell, I culd hear my mm andJasn struggling t hld back their laughter while supprting me t pull my versized range astrnaut helmet ff. I attempted the artful remval f pumpkin head calling ut all f my hidden gymnastic abilities in ways that I knew I never culd have mved. T put it simply, my bdy was like an ctpus crawling ut f a brrwed cnch shell, and my mm captured all the tactful escape n camera.
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That vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween. Never had I ever felt s embarrassed but never had I ever been s famus! Instantly, withut a few hurs, the vide went viral. My emtins were s cnflicted between whether I shuld be happy r sad. As it turned ut, dad managed t hld n t the pumpkin and keep it steady s that I culd perfrm my dance rutine. Tgether, the chregraphy appeared quite hilarius. Until tday, I am still unsure what t make f that unfrgettable Hallween and super thankful fr my dad’s rescue.
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I was stuck fr five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger. Dad held nt pumpkin steadily and mm pulled my bdy. In the meantime, Jasn burst int laughter and jked: “Sticking yur head int the pumpkin wuld nt cunt fr extra weight!” Frtunately, I gt my head ut f the pumpkin.I saw Jasn hlding his phne at me: “I am ging t pst this nline and yu are ging t be famus!” Finally, we came tan agreement that he may pst the vide, but I am the winner f this year’s pumpkin cntest.
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That vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween. I am t embarrassed t see watch the vide, let alne seeing my friends’ cmments! “It has ver 100 views already!” Jasn annunced triumphantly at breakfast. “Then let it be!” I pretended t be nt bthered. At the cafeteria during lunch, my friend Nathan greeted me smirkingly, “I heard smene had a little t much pumpkin ver the weekend.” I ignred his mcking tne and respnded prudly: “Smene might have, but smene als wn the pumpkin cntest!”
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One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tm, had driven three hurs t camp vernight by a lake in the frest. Unfrtunately, n the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started t quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was s angry that she said t Tm. “I'm ging t find a better spt fr us t camp" and walked away.
With n path t fllw,Jane just walked n fr quite a lng time. After she had climbed t a high place. she turned arund, hping t see the lake. T her surprise, she saw nthing but frest and, far beynd, a snwcapped muntain tp. She suddenly realized that she was lst.
“Tm! "she cried. "Help!"
N reply. If nly she had nt left her mbile phne in that bag with Tm. Jane kept mving, but the farther she walked, the mre cnfused she became. As night was beginning t fall, Jane was s tired that she had t stp fr the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much t be with Tm and her family. She wanted t hld him and tell him hw much she lved him.
Jane rse at the break f day, hungry and thirsty. She culd hear water trickling (滴落)smewhere at a distance. Quickly she fllwed the sund t a stream. T her great jy,she als saw sme berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling strnger nw. Jane began t walk alng the stream and hpe it wuld lead her t the lake.
As she picked her way carefully alng the stream, Jane heard a helicpter. Is that fr me? Unfrtunately, the trees made it impssible fr peple t see her frm abve. A few minutes later, anther helicpter flew verhead. Jane tk ff her yellw bluse, thinking that she shuld g t an pen area and flag them if they came back again.
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It was daybreak when Jane wke up.
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But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an abslute darkness ruled the frest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay dwn near a stne, missing her family at a distance. All the fantastic memry crwded in and she culdn't help crying, "Hadn't I quarreled with Tm, walked away and climbed t the high place, I wuldn't be trapped in this awful place, cnfrnted with the danger f dying." She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
It was daybreak when Jane wke up. Weak as she was, she struggled t her feet, cntinuing searching fr assistance. T her great jy, a helicpter was flying verhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her yellw bluse and spared n effrt t yell s as t attract thers'attentin. Frtunately, she was eventually nticed and brught int the helicpter. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expressin f relief. As tightly as pssible, she hugged him and was t thrilled t say anything. Besides, they agreed never t quarrel again, determining t live the life t the fullest.
【解析】
首先，在逻辑上，要做到了合理合情：起初，主人公身陷森林，内心充满了悔恨，在面对困难时焦虑、畏惧；之后，主人公努力求生，最终获救，并且领悟到了一定的人生道理。纵观整个故事，情节发展不仅符合两段给出的开头所限定的情景要求，而且还设置了一定的悬念，增强了故事的可读性。
文章第一句 "an abslute darkness ruled the frest" 中， "rule" 一词就使用了拟人的修辞手法，让森林阴森黑暗的一面展露无遗，同时描绘出主人公身处绝境的紧迫性。在 "Eager and excited, she flagged her yellw bluse…" 一句中，直接将情绪形容词放在句首，使用了非谓语动词的语法，表达精练。
此外， "There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expressin f relief." 一句中，使用了几个短句，却包含了两处非谓语动词语法，同时活用了 "wear" 一词，把两个人相见时的场景生动地描绘了出来。
【词汇拓展】
1) 表示并列关系的过渡词：and, as well as, r ，Nt nly … but als
2) 表示转折关系的过渡词：but, yet, hwever , althugh , thugh …
3) 表示时间关系的过渡词：first, secnd, third, and then, finally, after, befre, after a few days, at last, at that time, later, in the past, immediately, in the meanwhile, when, while, then, after that …
2017年11月浙江卷
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A vacatin with my mther
I had an interesting childhd: It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because f my mther-lving, sweet, and yet absent-minded and frgetful. One strange family trip we tk when I was eleven tells a lt abut her.
My tw sets f grandparents lived in Clrad and Nrth Dakta, and my parents decided t spend a few weeks driving t thse states and seeing all the sights alng the way. As the first day f ur trip apprached, David, my eight-year-ld brther, and I unwillingly said gd-bye t all f ur friends. Wh knew if we’d ever see them again? Finally, the mment f ur departure arrived, and we laded suitcases, bks, games, camping equipment, and a tent int the car and bravely drve ff. We bravely drve ff again tw hurs later after we’d returned hme t get the purse and traveler’s checks Mm had frgtten.
David and I were always a little nervus when using gas statin bathrms if Mm was driving while Dadslept:” Yu stand utside the dr and play lkut while I g, and I’ll stand utside the dr and play lkut while yu g.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Hney, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gsh… I thught they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t abut t take any chances.
On the furth r fifth night, we had truble finding a htel with a vacancy. After driving in vain fr sme time, Mm suddenly gt a great idea: Why didn’t we find a huse with a likely-lking backyard and ask if we culd set up tent there? David and I became nervus. T ur great relief, Dad turned dwn the idea. Mm never culd understand ur bjectins.If a strange family shwed up n her frnt drsteps, Mm wuld have been delighted. She thinks everyne in the wrld as as nice as she is. We finally fund a vacancy in the next twn.
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1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us.
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We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way.
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us.But then we were half an hur away frm the htel, where the tentwas left behind. Dad recmmended buying a new ne, while Mm insisted n ur ging back t fetch it, saying "Frgetful peple like me may lse things repeatedly, s it's unwise t give up the tent." Finally, we gt back the tent and hit the rad again. If Mm hadn't been that absent-minded, it wuld have saved us the truble f ging back again and again.
We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. One day, twards evening, we fund a great campingsite at the ft f a high muntain. Davidand I helped Dad put up the tent, and Mm was busy preparing supper. When the setting sun cast an range light ver the muntains, the tent was set up and the meal was ready. Sitting arund the camp fire, we talked and laughed. Every time we mentined the funny incidents f the jurney a pleasant smile wuld spread ver Mm's face.
解析
文章中文大意：我的母亲很健忘(absent-minded and frgetful)，一家四口去祖父母在的省自驾旅游，途中发生了有趣的事情，比如爸爸叫我盯住妈妈，以防她开车的时候睡着：
第一段开头句：我们拿出来新买的帐篷
第二段开头句：我们愉快地欣赏路边的景色
关键词： mm dad David (弟弟), tent, camping, nice, truble, frgetful, absent-minded
实战解析
首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事(尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个frgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的趣事)(也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一个点)；
其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景： 此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只有景色描述； 例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色(同时回忆往事)，最终把故事的落脚点放在 "家人的感情" "亲情" "生活的乐趣" "与妈妈一起的趣事" 等等角度都可以的；当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题；总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多；
再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰程度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度；高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型结构一定程度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断；说到语法丰富性方面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免句型单一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生对句型掌握的不够充分。应该在文章写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。例如：They said it was such a beautiful day that they wuld remember it frever.(such… that结构)。 由于阅卷老师在评卷时的时间十分有限，在作文中放入显耀的连接词可以帮助老师快速抓住文章结构，促使老师更好地理解文章主旨，同时清晰的连接词可以显示作者写作时严谨的逻辑。例如：upn ne's arrival, then, hwever, besides, while等。
2017年6月浙江卷
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
On a bright, warm July afternn, Mac Hllan, a primary schl teacher, was cycling frm his hme t Alaska with his friends. One f his friends had stpped t make a bicycle repair, but they had encuraged Mac t carry n, and they wuld catch up with him sn. As Mac pedaled (骑行) alng alne, he thught fndly f his wife and tw yung daughters at hme. He hped t shw them this beautiful place smeday.
Then Mac heard quick and lud breathing behind him. “Man, that's a big dg!” he thught. But when he lked t the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dg at all, but a wlf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac’s heart jumped. He fund ut his can f hear spray. With ne hand n the bars, he fired the spray at the wlf. A bright red clud envelped the animal, and t Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back f Mac's bike, tearing pen his tent bag. He fired at the wlf a secnd time, and again, it fell back nly t quickly restart the chase(追赶)。
Mac was pedaling hard nw. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful nt t shw dwn. He saw a steep uphill climb befre him. He knew that nce he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wlf’s teeth wuld be tearing int his flesh.
At this mment, Paul and Beeky were driving their car n their way t Alaska. They didn’t think much f it when they saw tw cyclists repairing their bike n the side f the rad. A bit later, they sptted what they, t, assumed was a dg running alngside a man n a bike. As they gt clser, they realized that the dg was a wlf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in frnt f it as the wlf was catching up fast, just a dzen yards away nw.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文文中标有下划线的关键词语：
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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The car abrubtly stpped in frnt f him.
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A few minutes later,the ther tw cyclists arrived.
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The car abruptly stpped in frnt f him. Paul and Becky gt ut f the carimmediately t give help. But with the bare hands, they didn't dare t fight with the wlf. Hwever, they still apprached t the wlf bravely. At the same time, the wlf als nticed them and turned its head back, shuting ludly at Paul and Becky. Mac then jumped ff the bicycle and was ready t fight against the wlf. That reached deadlck.
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A few minutes later, the ther tw cyclists arrived. They fund the dangerus situatin, where three men circled the wlf. Mac's friends als jumped ff their bicycles and jined the fight with the wlf. Mre and mre cars stpped. Sme drivers tk ut the sticks frm the cars, and sme tk ut the knives, even the guns twards the wlf. Just at that time, the wlf might feel the threats frm the peple, starting t withdraw. Sn, it ran away ff the rad and disappeared in the distance.
2018年6月浙江卷
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was summer, and my dad wanted t treat me t a vacatin like never befre. He decided t take me n a trip t the Wild West.
We tk a plane t Albuquerque, a big city in the state f New Mexic. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternn. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up frm the airprt and drve us up t his farm in Pecs.
His wife Tina cked us a delicius dinner and we gt t knw his sns Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestrm f the farm huse listening t the frgs and water rlling dwn the river nearby. Very early in the mrning, Uncle Paul wke us up t have breakfast. "The day starts at dawn n my farm," he said. After breakfast, I went t help Aunt Tina feed the chickens. while my dad went with Uncle Paul t take the sheep ut t graze(吃草). I was impressed t see my dad and Uncle Paul riding hrses. They lked really cl.
In the afternn, I asked Uncle Paul if I culd take a hse ride, and he said yes, as lng as my dad went with me. I wasn’t ging t take a hrse ride by myself anyway. S, my dad and I put n ur new cwby hats, gt n ur hrses, and headed slwly twards the muntains. "Dn’t be late fr supper," Uncle Paul cried, "and keep t the track s that yu dn’t get lst!" "OK! " my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his fam huse were ut f sight. It was s peaceful and quiet and the clrs f the brwn rcks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternn sun mixed t create a magic scene. It lked like a beautiful wven(编织的)blanket spread ut upn the grund just fr us.
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2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语：
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse.
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We had n idea where we were and it gt dark.
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But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. Jane had t stay alne in the frest fr anther cld night. At that mment (时间), she felt a little sad, but she wasn’t s frightened (情感). She reminded herself cnstantly, (心理) “ Tm must have called fr thse helicpters. Maybe (情感) he was in ne f them and will return sn(动作)! I have t guide him tmrrw.” She felt asleep (动作) and dreamed f seeing Tm (动作).
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It was daybreak when Jane wke up. She ate sme berries and then(时间) walked alng the stream, hping (心理) t find a suitable place t guide the helicpter. She walked and walked,exhausted but full f hpe. Suddenly (时间), she sptted (动作) a huge flat rck. She managed (动作) t climb nt it and waited with patience. The mment (时间) the helicpter appeared (动作) again. The nearer it gt (动作), the mre she waved (动作) the yellw bluse. T her great jy, (情感) the helicpter didn’t miss Jane this time and it landed near the big rck slwly. Tm jumped ff the helicpter and rushed (动作) twards Jane. They hugged each ther tightly (情感) and burst int tears (情感).
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The car abrubtly stpped in frnt f him.Mac jumped ff his bicycle and dashed fr the back dr f the car. It was lcked. He then ran arund t the passenger dr, but it was lcked, as well, s he began t climb thrugh the pen windw.When sptting this ,Paul quickly unlcked the dr, and the frightened man dived in,slamming the dr behind him.Paul lked ut the back windw and saw the wlf standing ver Mac’s bike as if it were a kill. Shrtly after, the animal ran ff.
A few minutes later,the ther tw cyclists arrived .Mac emerged frm the car and hugged his friends. “I thught I was ging t die,” Mac cried t them.Mac retrieved(取回) his bicycle, and the three men resumed(继续) their rad trip, agreeing t keep in ne anther’s sight line. A few miles dwn the rad, Mac pulled ver and burst int tears.“The rest f the trip was amazing, but I had t let the frmer emtin ut.”
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us. Mm insisted that we must make full use f it since we had brught it. David and I lked at Dad, hping he culd stp her crazy idea. T ur great disappintment, he agreed. We spent a whle afternn seeking a nicecamping place and set up ur tent befre the night fell. It was the first time that I had thught mm culd be wise as I admiring ur stunning tent. “Oh, I frgt the pillws!” what a miscnceptin. Despite the ache f my neck, we had sme great nights.
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We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. The bright blue sky, the limitless green grass, the grup f sheep, the setting sun and the cuntless stars in the curtain f nights kept me spellbund. Nt nly did we see the picturesque scenery, we als managed t cnsider mm’s scandals as a kind f fun.I reaaly lve my Mum.
T ur relief, we arrived at grandparents’ place and went back t ur hme with all f fur peple. It was s frtunate t see my friends again.
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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse. Instinctively, I yelled ut lud, pulling back the reins hard in rder t stp the hrse frm hurting the little creature. Badly startled by the sudden incident, the hrse sped ff thetrack int anther directin. Dad fllwed clsely behind, calling ut t tell me hw t sthe the terrified hrse and I did as tld. Finally, the hrse calmed dwn, but we seemed t get lst, unable t g back t the muntain rad.
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We had n idea where we were and it was getting dark. Wandering arund, we were still stuck in the dilemma. Much t ur delight, the sund f water in the distance caught ur attentin and drve us t the riverbank. Dad prpsed that we shuld walk alng the river which may lead us t the farm huse and nthing seemed better than that. Time appeared t be merrier and shrter when I stayed tgether with Dad and befre lng, the farm huse came int sight. What a thrilling but memrable experience it was!
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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse. I immediately grew fnd f the furry rabbit and called ut excitedly, “Dad! Lk!” Alarmed, the rabbit ran away in a flash. I fllwed it eagerly, hping t catch it as my trphy fr the trip. My dad just fllwed me, knwing it was impssible t stp me. We tracked the rabbit fr abut ten minutes until it gt cmpletely ut f sight. Depressed and tired, I suggested ging back. But apparently, we had diverged frm the track Uncle Paul warned us t keep. (86 wrds)
We had n idea where we were and it was getting dark. The thught that we might have gt lst in such darkness sent shivers dwn my spine. Tears f fear and regret filled my eyes. Frtunately, Dad was nt s panicked as I was. He kept silent and listened very carefully as he tk my hrse rein and led the way. We had wandered fr what seemed like ages when suddenly a river came int sight. Hpefully, we culd find ur way back t the farm huse if we fllwed the river. Finally, we arrived hme safely just in time fr supper, but what an experience! It turns ut there’s always a way ut f any plight(困境) as lng as we stay calm. (114 wrds)
2020年1月浙江卷
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
"I'm ging t miss yu s much, Pppy, " said the tall, thin teenager. He bent dwn t hug his ld friend gdbye. He std up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying nt t let his emtins(情绪)get the better f him.
His parents were nt quite able t keep theirs under cntrl. They had driven their sn several hurs ut f twn t the university where he wuld sn be living and studying. It was time t say gdbye fr nw at least. The family hugged and smiled thrugh misty eyes and then laughed.
The by lifted the last bag nt his shulder, and flashed a bright smile. "I guess this is it, " he said. "I'll see yu back hme in a mnth, kay? " His parents ndded, and they watched as he walked ut f sight int the crwds f hundreds f students and parents. The by's mther turned t the dg, "Okay, Pppy, time t g back hme."
The huse seemed quiet as a tmb withut the by living there. All that week, Pppy didn't seem interested in her dinner, her favrite ty, r even in her daily walk. Her wners were sad t, but they knew their sn wuld be back t visit. Pppy didn't.
They ffered the dg sme f her favrite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit n the sfa, but the ld girl just wasn't her usual cheerful self. Her wners started t get wrried. "What shuld we d t cheer Pppy up? " asked Dad. "We've tried everything."
"I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy." smiled Mm. "Withut anybdy left in the huse but us, this place culd use a bit f fun. Let's get a little dg fr Pppy."
It didn't take lng befre they walked thrugh the frnt dr carrying a big bx. Pppy welcmed them hme as usual, but when she saw the bx. She stpped. She put her nse n it. Her tail began wagging(摆动)ever s slwly, then faster as she caught the smell.
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1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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Dad put the bx n the grund and pened the tp. A shiny little wet nse ppped up. Then tw fluffy paws. Next the bx tipped ver sideways, and ut tumbled a mass f wiggly glden silliness. Pppy was amazed. She wagged furiusly. She barked with jy. She smiled, her tngue llling ut as she investigated the surprise. The little pup was nt shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping arund the lder dg. "That didn't take lng, "remarked Mm, as bth dgs went raring arund the huse in an imprmptu game f chase. Dad laughed.
A few weeks later, the by arrived hme frm university. He had missed Pppy and was lking frward t seeing her. When he bent dwn t give her a big hug, he fell ver in surprise as a small glden clud came racing up t lick his face t. "Oh my gsh, wh is this? " he exclaimed. His parents laughed at the lk f shck n his face. "That's Pee-wee, "said Dad. "I can't believe yu gt yurselves a puppy!" "We didn't, " replied Mm. "This puppy is fr Pppy!"
解析
文章主线已知线索：
男主人公离开家上大学，他家的狗Pppy自主人公走后一直郁郁寡欢，母亲想了个主意，打算再找一只小狗陪伴Pppy。他们将小狗装在盒子里放在门前，Pppy闻到气味后尾巴摇得快了起来，情绪开始发生变化。
可续写线索:
Pppy看到小狗后的行为表现，以及对小狗的描写，侧重动作描写，写出Pppy由郁郁寡欢变为喜悦欢快，男主人公回家，首先表达出他对Pppy的想念和牵挂，其次描写他和新来的小狗的有怎样的遇见和 "火花" ，侧重动作和人物对话。
高分句型：
1.情感的表述：She smiled, her tngue llling ut as she investigated the surprise. The little pup was nt shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping arund the lder dg.
2.When he bent dwn t give her a big hug, he fell ver in surprise as a small glden clud came racing up t lick his face t.
3.人物对话
"Oh my gsh, wh is this? " he exclaimed. His parents laughed at the lk f shck n his face. "That's Pee-wee, " said Dad. "I can't believe yu gt yurselves a puppy!" "We didn't, " replied Mm. "This puppy is fr Pppy!"
"That didn't take lng, " remarked Mm, as bth dgs went raring arund the huse in an imprmptu game f chase. Dad laughed.
2020年7月山东卷
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
The Meredith family lived in a small cmmunity. As the ecnmy was in decline, sme peple in the twn had lst their jbs. Many f their families were struggling t make ends meet. Peple were trying t help each ther meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a mst kind and thughtful wman. She spent a great deal f time visiting the pr. She knew they had prblems, and they needed all kinds f help. When she had time, she wuld bring fd and medicine t them.
One mrning she tld her children abut a family she had visited the day befre. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, wh tk care f him and culd nt g ut t wrk, and their little by. The little by - his name was Bernard - had interested her very much.
“I wish yu culd see him,” she said t her wn children, Jhn, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help t his mther. He wants very much t earn sme mney, but I dn't see what he can d.”
After their mther left the rm, the children sat thinking abut Bernard. “I wish we culd help him t earn mney,” said Clara. “His family is suffering s much.”
“S d I,” said Harry. “We really shuld d smething t assist them.”
Fr sme mments, Jhn said nthing, but, suddenly, he sprang t his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a slutin that we can all help accmplish (完成).”
The ther children als jumped up all attentin. When Jhn had an idea, it was sure t be a gd ne. I’ll tell yu what we can d,” said Jhn. “Yu knw that big bx f cm Uncle Jhn sent us? Well, we can make ppcrn (爆米花), and put it int paper bags, and Bernard can take it arund t the huses and sell it.”
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When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn's idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t.
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When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn's idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t. Very sn the children were busy ppping the crn, while their mther went ut t buy paper bags. When she came back, she brught Bernard with her.
With everything ready, Bernard started ut n his new business. Unexpectedly, he returned quickly with an empty basket and ten nickels in his mittens. After he ran hme t take the mney t his mther, Jhn asked Mrs. Meredith if they culd cntinue t help Bernard. Mrs. Meredith said "Yes" and asked Jhn t take charge f the wrk. Fr many weeks, Jhn saw that the crn was all ppped, the paper bags filled and arranged in the basket when Bernard arrived. Every week Bernard had at least fifty cents t take hme, and ften mre. And all this was because f Jhn's bright idea, and the way he carried it ut.
解析(1)写作思路
本篇书面表达为读后续写，给定的阅读材料主要讲述了Meredith夫人鼓励她的孩子们去帮助一个穷人家的孩子Bernard去赚钱，然后她的儿子约翰想通过爆米花来帮助Bernard。续写的第一段可以围绕Meredith夫人的孩子们所做的准备工作来展开，比如准备爆米花、纸袋等；续写的第二段可以围绕Meredith夫人的孩子们(尤其是约翰)在成功帮助Bernard赚取第一桶金后如何继续助力。由于描述的是发生过的事情，因此续写的两段的时态都应以一般过去时为主，人称以第三人称为主。
(2)重点词汇/句型
a. be busy ding sth. 忙于做某事
b. ask sb. t d sth. 让某人做某事
c. take charge f sth. 负责某事
d. at least 至少
e. carry ut 实施，执行
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第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single gal: t phtgraph plar bears. We were staying at a research camp utside "the plar bear capital f the wrld"—the twn f Churchill in Manitba, Canada.
Taking pictures f plar bears is amazing but als dangerus. Plar bears—like all wild animals—shuld be phtgraphed frm a safe distance. When I'm face t face with a plar bear, I like it t be thrugh a camera with a telepht lens. But smetimes, that is easier said than dne. This was ne f thse times.
As Elli and I cked dinner, a yung male plar bear wh was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled ur garlic bread.
The hungry bear fllwed his nse t ur camp, which was surrunded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He std n his back legs and pushed at the wden fence psts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actins we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pts hard, and fired blank shtgun shells int the air. Smetimes lud nises like these will scare bears ff. Nt this plar bear thugh—he just kept trying t tear dwn the fence with his massive paws(爪子).
I radied the camp manager fr help. He tld me a helicpter was n its way, but it wuld be 30 minutes befre it arrived. Making the best f this clse encunter(相遇), I tk sme pictures f the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wuldn't last thrugh 30 mre minutes f the bear's punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears' eyes, but desn't hurt them. S I apprached ur uninvited guest slwly and, thrugh the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry rar(吼叫), the bear ran t the lake t wash his eyes.
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A few minutes later, the bear headed back t ur camp. Munting anger mingled with hunger verwhelming him, he smashed his paws frantically against the wire fence, thrusting his sharp claws at us. Panicked as we were, Elli and I squealed at the tp f ur lungs, wave ur fists at him and stamped heavily n the grund in an attempt t intimidate and scare him away. T ur dismay, all these effrts were in vain. This sturdy bear relentlessly banged and shved the wden psts which were evidently n the verge f cllapsing! This bulky and furius beast within a stne's thrw, I flinched back and huddled with Elli tightly. Chilly winds whipping ur faces, I culd hear nthing but the sund f ur hearts thrbbing vilently in ur chests.
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At that very mment, the helicpter arrived. The gusting wind frm the hvering vehicles wept away ur chking fear immediately. Out f the helicpter descended a rpe t haul us up. Thrilled yet relieved, we clutched the rpe and eventually landed n the helicpter safe and sund. While verlking the chunky bear frm high abve, I was amazed t spt this stubbrn guy had crushed the fence and headed tward ur camp fr the inviting garlic bread. At this nce-in-a-lifetime mment, I reached int my backpack and pulled ut the camera, phtgraphing that impressive scene. Gazing at his brad back in the melting ice field, I wndered if it was the warmer planet that had frced the bear t hunt fr fd frm the human regins.
解析
【分析故事内容和所给段落开头】
主要讲述了作者和妻子前往被称为 "北极熊之都" 的加拿大丘吉尔镇拍摄北极熊。夫妻二人做饭之时，一头饥饿的雄性幼熊循着面包的蒜香味，靠近了营地，猛烈撞击营地边上的铁丝围栏，试图击溃它。作者和妻子使出浑身解数，想吓退这头熊，不料他 "不破篱笆誓不归" 。无奈之下，作者求助营地管理员，被告知救援直升机要30分钟后才能赶到，只得先尝试用胡椒喷雾喷洒北极熊的眼睛，希望他知难而退。果然，眼睛被辣椒水刺激后，他愤怒跑开，到河边去清洗眼睛。
第一段：几分钟之后，这头北极熊又回到了营地边……由故事发展可推知，该段重点描写夫妻二人如何再次对付熊及两人在过程中的紧张害怕。
第二段：在这千钧一发之际，直升机赶到了……该段出现直升机，可知二人获救。重点描述获救后的心情。
【词句拓展】
关键词组：
rugh treatment 粗暴对待
apprach sth 接近某物
thrust at 戳
give a gasp f relief 如释重负
高级句型：
非谓语作状语、宾语从句、定语从句：Gazing at his brad back in the melting ice field, I wndered if it was the warmer planet that had frced the bear t hunt fr fd frm the human regins. 凝视着融化的冰原上它宽阔的脊背，我想知道是不是地球变暖迫使它从人类地区寻找食物。
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阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Pumpkin (南瓜)carving at Hallween is a family traditin. We visit a lcal farm every Octber. In the pumpkin field, I cmpete with my three brthers and sister t seek ut the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have t carry ur pumpkins back hme, and as the eldest child I have an advantage — I carried an 85-punder back last year.
This year, it was hard t tell whether my prize r the ne chsen by my 14-year-ld brther, Jasn, was the winner. Unfrtunately we frgt t weigh them befre taking ut their insides, but I was determined t prve my pint. All f us were hard at wrk at the kitchen table, with my mm filming the annual event. I’m unsure nw why I thught frcing my head inside the pumpkin wuld settle the matter, but it seemed t make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting n the table, hle uppermst, I bent ver and pressed my head against the pening. At first I gt jammed just abve my eyes and then, as I went n with my task, unwilling t quit, my nse briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed t put my whle head int it, like a crk (软木塞) frced int a bttle. I was able t straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting n my shulders.
My excitement was shrt-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m ging t set it dwn, nw,” I said, and with Jasn helping t supprt its weight, I bent back ver the table t give it smewhere t rest. It was nly when I tried t remve my head that I realized getting ut was ging t be less straightfrward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nse gt in the way. I gt int a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and mved my head arund trying t find the right angle, but it was n use. “I can’t get it ut!” I shuted, my vice sunding unnaturally lud in the enclsed space.
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2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
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It was five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger. The air inside the hllw vegetable was full f my anxius breath. I culd hear my sister’s laughter and Jasn’s muffled vice talking abut cutting the giant thing pen. “N! Nt my precius pumpkin!” I prtested. Eventually, Dad helped me adjust my bdy t a mre relaxed psitin, and pulled the pumpkin gently ff my head. Hair in knts, nse and chain cvered in pumpkin flesh, I let ut a sigh f relief. That’s when I realized the camera had been rlling the whle time!
The vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween.I lked just like a pumpkin head in it. Embarrassed and a little annyed, I fled t my rm, but Mm stpped me. “Yu haven’t read the cmments yet.” I scrlled dwn the screen and marveled at the stries the viewers shared abut Hallween. One girl recalled celebrating it with her brthers and sisters, and thanked us fr “bringing her hme”. The wrds brught warmth t my heart and tears t my eyes. I felt lucky t be a part f this mischievus yet lving family. (171 wrds)
出彩表达积累(出自原文及范文)
1.hllw adj. 中空的；空心的
2.muffled adj.沉闷的；模糊不清的
3.sigh n.叹气；叹息
4.marvel v.感到惊奇；大为赞叹
5.mischievus adj.顽皮的；捣蛋的
6.scrll dwn 向下滚动
7.Eventually, Dad helped me adjust my bdy t a mre relaxed psitin, and pulled the pumpkin gently ff my head.
最后，爸爸帮我把身体调整到一个比较放松的姿势，轻轻地把南瓜从我头上扯下来。(对动作的生动描写)
8.The wrds brught warmth t my heart and tears t my eyes.
这些话温暖了我的心，使我热泪盈眶。(对神态的生动描写)
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It was five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger.Jasn suggested using a knife t cut the pumpkin pen. I waved my hands wildly in prtest at the plan. “Then yu need t find a way f pulling yurself ut.” My dad said in a calm, cl vice. His vice settled my nerves. I was cnscius that my nse was acting as an impediment t my escape. With stretching ut my face and biting int the pumpkin, I surmunted the large bstacle and managed t pull my head ut. A ripple f excitement ran thrugh us but the first thing I saw was the camera.
The vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween. In the space f a week, it had been viewed ver a millin times. It filled Mm with greater astnishment. Rarely had a pumpkin’s vide had s many hits as this ne. Dangerus as it is, sme viewers’ curisity was t strng t resist. They left messages describing the feelings they had while watching it. Sme laughed at me, while thers praised my parents, wh remained calm thrughut. Lking thrugh these reviews, the sunlight peeking thrugh ur , Dad’s calm smile reflected his mtt “All’s well with us, never fear”. (186 wrds)
出彩表达积累(出自原文及范文)
1. nerve n.神经质；神经紧张
2. cnscius adj.意识到；注意到
3. impediment n.妨碍；阻碍；障碍
4. surmunt v.克服；解决
5. bstacle n.障碍；阻碍；绊脚石
6. ripple n.波纹；细浪；涟漪
7. His vice settled my nerves. 他的声音使我安定下来。(无灵主语)
8. It filled Mm with greater astnishment.这使母亲尤为惊讶。(对情绪的生动描写)
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I was stuck fr five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger. Sweating and nearly tearing, I culd imagine hw silly and strange I was at that mment based n the cntinuing laughter frm my parents and Jasn. With every angle tried in vain fr my nse's preventin, I was verwhelmed by a feeling f extreme regret and annyance. At last, Dad determined t break the pumpkin with the help f the sharp knife. "It's dne!" the vice frm my dad seemed t be the mst beautiful meldy, and a breath f fresh air eventually entered. With my head getting ut f the pumpkin and my bdy straightening, what I had seen was clse-up- camera. My dear mm was engaged in filming my embarrassing and awkward situatin when her daughter was in suffering!
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That vide was psted the day befre Hallween.T ur surprise, the vide managed t catch much attentin frm peple nline, racking up hundreds f thusands f views. Neighbrs and friend recgnized the pulling head persn was me and regarded me as a celebrity. It was when sme reprters and TV statins called fr interview that I truly realized hw ht and ppular this vide became. During Hallween, which was a festival f trick and treat, I tricked myself instead. Thugh I was dissatisfied with my ugly gesture and stupid image, I was satisfied with the happiness and fun that I brught t thers. Undubtedly, it became the mst unfrgettable Hallween even if I still had n idea f whse pumpkin was heavier yet.
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Paragraph 1：I was stuck fr five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger. Althugh I was panicking, my family fund my flish display mre cmical than dangerus. T my dismay, instead f trying t help, Jasn reached fr his phne. While mm anddad wrked hard t help calm me dwn in between fits f laughter, Jasn recrded the whle rdeal. He was determined t keep a vide recrd f the events in its full entirety, surely t tease me with it fr a lng time t cme. Pull as I might, my head culdn’t budge. Finally, after sme live il t help ease the frictin and a final pull with all my might, I stumbled back t the grund - my head free and the pumpkin firmly grasped by mm and dad.
Paragraph 2：That vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween. If I didn’t feel humiliated enugh at hme, nw I get t live with my flishness in schl as well. It was nt lng befre I was given the nickname “Pumpkin Head”, and it stuck. The nickname culd nt cme at a better time; my friends begged me t seriusly cnsider putting my head back in the pumpkin fr ur annual trick-r-treating adventures tmrrw night. At this pint, I culd nt d anything but smile and chuckle alng with the rest f my friends. Acts f flishness can happen t anybdy. After all, I wuld have dne the same t Jasn r my friends if they were the nes stuck in the pumpkin. Cme Hallween night, I figured might as well be a gd sprt and play alng with the jke. I went arund my cmmunity with my friends, trick-r-treating with my head in anther pumpkin that mm and dad had fund fr me. This time, I made sure t cut a big enugh hle.
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I was stuck fr five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger. The hard pumpkin weighed stubbrnly upn my shulder, nt wanting t budge at all. Thrugh the thick wall f the pumpkin’s meaty shell, I culd hear my mm andJasn struggling t hld back their laughter while supprting me t pull my versized range astrnaut helmet ff. I attempted the artful remval f pumpkin head calling ut all f my hidden gymnastic abilities in ways that I knew I never culd have mved. T put it simply, my bdy was like an ctpus crawling ut f a brrwed cnch shell, and my mm captured all the tactful escape n camera.
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That vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween. Never had I ever felt s embarrassed but never had I ever been s famus! Instantly, withut a few hurs, the vide went viral. My emtins were s cnflicted between whether I shuld be happy r sad. As it turned ut, dad managed t hld n t the pumpkin and keep it steady s that I culd perfrm my dance rutine. Tgether, the chregraphy appeared quite hilarius. Until tday, I am still unsure what t make f that unfrgettable Hallween and super thankful fr my dad’s rescue.
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I was stuck fr five r six minutes thugh it felt much lnger. Dad held nt pumpkin steadily and mm pulled my bdy. In the meantime, Jasn burst int laughter and jked: “Sticking yur head int the pumpkin wuld nt cunt fr extra weight!” Frtunately, I gt my head ut f the pumpkin.I saw Jasn hlding his phne at me: “I am ging t pst this nline and yu are ging t be famus!” Finally, we came tan agreement that he may pst the vide, but I am the winner f this year’s pumpkin cntest.
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That vide was psted nline the Mnday befre Hallween. I am t embarrassed t see watch the vide, let alne seeing my friends’ cmments! “It has ver 100 views already!” Jasn annunced triumphantly at breakfast. “Then let it be!” I pretended t be nt bthered. At the cafeteria during lunch, my friend Nathan greeted me smirkingly, “I heard smene had a little t much pumpkin ver the weekend.” I ignred his mcking tne and respnded prudly: “Smene might have, but smene als wn the pumpkin cntest!”
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